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[Battery Boy]

This is my first set the spell and trap cards are on the way plz critique my work.

 

[spoiler=Lore]This card cannot be normal summond or set.Tthis card cannot be special summond except by tributing 3 "Freedom Fighters" from your hand. While this card is face up on the feild increase the atk and Def of all "Freedom Fighter" monsters by 1000 points.

 

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=Lore]This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Heroic Justice". You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 12 or more as a Tribute from your hand or feild. As long as this card remains face up on your side of the feild, your oppondent cannot select another "Freedom Fighter" monster on your side of the feild.

 

 

[spoiler=Lore]This card can only be Ritual Summond by the Rtiual Spell Card "Demon Anarchy." You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 12 or more as a tribute from the feild or your hand. While this card is face up on the field only monsters with "Freedom Fighter" in there name can attack.

 

 

[spoiler=Lore]When this card is Normal, Flip, or Special Summoned, you may Special Summon 1 "Freedom Frighter-Queen" from your extra deck. While this card remains face up on the feild increase the ATK of all "Freedom Fighter" monsters on your side of the field x200 for each card in the Graveyard. When this card is destroyed by battle destroy all face up "non-Freedom Fighter" monsters.

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=lore]"1 tuner + 1 or more non-tuner monsters"

While this card is on the field increase the DEF of all monsters on your side of the feild by 500. When this card is destroyed you can special summon 1 monster from your graveyard and double its ATK. When that monster is destroyed removed from play your hand.

 

 

[spoiler=lore]Freedom Fighter-War Hero+Freedom Fighter-Princess

You can Special Summon this card by sending the above cards to the graveyard (do not use polymerization.) While this card is on the feild, once per turn, you may Special Summon one card from the graveyard or removed from play.

 

 

I thought some of the cards effects were big enough so I didn't post the lore.

[Lady_Killer]

Not bad, but could use some work. The pics are great except for king, The OCG really needs help. Your general has to be fixed bad, IT IS WAY OP'ED. You've also got a few spelling errors but not bad for a noob, keep up the good work. My rating is 6/10. Fix it up and ill re-rate it.

[DigiMaster Ragnarok]

Lots of OCG errors. Pics are okay, but a lot of ur cards are OPed, i think 1 or 2 are a little UPed, but most are OPed. Sphinx was right, General is WAY OPed, but War Hero is SUUUUUUUPPPPEEEERRR OPed, because you can summon 1, which special summon another, which could summon another, making 3, and that is just TOO powerful. Fix OCG and change... well... almost all of their effects completely and i'll re-rate.

 

3/10

Needs work... A LOT of work...

[Chex]

Their effects are all right but some OCG errors shows itself in each other the cards and some of the card's pictures are pretty well overused so I would consider changing that. Also, some of the pictures are stretched out and/or pressed along with meaningless words in them thus making the picture look bad; I'd recommend that you fix that. 7/10

[Battery Boy]

I srry i'll change the cards to not be OP'ed when I post the spells and traps and can someone tell me which pics are over used so i can change that as well plz and ty.

[Battery Boy]

plz tell me which pics are over used.

[chrid97]

OCG, Grammar, and Spelling mistakes

and can you post effect for all please