Volcanic Erasers 6/???

[Slicer224]

Here they are!

 

Please rate and comment enjoy!

[Aero~]

why'd you post this thread? open 2 tabs. don't post the thread until the cards are ready.

[Slicer224]

They're right there but whatevs

[Aero~]

OCG errors. Just say on the last one, "This card does Piercing Damage".

7/10

[Aero~]

click the edit button on the first post. Put the card there.

[Slicer224]

Already did and i knew that I'm not a newb ya know

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Whatevvs!!! RATE&COMMENT CHAAAAAAAA!!!!!!

[Sweet Lightning]

[spoiler=Review]

 

Soldier: So he's automatically a Level 4 2000 ATK monster? Seems balanced.

 

OCG Fix: When this card is Normal Summoned, all face-up "Volcanic Eraser" monsters you control gain 300 ATK and DEF until...(?)

 

(If you want the effect to be permanent) While you control this face-up card, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters you control gain 300 ATK and DEF.

 

Warrior: Just a bit OP'd. Lower the ATK and DEF just a little. This is basically a weaker version "Zaborg the Thunder Monarch".

 

OCG Fix: When this card is Tribute Summoned, destroy 1 monster your opponent controls.

 

Lava Warrior: 3200 ATK with Piercing damage?! OP'd.

 

OCG Fix: During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent.

 

Zone: A bit generic. Coupled with Lava Warrior and Warrior, this card could make them more OP'd.

 

OCG Fix: All "Volcanic Eraser" monsters you control gain 700 ATK and DEF.

 

My rate: 5/10

 

 

[ragnarok1945]

your synchro needs an effect, or it's too weak

 

Sweet Lightning already pointed out the OCG in the other cards, and their effects are all boring and OPed

 

5/10

[Slicer224]

Whatevs peeps. Like I said no one sees the fun in creating cards anymore. Should I keep making these? I wonder :?

[WTF]

5/10

[Slicer224]

Any rates anyone, anyone at all?

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Here is another new Volcanic Eraser card.

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Please rate & comment thanks, Slicer224

[Slicer224]

BUMP!!!

[♠Decietful King♠]

Umm good pics is one good thing u should take the effect fixes sweet lightning did and add an effect to your synchro or it will be sadly UP'ed even with 3900 ATK

Current Rate 6/10 :/

[Slicer224]

Ok thnx I'll try to think of an Effect some time in the near future.

[Slicer224]

Rate & Comment please!

[The Mad Hatter]

I came here expecting laughs,

I got what I expected.

OCG errors,

Bad pics,

6/10

(^Good for a newbie.)

[Slicer224]

Gosh I'm not a NEWB!!!

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BTW look who's talkin' Hatter!

[The Mad Hatter]

Gosh I'm not a NEWB!!!

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BTW look who's talkin' Hatter!

Wait... you reported my post. HAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH... Evil Light Yagami Laugh...

 

Your trying to come off as not a newb, but you reported me for POSTING CRITISM! That is one of the most newbiest of all newb moves. Take a look at my cards and how vastly superior they are to yours. I'm the newb. I'll return to Light laugh, HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

[Slicer224]

Gosh I'm not a NEWB!!!

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BTW look who's talkin' Hatter!

Wait... you reported my post. HAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH... Evil Light Yagami Laugh...

 

Your trying to come off as not a newb' date=' but you reported me for POSTING CRITISM! That is one of the most newbiest of all newb moves. Take a look at my cards and how vastly superior they are to yours. I'm the newb. I'll return to Light laugh, HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

[/quote'] Not what I reported you for smart one.

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PWNED!!!

[Shinobi Phoenix]

-- Soldier:

"When this card is Normal Summoned, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters you control gain 300 ATk."

 

Reason: There's no need to state the "side of the field" part when talking about Normal Summoning, not unless you have very specific reason, such as Normal Summoning it to your opponent's.

 

Also, I staunchly disagree with "Sweet Lightning", as he both doesn't know if you wanted it to be permanent and he's wrong to state you need the "while on the field" part to make it permanent when that's simply not true. You only need that if you want to make it continuous as the dependent source of the effect as opposed to just being the one time static but permanent boost. The way it is currently worded, it's a trigger effect with a static effect that last as long as the affected monster is face-up on the field, not a continuous effect that demands the monster stay on field to keep active. So if he MEANS it that way, he should change it, but only IF he means it that way.

 

If you mean it to be continuous, add the "while face-up on the field" part. That means the effect will only remain active while Soldier remains. HOWEVER, if you mean for the boost to remains regardless of if you STILL control Soldier, then DON'T use that text, leave that part off. If you want the effect to END at the end of your turn, add "until End Phase" or "until the end of your turn" or some other version of the text depending on when you actually want it to end.

 

 

 

-- Warrior: "When this card is Tribute Summoned, destroy 1 monster your opponent controls."

 

Reason: (See Soldier), also cleaned up the text, works exactly as author wrote it. It's otherwise fine. An extra monster cost for 400 more ATK is HARDLY even close to overpowered.

 

 

 

-- Lava Warrior:

-- I would suggest Lava Warrior have "Fusion Summon only" or "above Fusion Material Monsters" text due to the ease of summoning a 3200 with piercing for only two materials. King of the Swamp and other Fusion Subs or Fusion Subs one makes like them could make it too easy to pull out a 3200 with Piercing. There's also the fact that because it's easy to summon, it can also be easy to resurrect if you lose it. I'm not saying to nerf it down with both text, just consider the playtest of it and if you think it would be fair if you were facing down this guy coming out like that. If not, maybe both text would help make it more fair to you both.

 

 

 

-- Zone: "All "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 700 ATK and DEF."

 

Nothing to say about Zone or Titanium Dragon, but against one suggestion, Zone is fine as is EFFECT WISE, it's a field card. Unless you have a very specific reason or you're almost trying to cheat, it should always affect BOTH sides of the field and all monsters it has affect over, not just your own. That is not to say that it can NEVER affect only your side, but often there is a reason.

 

 

 

-- Darkblade Knight:

"This card is also treated as DARK while under the card owner's control. When this card is Normal Summoned, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 400 ATK."

 

ALTERNATE TEXT 1 (depending on intention): This card is also treated as DARK while face-up on the field. When this card is Normal Summoned, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 400 ATK.

 

 

Reason: I will ask if the author had intended Darkblade to be a DARK ONLY while he himself owned it or to be DARK just as long as it was on the field regardless of who controlled it (there is a difference between ownership and control). The two different texts reflect both versions this could go.

 

Is it DARK only when you the owner controls it, or when whoever controls it?

 

 

 

 

None of your card are overpowered in the least and I'd like to know what people are playing in the real game to think your stuff is overpowered. They are however oversimple, but than so were the Infernity and those have been fleshed out quite a bit. So that's really what you need. It's not your cards are boring (and that's a horrible thing to say) it's that they look boring AS THEy ARE NOW. Once you add more cards and (more important) give them a tactic and identity, they will work out much better and you'll be happier for putting the work ethic in.

[Slicer224]

-- Soldier:

"When this card is Normal Summoned' date=' all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters you control gain 300 ATk."[/i']

 

Reason: There's no need to state the "side of the field" part when talking about Normal Summoning, not unless you have very specific reason, such as Normal Summoning it to your opponent's.

 

Also, I staunchly disagree with "Sweet Lightning", as he both doesn't know if you wanted it to be permanent and he's wrong to state you need the "while on the field" part to make it permanent when that's simply not true. You only need that if you want to make it continuous as the dependent source of the effect as opposed to just being the one time static but permanent boost. The way it is currently worded, it's a trigger effect with a static effect that last as long as the affected monster is face-up on the field, not a continuous effect that demands the monster stay on field to keep active. So if he MEANS it that way, he should change it, but only IF he means it that way.

 

If you mean it to be continuous, add the "while face-up on the field" part. That means the effect will only remain active while Soldier remains. HOWEVER, if you mean for the boost to remains regardless of if you STILL control Soldier, then DON'T use that text, leave that part off. If you want the effect to END at the end of your turn, add "until End Phase" or "until the end of your turn" or some other version of the text depending on when you actually want it to end.

 

 

 

-- Warrior: "When this card is Tribute Summoned, destroy 1 monster your opponent controls."

 

Reason: (See Soldier), also cleaned up the text, works exactly as author wrote it. It's otherwise fine. An extra monster cost for 400 more ATK is HARDLY even close to overpowered.

 

 

 

-- Lava Warrior:

-- I would suggest Lava Warrior have "Fusion Summon only" or "above Fusion Material Monsters" text due to the ease of summoning a 3200 with piercing for only two materials. King of the Swamp and other Fusion Subs or Fusion Subs one makes like them could make it too easy to pull out a 3200 with Piercing. There's also the fact that because it's easy to summon, it can also be easy to resurrect if you lose it. I'm not saying to nerf it down with both text, just consider the playtest of it and if you think it would be fair if you were facing down this guy coming out like that. If not, maybe both text would help make it more fair to you both.

 

 

 

-- Zone: "All "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 700 ATK and DEF."

 

Nothing to say about Zone or Titanium Dragon, but against one suggestion, Zone is fine as is EFFECT WISE, it's a field card. Unless you have a very specific reason or you're almost trying to cheat, it should always affect BOTH sides of the field and all monsters it has affect over, not just your own. That is not to say that it can NEVER affect only your side, but often there is a reason.

 

 

 

-- Darkblade Knight:

"This card is also treated as DARK while under the card owner's control. When this card is Normal Summoned, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 400 ATK."

 

ALTERNATE TEXT 1 (depending on intention): This card is also treated as DARK while face-up on the field. When this card is Normal Summoned, all "Volcanic Eraser" monsters gain 400 ATK.

 

 

Reason: I will ask if the author had intended Darkblade to be a DARK ONLY while he himself owned it or to be DARK just as long as it was on the field regardless of who controlled it (there is a difference between ownership and control). The two different texts reflect both versions this could go.

 

Is it DARK only when you the owner controls it, or when whoever controls it?

 

 

 

 

None of your card are overpowered in the least and I'd like to know what people are playing in the real game to think your stuff is overpowered. They are however oversimple, but than so were the Infernity and those have been fleshed out quite a bit. So that's really what you need. It's not your cards are boring (and that's a horrible thing to say) it's that they look boring AS THEy ARE NOW. Once you add more cards and (more important) give them a tactic and identity, they will work out much better and you'll be happier for putting the work ethic in.

Gee thanks? But what is you rate on the set, do you have one?

[Slicer244]

I do 8/10 cool cards man.

[Shinobi Phoenix]

Gee thanks? But what is you rate on the set' date=' do you have one?

[/quote']

 

 

Rating are rather arbitrary here. I don't know why people put so much stock in them. If I have to give you a rating solely on what you have HERE and NOW, I can only give you a 2 out of 5 (I like the X-Play scale). This is because of what I already said. They need more and to be fleshed out with an identity. I already rated the thread itself because that's what you wanted, but I would have waited until after you made up more cards otherwise before judging them.

 

 

If I was to playtest these on YVD or with proxies (as I do with my own work and others) right now, I wouldn't get much done except to work on getting out Lava Warrior and use Darkblade to support them.

 

 

They need changes and the set needs additions to give them life. Again, just like Infernity. Started as 3 Promos, now we have a full team and support and the deck works great.

 

Make an identity, be creative, but make sense also. And don't let only what Konami or Shueisha be the only thing you do.

[KindredTether]

4/10.(Your OCG sucks!)

[Home Slice]

for the first card change raise to increase