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MY FIRST TRAP CARD


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It needs some improvements:

-Do not fully capitalize the name; "Imond Attack for Marins"

-I don't see how the image relates much to the effect (or maybe i'm just unfamiliar with the characters in the images).

-OCG errors:

"Destroy all face-up Dragon-Type monsters on the field."

-The effect could be a bit more imaginative. I know this is an example, but something like:

"Destroy face-up Dragon-Type monsters on the field for every Warrior-Type monster you control."

-Why is it an Equip Card if the effect is best suited for a Normal Trap? Also, there are no Equip Trap Cards unless the effect involves it equipping to a Monster.

 

Considering it being your first Trap Card, 4/10. It's not a great or original Trap, but it's far from being the worst. If you need more help, you can PM me.

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It needs some improvements:

-Do not fully capitalize the name; "Imond Attack for Marins"

-I don't see how the image relates much to the effect (or maybe i'm just unfamiliar with the characters in the images).

-OCG errors:

"Destroy all face-up Dragon-Type monsters on the field."

-The effect could be a bit more imaginative. I know this is an example' date=' but something like:

"Destroy face-up Dragon-Type monsters on the field for every Warrior-Type monster you control."

-Why is it an Equip Card if the effect is best suited for a Normal Trap? Also, there are no Equip Trap Cards unless the effect involves it equipping to a Monster.

 

Considering it being your first Trap Card, 4/10. It's not a great or original Trap, but it's far from being the worst. If you need more help, you can PM me.

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yeah what starly said..i not so good with correcting cards oh and always cap the first letter in a sentence...sup starly long time no see im prolly not remembered

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