D.D. Destroyer Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Let me know what you think... its my first card... so please!!! don't be to harsh! ^.^ Lore: If this monster attacks a face-down Defense Position monster, destroy that monster and remove it from play with this card's effect without flipping it face-up or damage calculation. At the End phase if this card attacked remove it from play. Remove from play one of your monsters on the field to special summon this card in face-up attack position. Remove from play on of your monsters from the field to special summon this in face-up attack position. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spiff! Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 That's...wow, not bad for a first card. A little problem with the image, but I'm sure it's the best you could do.Maybe crop off the black border? But the effect is actually well written, and quite fair. It ought to have a way of Special Summoning it from the RFG zone without outside help, though. Let's look at grammar.It's actually about right. A couple of mistakes I picked up though:"this card's effects" remove the 's' on effects."end phase" capitalize both words."destroy that monster and remove from play that monster immediately yada yada" should be "destroy that monster and remove it from play with this card's effect without flipping it face-up." I hope this helps, because it's my first post in this section for a looong time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trixter Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Them' OCG errors h've be point out. So, me saying dawg, that yo' ain't 2bad fo' a newbie(sup, like me) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 How would this effect be? "If this monster attacks a face-down Defense Position monster, destroy that monster and remove it from play with this card's effect without flipping it face-up or damage calculation. At the End phase if this card attacked remove it from play. Remove from play one of your monsters on the field to special summon this card in face-up attack position. Remove from play on of your monsters from the field to special summon this in face-up attack position." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dr. Percival Cox Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 This card is just epic for a new member. I've only given this rating once and you're new MAX/9.5. You get a Rep from me(a first for a new member). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Donquixote Doflamingo Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 not bad newbie. Better than my first card... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroke Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Good job. This beats my 1st card made. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 This card is just epic for a new member. I've only given this rating once and you're new MAX/9.5. You get a Rep from me(a first for a new member). Whoot!!! Happy dance time! :lol: Thanks for the rep! not bad newbie. Better than my first card... Good job. This beats my 1st card made. I haven't played for a while.. so i'm glad to hear that this card is pretty good! any words of advice for future cards? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Donquixote Doflamingo Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Check extra hard to see if you made silly OCG errors and use deviantart.com. that has good pics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~RoBoTiClOvEr~ Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 That is an excellent for a newbie. 9/9.5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 OCG has been pointed out, there's some capitalization errors, but nothing too big the effect is also quite balanced, great for a new member 9.4/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
£>-ShådøwBøx-<3 Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 nice card me likes 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Cursed Reaction Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Hey, pretty good. Have you changed the OCG yet? I like the effect. 9.4/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dr. Percival Cox Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 I can tell this will be a hot thread by tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Cursed Reaction Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 I think someone else is doing a D.D. thread. Maybe you could ask for inspiration in a PM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EHN. Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Amirite in saying that you have made another 5 cards in the concluding 7 hours ? IF not then this is not your first card. Anyway 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lordofd123 Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 I couldn't believe the time when my friend beat me with the card you posted, it was a great game of Yugioh, hail Pegasus for making this excellent game. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Killey Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 How would this effect be? I've bolded the corrections to your OCG."You can remove from play 1 monster you control' date='[/b'] to Special Summon this card in face-up Attack Position. If this monster attacks a face-down Defense Position monster, destroy the monster and remove it from play immediately with this card's effect without flipping it face-up or applying damage calculation. During your End Phase, if this card attacked it is removed from play." Remember that all phases have to be capitalized as well as the battle position of that monster. Most of the time if there is an effect that activates during a specific phase you have to include the clause "during the/your". Optional effects have to state "you can" in them otherwise they become mandatory effects. Not sure if that was your aim in this card or not. Check for sentence order as certain ways of arranging the wording makes the card effect flow a lot better and prevents confusion. Card effect is very fitting for the card name and to the overal D.D. monster theme. The image should be cropped so that the any signature or logos are removed from the image. It'll also help make the character look bigger and stand out more. Type, Level, Attribute, Stats and effect all seem fair as well. From a TCG/OCG perspective it's definitely a realistic enough card that it could be an actual card. Seems best applicable in a Dimension deck with Dimensiononal Fissure and/or Macro Cosmos. Can get good use if you combo this card's first effect with D.D. Survivor/D.D. Scoutplane. It's a nice card to follow the theme but not sure if I would main deck it in a D.D. Deck as D.D. Survivor and Scout Plane are better overall and more abusable with other cards. Just have to create a situation where the opponent is forced to set a monster besides using Book of Moon or Book of Eclipse. Would be good against Gravekeeper Decks and with their new support they're probably going to see more play as they are one of the more consistent anit-meta builds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted December 30, 2009 Report Share Posted December 30, 2009 Pic is bad but OCG is okOCG has been corrected allready7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Hey' date=' pretty good. Have you changed the OCG yet? I like the effect. 9.4/10[/quote']I have changed the effect.. just need to know if there is an easy way to post card pictures.. i printed my screen.. and cropped.. put the card in photobucket and then uploaded it with the image.. so idk.. is there an easier way? Amirite in saying that you have made another 5 cards in the concluding 7 hours ? IF not then this is not your first card. This was my first card.. i made the others after this because i was getting ideas and really really bored at my stupid job.. but idk if i even care for the others.. if you don't believe this is a first.. then whatever though. Pic is bad but OCG is okOCG has been corrected allready7/10 whats wrong with the picture besides the symbol in the bottom right corner? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 bumpity bump bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
賢狼ホロ Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 I see no card... ._. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 FIXEDEDEDEDEDED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
賢狼ホロ Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Picture looks bad without a background. Effect is nice!But, I would rather have it a little stronger as a level 4 card. ; D [spoiler=(Another) OCG Fix]You can remove from play 1 monster you control to Special Summon this card in face-up Attack Position. If this monster attacks a face-down Defense Position monster, destroy and remove from play the face-down monster immediately with this card's effect without flipping it face-up or applying damage calculation. If this card attacks, it is removed from play during the End Phase. As I play a D.D. deck, I would probably run at least one D.D. Assassin. ; DGreat card! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D.D. Destroyer Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Picture looks bad without a background. Effect is nice!But' date=' I would rather have it a little stronger as a level 4 card. ; D [spoiler=(Another) OCG Fix']You can remove from play 1 monster you control to Special Summon this card in face-up Attack Position. If this monster attacks a face-down Defense Position monster, destroy and remove from play the face-down monster immediately with this card's effect without flipping it face-up or applying damage calculation. If this card attacks, it is removed from play during the End Phase. As I play a D.D. deck, I would probably run at least one D.D. Assassin. ; DGreat card! WHoot! i run a d.d. mill deck.. and i love it.. i think this would be a good card.. lol. check out my other D.D. cards.. hopefully they are good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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