Arudian Desert Set (Project)

[Blacklotis]

I posted some of these cards the other day but I've added some to this set can you please rate these :) thanks...

 

 

(NEW)

 

 

 

[Menace13]

Bad OCG. So I stopped reading them. Sorry.

[The-Wick!]

deck should be Deck

graveyard should be Graveyard

special summon should be Special Summon

draw phase should ne Draw Phase

 

"place it in your hand"?!?!?! should be "Add it to your hand"

 

"star level"??!?! whataheck?! its kinda of a super level? you can just put as "Level"

 

"is designated as an attack target" you can change this to "is chosen as an attack target"

 

"Destroy attacking monster" should be "Destroy THE attacking monster"

 

i think Gift of Desert diety is the same thing as Gryfhon father dust isn't it?

 

the set is kinda ok, you have to adjust this OCG, lots of errors! remember there is no "Star" or "Designated" in original OCG.

 

the original idea is fine, but i think you could create more lvl 4 or lower monster to this set. well, i will not say it is a waste cuz its not, but i don't know i think something is missing.

 

6.7/10

[Blacklotis]

There is something missing because its not complete its just what I have done and I will make the changes you mentioned. I do thanks you for the constructive criticism. Just to answer something you said, Gift of the Desert Diety is a bit like hapry's feather duster but its more because by using that card you can use the secondary effect of some of the other cards instead of its primary effect.

[ragnarok1945]

OCG errors have been pointed out already

 

there's also the capitalization errors, though they're not as bad

 

cards like Gift of the Desert Diety have too short effects, add more to them

 

7/10

[Blacklotis]

I changed whatever OCG errors I could find let me know if I missed anything as well as changed a couple of cards and add a new one.... let me know what you think of the changes thanks.