My First Independent 2 independent cards, please rate and comment!

[gridfreak598]

Let me know what you think:

 

 

 

This card is used to Ritual Summon "Izimbra - Phoenix Lord of Flames". You must also offer monsters who's total stars equal 8 or more as a tribute from the field or your hand.

 

 

This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Flames of Rebirth". When this card comes in to play, destroy all other monsters on the field. For each "Fire" type monster in either player's graveyard, increase the original ATK and DEF of this card by 100. This card cannot be destroyed by spell or trap cards activated by your opponent.

 

 

Any suggestions?

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[spoiler=Grammar Corrections]This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Flames of Rebirth". When this is Ritual Summoned, destroy all other monsters on the field. For each Fire-type monster in either player's Graveyard, increase the original ATK and DEF of this card by 100. This card cannot be destroyed by Spell or Trap cards activated by your opponent.

 

The Pic Is Slightly Blurred, and WAY overused, i wont rate on that im just saying...

The OCG is only slightly messed up -3%

The effect is kinda OP'ed just cuz you get 100 for each monster in one player's GY... -5%

The Ritual's Effect is in order, but the pic is again blurred -2%

The Going Easy Mark-Down -10%

80%

[gridfreak598]

[spoiler=Grammar Corrections]This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card' date=' "Flames of Rebirth". When this is [b']Ritual Summoned[/b], destroy all other monsters on the field. For each Fire-type monster in either player's Graveyard, increase the original ATK and DEF of this card by 100. This card cannot be destroyed by Spell or Trap cards activated by your opponent.

 

The Pic Is Slightly Blurred, and WAY overused, i wont rate on that im just saying...

The OCG is only slightly messed up -3%

The effect is kinda OP'ed just cuz you get 100 for each monster in one player's GY... -5%

The Ritual's Effect is in order, but the pic is again blurred -2%

The Going Easy Mark-Down -10%

80%

 

Thanks, I'll get right on those corrections.

 

As for the effect, I'm going to change it to an increase due to only monsters in "your" graveyard. Typically, that would be about 500-800. Would you still consider that an overpowered card?

 

Oh, and realized very quickly that the picture is overused... so I'm working on that too.

[ragnarok1945]

OCG correction is up already

 

Fire isn't a type, it's an attribute, so it should be FIRE monster

 

I'd just raise its atk a little higher then remove the 100 atk gain effect

 

7.9/10