Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone [Screenplay, Draft 1 - UPDATED!]

[Felix Culpa]

Sorry to point out, but the only "wizarding town" left is Hogsmeade, so the fact that they are fighting so close to Hogwarts is illogical, as Voldemort did not dare launch an attack on it.

[Brushfire]

That was a stunningly great story that attracted me in~

I don't even like Harry Potter that much' date=' but this was awsome.

 

Keep updating ^_____^

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Wow, thanks Mira. ^^;

 

Sorry to point out' date=' but the only "wizarding town" left is Hogsmeade, so the fact that they are fighting so close to Hogwarts is illogical, as Voldemort did not dare launch an attack on it.

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No, there were other wizarding towns around, a notable one being areas in St. Ottery Catchpole (where the Weasley's, Lovegood's and Diggory's live). Voldemort wasn't an exterminator who went from town-to-town killing every wizard like Uther Pendragon in Merlin.

[bury the year]

Apparate should be capitalized, being a proper verb and all. :3

 

Otherwise, just by skimming the first few pages, I can tell this is top-notch. Can't wait to see the rest of it.

[Felix Culpa]

That was a stunningly great story that attracted me in~

I don't even like Harry Potter that much' date=' but this was awsome.

 

Keep updating ^_____^

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Wow, thanks Mira. ^^;

 

Sorry to point out' date=' but the only "wizarding town" left is Hogsmeade, so the fact that they are fighting so close to Hogwarts is illogical, as Voldemort did not dare launch an attack on it.

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No, there were other wizarding towns around, a notable one being areas in St. Ottery Catchpole (where the Weasley's, Lovegood's and Diggory's live). Voldemort wasn't an exterminator who went from town-to-town killing every wizard like Uther Pendragon in Merlin.

 

Ottery St. Catchpole is a Muggle village which is why, in the second book, the narrator explained that, there was a spot where Fred, George, Ron and Harry could play Quidditch, but not fly too high. A village is not three families.

[Fen.]

This screenplay is so amazing, I want to have relations with it and then never call it again.

 

I used to be (well I kinda still am) an avid Fan of Harry Potter. The fact you edited the screenplay and surprisingly made it both more intriguing and more fresh just proves that you are really good at what you do. This both struck me as a Fan and an Actor. The blocking and descriptions of the set really draw you in more than the book did. You made me remember the good old days of curling up with a good old book with a wizard.

 

I look forward to more adventures in Hogwarts. (And if you ever produce this somewhere, dibs on Harry! xD)

[Luna Lovegood]

Sorry, but on Page 3, it has to actually hit Harry, and then go away, as his scar is from being TOUCHED by dark magic.

[Brushfire]

Apparate should be capitalized' date=' being a proper verb and all. :3

 

Otherwise, just by skimming the first few pages, I can tell this is top-notch. Can't wait to see the rest of it.

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Wow, <3. Thanks Rinne. :D

 

Ottery St. Catchpole is a Muggle village which is why' date=' in the second book, the narrator explained that, there was a spot where Fred, George, Ron and Harry could play Quidditch, but not fly too high. A village is not three families.

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How does being nit-picky help anything? Would you prefer I change it to "EXT. MUGGLE TOWN THAT WIZARDS LIVE IN - DAY"? Moreover, the films have been known to change events from the book, including adding things.

 

This screenplay is so amazing' date=' I want to have relations with it and then never call it again.

 

I used to be (well I kinda still am) an avid Fan of Harry Potter. The fact you edited the screenplay and surprisingly made it both more intriguing and more fresh just proves that you are really good at what you do. This both struck me as a Fan and an Actor. The blocking and descriptions of the set really draw you in more than the book did. You made me remember the good old days of curling up with a good old book with a wizard.

 

I look forward to more adventures in Hogwarts. (And if you ever produce this somewhere, dibs on Harry! xD)

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Thanks for the long, detailed post. =] The fact that you loved it and told me how great I was made me feel good, even though I feel that I don't deserve it. xD Thanks man.

 

Sorry' date=' but on Page 3, it has to actually hit Harry, and then go away, as his scar is from being TOUCHED by dark magic.

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Oh, okay. I'll change that, this is still an early draft so asking for things to be changed is fine. =]

[Luna Lovegood]

Another thing; officially, Vernon does not hurt Harry physically. So, you can set it up that way, but I'm just commenting.

Also,they stop at a hotel at one point.

[Brushfire]

Another thing; officially' date=' Vernon does not hurt Harry physically. So, you can set it up that way, but I'm just commenting.

Also,they stop at a hotel at one point.

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Yeah, I know. I added Vernon abusing Harry to add to the whole 'darker feel' of the film, which you'll see a bit more later on.

And I know, I decided to cut it as it wasn't notable enough to add in.

[Luna Lovegood]

Ok. Just wondering :)