Pokemon Waterton, Legend of the ONTEK region

[metalflygon08]

 

yeas I'm working on a fan game for Pokemon Fire Red, this is just a showcase of what to expect sort of, the map is first, then the Male/female and then Rival, Mugs of the Gym Leaders (and secret Trainer) then the E4, next row is the Gym Leaders and the leaders of the crime syndicate La Costa, and the man that employs them, the Owner of BigTimeBiz, then the Wrkers for BTBz, and The Peons of LC, and the pokemon they will have(BTBz employees can also have pokemon that are owned by the peons too)

 

and the story

 

brief synopis, You start off talking to Prof.Cedar, you are applying to be his assistant, he asks you some questions, like gender and name, and then he calls in his other assistant, who you then meet and (name) then he tells you to get a good night's sleep, he already has an errand for you. You wake up and explore around Town, you go to the Lab to find Ian(rival assistant's defualt) who tells you Cedar is out looking at the rock formations in the valley, you go to leave town, but cedar catches you right as you leave, then brings you back to his lab, he states that he studies the habits and interactions of Pokemon, and had ordered some Pokedex, but lacks a power source for them, he ordered them from Prof. Oak of Kanto, and his order just arrived up at Floral Cove, the city North of your town, Rockhill Valley, you are told that the canyon leading up there is fruaght with wild pokemon so he let's both you and your rival borrow a pokemon for the journy, your rival is eager to prove his dominece and challenges you to a battle, afterwards he leaves to Verdant Sanctuary a shrine right past Floral COve, Cedar tells you to go to Floral Cove and get the package since your rival bolted to soon. You get the package and head back giving the batteries to Cedar, soon Ian returns saying the place was abandoned, Prof Cedar scolds him, and then gives you each a Pokedex to help him gather info on the Pokemon in Ontek, and mabye open up new secrets about them,

 

most of the charecters are based off of the ones from the Pokemon TCG for Gameboy including Main Hero, RIval, and Gym Leaders/E4

 

Ontek is a mountainous area, and the starting areas are Rockhill villagr->Starstruck Canyon->Floral Cove->Verdant Sanctuary->Verdant City...

 

Rockhill and the canyon where formed my a meteor with the canyon being the path before impact in Rockhill, there are shards of the meteor about, and rumor that Solrock and Lunatone are about too.

 

really I want feed back and such on my ideas, and any changes to the rosters that should be made, the levels are significantly higher, as in the first route has lv 6 and more level 4 and 5 pokemon.

[Kuro no Keiyakushu]

[justify]Gym leaders are pretty creative, I can give my hat off to that. You should make the faces look more "new" as well. Just take the colours that you used on the hero sprites and add them to the faces. Same with the Gym Leaders. I noticed how the faces you used came from the Pokemon TCG game, so updating those faces for a more new look would be more original. You should add some Diamond/Pearl/Platinum Pokemon there, would make the game a whole lot better. You can edit those sprites to like like the 3rd generation. Starting off with wild high-level Pokemon and such will add a new twist to the game, and maybe a new challenge. But all games need challenges. Overall, I think this game could go somewhere, so keep it coming.[/justify]

[metalflygon08]

Actually, I have added a few new ones so far, Gliscor was the first, but I have it Evolving at Lv. 35 from Gligar, whitch can be cuaght fairly early in the game. I plan on adding Honchcrow(moon stone), Roserade(Leaf Stone), Yanmega(Lv. 30), LikyLiky(Lv. 25), Froslass(moon stone), Porygon-z(2 to Lv. 40), weavile(Moon Stone), Mismagius(moon Stone), Tangrowth(lv 28), Togekiss(Lv 40), Probopass(Lv 30), Dusknoir(Lv 45), Glacion(Lv 30), Leafion(Leaf stone), mamoswine(Lv 50), gallade(Sun Stone on Kirlia), Magnezone(Lv 45), Rhypherior(Lv 65), Electrivire(thunder stone), and Magmortar(fire stone).

and their sprites, resized to fit in 64x64

[Jappio]

I'm surprised actually how few people commented on your stuff. People with half as much skill get more praise and notice.

 

The overall region and idea seems fine to me. I don't think too deeply into Pokemon plots and stuff though, so my opinion on it isn't probably that valuable. I do like the trainers based on the TCG ones.

 

The devamped sprites for the most part look fine. A few thins though look a bit off. Gallade looks too scrunched. Mamoswine looks like he got cut in half. Things like Roserade and Weavile fill up too much room. They'll look kind of huge compared to other Pokemon. Inversely, Dusknoir is perhaps too shrunk. It would probably pretty silly if a trainer had both Dusknoir and Roserade using those sized sprites =P

[Zeroshot]

I'm surprised actually how few people commented on your stuff. People with half as much skill get more praise and notice.

 

 

The average person does not comment on:

1. Long paragraphs.

2. Long paragraphs that the reader has to scroll to see.

3. Plot posts that lack formatting.

 

 

I don't really have any problem with your plot. Any plot can be interesting at some point.

Some of the sprites (Electivire is the one I noticed first) just looked squished, like they went on Jenny Craig with a tapeworm, but overall just keep working.