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You probably don't want a grammar nazi ripping your paper, so I'd like to nitpick about only one thing.

 

if time travel actually existed, which it doesn’t yet

 

The word 'if' implies that time travel does not exist. For example, if I go to the mall, I will buy a shirt. The 'if' implies that I have not gone to the mall yet, otherwise I would have bought a shirt. It's not a big issue, but redundancy can become a problem once you get stricter teachers. I've heard from older students that college English is a bitch, so just make a conscience effort to avoid that.

 

Furthermore, the reader should know that time travel doesn't exist.

 

One thing I didn't like about your essay was how informal it sounded. While being too formal becomes a problem, it sounded like you were casually talking. While this may be what your teacher expected, an 'essay' doesn't really fall under the format of casual. Mostly: This topic is very, very confusing. It’s hard to explain. But I tried my best. If you could formalize (word?) that a bit more, it'd increase the overall life if your essay. Oh, and work on conclusions.

 

Now that I'm done with that, time travel doesn't seem too viable at the moment. From the looks of it, we are going to get teleportation before we get time travel.

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You probably don't want a grammar nazi ripping your paper' date=' so I'd like to nitpick about only one thing.

 

[i']if time travel actually existed, which it doesn’t yet[/i]

 

The word 'if' implies that time travel does not exist. For example, if I go to the mall, I will buy a shirt. The 'if' implies that I have not gone to the mall yet, otherwise I would have bought a shirt. It's not a big issue, but redundancy can become a problem once you get stricter teachers. I've heard from older students that college English is a bitch, so just make a conscience effort to avoid that.

 

Furthermore, the reader should know that time travel doesn't exist.

 

One thing I didn't like about your essay was how informal it sounded. While being too formal becomes a problem, it sounded like you were casually talking. While this may be what your teacher expected, an 'essay' doesn't really fall under the format of casual. Mostly: This topic is very, very confusing. It’s hard to explain. But I tried my best. If you could formalize (word?) that a bit more, it'd increase the overall life if your essay. Oh, and work on conclusions.

 

Now that I'm done with that, time travel doesn't seem too viable at the moment. From the looks of it, we are going to get teleportation before we get time travel.

 

It was due 2 days ago, so a bit too late. But I am better than my english teacher at english, so she won't notice ;D

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You probably don't want a grammar nazi ripping your paper' date=' so I'd like to nitpick about only one thing.

 

[i']if time travel actually existed, which it doesn’t yet[/i]

 

The word 'if' implies that time travel does not exist. For example, if I go to the mall, I will buy a shirt. The 'if' implies that I have not gone to the mall yet, otherwise I would have bought a shirt. It's not a big issue, but redundancy can become a problem once you get stricter teachers. I've heard from older students that college English is a bitch, so just make a conscience effort to avoid that.

 

Furthermore, the reader should know that time travel doesn't exist.

 

One thing I didn't like about your essay was how informal it sounded. While being too formal becomes a problem, it sounded like you were casually talking. While this may be what your teacher expected, an 'essay' doesn't really fall under the format of casual. Mostly: This topic is very, very confusing. It’s hard to explain. But I tried my best. If you could formalize (word?) that a bit more, it'd increase the overall life if your essay. Oh, and work on conclusions.

 

Now that I'm done with that, time travel doesn't seem too viable at the moment. From the looks of it, we are going to get teleportation before we get time travel.

 

It was due 2 days ago, so a bit too late. But I am better than my english teacher at english, so she won't notice ;D

 

@Dark: It simply WASN'T an essay. Have you ever heard of people that don't use a dictionary? Well, you got one. And again, just by looking at the "essay", you would expect the writer not to know what do "formal" or "informal" mean.

@JG: That's just wrong on basically any level. But you're a lucky bast*rd.

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