theBigRed Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by removing at least 3 cards in your hand from play. Each time this card inflicts damage to your opponent's Life Points, select one card from your deck and remove it from play. Then, shuffle your deck. When this card is destroyed, remove it from play. Return all other cards removed from play to the top of your deck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadoeh Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 That looks just like my Evil Wings, see? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theBigRed Posted January 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 my badits a cool picture tho Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChaosMuramasa Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 Sometimes, pictures are overused like that. As for the card itself, I like it. It's strong but the effect balances it out and it sure is a hefty cost to summon it. Your OCG is very good too. I found no errors, except for one minor one:"Return all other cards removed from play to the top of your deck. " This is stating that you are going to return your opponent's removed from play cards back to your Deck as well, which is a no-no. The correct way to say it would be:"Return all of your removed from play cards to the top of your Deck in any order desired." If you didn't mean for the effect to do that, then it would just say "Return all of your removed from play cards to your Deck." Though, something I realized is that this card would end up just going back into your Deck upon destruction as it is being removed from play itself. That may not be so bad, though, considering the cost to summon it. Also, you say "at least 3 monsters" when Summoning it. This is stating that you can remove more should you wish. If you're giving the player this option, you should give the card an added effect should they use more than 3. Overall, I like it alot. And for a first card, wow. Just try to find some unique pictures, as some pictures are really overused alot. 9 / 10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lyfe. Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 Good for a newb. Really good for a newb. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadoeh Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 my badits a cool picture tho I know!! It's awesome!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jamora Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 almost perfect for a noob 10/10 great job no correction that i can see :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinzuku Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 This is awesome, excellent for a new person. Been taking notes? haha, anyhow, no OCG errors I can see, although, some phrases could be reworded, hmm, Imma give this a 8.9/10. Great start for a new person :) - SHinzuku Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theBigRed Posted January 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 just changed the last sentence around:Return all of your cards removed from play (including this card) to the top of your deck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lil'D Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted January 21, 2010 Report Share Posted January 21, 2010 the picture is overused, but you're new so that can be overlooked the OCG looks very good for a new member you should give an effect as to what happens if you remove more than 3 cards from play though 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theBigRed Posted January 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 27, 2010 i'm not sure how to fit that into the lore tho... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChaosIncarn Posted January 27, 2010 Report Share Posted January 27, 2010 Wow...as it was stated many times before, very good for a new person. 10/10 from this noob ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theBigRed Posted January 27, 2010 Author Report Share Posted January 27, 2010 thanx... but i'm just wondering how to include the added effect into the lore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChaosIncarn Posted January 27, 2010 Report Share Posted January 27, 2010 Could do some sort of atk point increase. Kind of like White-Horned Dragon. Keep the increase modest and it wouldn't make the card OP. Personal opinion ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leturn Master Posted January 27, 2010 Report Share Posted January 27, 2010 Banned or Limited. Think D-Fissure/Macro with "Lightsworn" and then cycling them to do the whole thing over again... that can double your amount of resources for the LS. Add that to the poor name (let's use Latin to make things cool!... not. English ACTUALLY can sound cooler with an exotic name. Believe it or not.) and the fact that it's a 2900 beater (just CRYING to be destroyed) makes me cringe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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