kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 please be honest about this and tell me what i need to change or something like that. If there is any mistakes please tell me as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
◎Kaleidoscope Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Official Card Grammar Fix:This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned or Set, you can remove from play all Water-Type monsters in your Graveyard to increase this card's ATK by 100 for each card removed from play until the End Phase. Good card for a beginner, could use another effect though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluefire1179 Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Agreed with Blaze. However, I would stick with Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned. I like it 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
adrianator Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 pretty good card. i'm new here too soyea i guess Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 i don't get what blaze meant.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bluefire1179 Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 he fixed the card grammar. he fixed it so its closer to what an actual card would say. we do that here. or you're talking abt another effect, in which case he means that the effect is not the most original one. ^^ coverin my bases Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 but if its is set then how do we know its effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nishi-chan Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 The man makes a good point =/OCG Correctness:This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal or Flip Summoned, you can remove from play all WATER-Type monsters from your Graveyard to have this card gain 100 ATK for each card removed, until the End Phase. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jaster_rogue Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 very good for a new member, this pic is good, I won't help you to fix the card because I'm terrible helping... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 The man makes a good point =/OCG Correctness:This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal or Flip Summoned' date=' you can remove from play all WATER monsters from your Graveyard to have this card gain 100 ATK for each card removed until the End Phase.[/quote'] Further fix intended? Nice pic effect. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 isn't that what i put... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Nope, but the meaning is almost the same. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 i compared it and it has the exact same thing except 1 comma and 1 y is capitalized. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destron Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Official Card Grammar Fix:This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned or Set' date=' you can remove from play all Water-Type monsters in your Graveyard to increase this card's ATK by 100 for each card removed from play until the End Phase. Good card for a beginner, could use another effect though.[/quote'] LULZ. Water is not a type, it's an attribute, so it would be this: This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned or Set, you can remove from play all WATER monsters in your Graveyard to increase this card's ATK by 100 for each card removed from play until the End Phase. Eez nize. Give it another effect though, and then you should probably give a drawback or raise it's level cause then it might get OP'd depending on the second effect. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 And what else has changed? Water is not a Type, its an Attributes. FIRE is too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 oh i see it now. thanks lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nitrogenix Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 please be honest about this and tell me what i need to change or something like that. If there is any mistakes please tell me as well. its real good, but you can maybe add 500 atk for the effect instead of 100 and remove 3 instead. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted December 31, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 i didn't want it to be too strong so i left it like that. so yea that is my first card i post for help. thanks for ur opinions and advices Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 31, 2009 Report Share Posted December 31, 2009 Water isn't a type, it's an attribute, so it should be WATER monsters, not Water-Type monsters but other than that, the OCG looks fine as for the effect, the loss of that many WATER monsters just for 100 atk gain per monster removed for only 1 turn isn't worth it I'd make it so you can boost this card's atk by 700 for 1 turn, but instead of ALL the WATER monsters in your Graveyard, make it just 3 of them 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kktc guard Posted January 2, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 2, 2010 final edit thank for the fix and ideas. this is the final card.its could be blues eyes white dragon!!! lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nitrogenix Posted February 9, 2010 Report Share Posted February 9, 2010 oh i see it now. thanks lol this creature's effect has a powerfull draw back but i think the second eefect should sound like this. And reduce the attack of all monsters on the field except for this monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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