Aibara Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 That's a pack with 4 of my new cards. ENJOY!!! THE PREVIOUS MISTAKES ARE CORRECTED. WAIT FOR NEW ONES! LOL!![i DON'T OWN THE IMAGES. THESE IMAGES WERE TAKEN FROM DEVIANART AND PHOTOBUCKET.] SALAZAR, THE DRAGON OF STORMSWhen this card attacks a defence position monster, whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this monster, inflict the difference as direct damage to your opponent's LP. TRAZAR, THE DRAGON OF LIGHTNINGThis card can't be Set. When this card is Normal Summoned, you can discard two cards from your hand to remove from play one card in your opponent's Graveyard. THE DEMON'S RETURNWhen this card is activated, you can tribute "Salazar, The Dragon Of Storms" and "Trazar, The Dragon Of Lightning", to special summon "Mesuren, The Master Of Dragons". MESUREN, THE MASTER OF DRAGONSWhen this card is Special Summoned on your side of the field, you can activate the following effect, only once:Decrease your life points by 3000 and increase your opponent's life points by 3000, to special summon from the Graveyard "Salazar, The Dragon Of Storms" and "Trazar, The Dragon Of Lightning" Hope you liked them. Now working on the next thread... Promise it'll be good!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 1. You don't need to say "summoned" in Trazar's effect. Just set.2. You need to name the monster's entire name, not just the first part.3. In your opponent's Graveyard, not on your opponent's Graveyard.4. ARRG!! GIANT BORDER!!!! IT BURNS US!!! IT BUUUUURNS UUUUUS!!!!!!5. Although Musuren's effect is simpler, it is not OCG literate. Try:"...Decrease your life points by 3000 and increase your opponent's life points by 3000 to..."6. Musuren is underpowerd and has blank ATK and DEF. 5/10 This rate will change if you add ATK and DEF to Masuren. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aibara Posted February 6, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 Sorry for the errors!!! I'll correct them right now!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 Sorry for the errors!!! I'll correct them right now!!!! Lol, mistakes happen, dude. xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aibara Posted February 6, 2010 Author Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 CORRECTED! :-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 CORRECTED! :-) Much better.7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aero~ Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 On the first one, you can just say, "This card inflicts Piercing Damage."normal summoned should be Normal Summoned.set should be Set.special summoned should be Special Summoned.graveyard should be Graveyard.I think in Trazar you should say, "Only once, turn, when this card is summoned"can't should be cannot.life points should be Life Points.The last one should say,When this card is summoned, one time only, you can decrease your Life Points by 3000 and increase your opponents Life Points by 3000 to Special Summon "Salazar, The Dragon Of Storms" and "Trazar, The Dragon Of Lightning" from your Graveyard.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 On the first one' date=' you can just say, "This card inflicts Piercing Damage."normal summoned should be Normal Summoned.set should be Set.special summoned should be Special Summoned.graveyard should be Graveyard.I think in Trazar you should say, "Only once, turn, when this card is summoned"can't should be cannot.life points should be Life Points.The last one should say,When this card is summoned, one time only, you can decrease your Life Points by 3000 and increase your opponents Life Points by 3000 to Special Summon "Salazar, The Dragon Of Storms" and "Trazar, The Dragon Of Lightning" from your Graveyard.8/10[/quote'] I dare you to find one real card that, in it's effect, says "this card inflicts Piercing Damage". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aero~ Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 On the first one' date=' you can just say, "This card inflicts Piercing Damage."normal summoned should be Normal Summoned.set should be Set.special summoned should be Special Summoned.graveyard should be Graveyard.I think in Trazar you should say, "Only once, turn, when this card is summoned"can't should be cannot.life points should be Life Points.The last one should say,When this card is summoned, one time only, you can decrease your Life Points by 3000 and increase your opponents Life Points by 3000 to Special Summon "Salazar, The Dragon Of Storms" and "Trazar, The Dragon Of Lightning" from your Graveyard.8/10[/quote'] I dare you to find one real card that, in it's effect, says "this card inflicts Piercing Damage". Cyberdark Horn ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Big-P Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 Pic 6/10 i've seen better OCG 1/10 awful Overall 3.5/10 Bad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teh ZWOOTS Posted February 6, 2010 Report Share Posted February 6, 2010 Pic 6/10 i've seen better OCG 1/10 awful Overall 3.5/10 Bad Dude.... No offense... But.... You are not really one to talk.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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