♠Dark Forces Of Nature!♠ ~♦Unfinished♦~

[BoxedCrate]

Lore: This monster can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Death Twin Sacrifice". Once per turn, you may select a Face-Up monster card on the field. While this card is in Face-Up Defense position, the selected monsters ATK becomes equal to the ATK of this card. When this card is in Attack Position, the selected monster's DEF becomes equal to the DEF of this card, and this card's ATK becomes equal to the ATK of the selected card. When this card is destroyed, remove the selected card from play.

 

Lore: This card is used to Ritual Summon any Ritual card with "Twin" in its name. You must also Tribute 2 or more Dark monsters whose total levels equal 9 or more from the field or your hand.

 

Lore: As long as this card remains face-up on the field, deal 1000 direct damage to your opponent at each of their end phases.

 

Lore: Activate only when your opponent activates a Spell or Trap card. Negate the effect and send the card to your hand. Then send this card to the Graveyard.

 

Lore: This monster can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Death Twin Sacrifice". When this card is attacked by an EARTH-type monster, send this card from the field to your hand and inflict 400 damage to your Opponent's Life Points.

 

Lore: "There once was a famous Spellcaster who showed off his magic to the world. He was a great wonder across the nations of the world. But one day, a dark and un-natural idea crossed his mind. He decided to use the souls of multiple monsters to combine them into one! But it isn't like any fusion you've ever seen. He trapped the souls together, of multiple types!"

 

Lore: "These "Twin" monsters had extreme powers, but they all have a huge downfall--there are many spells and monsters to destroy them by ripping apart their souls, regardless of strength. These monsters are called Isolators. They are extremely weak, but their powers against Twins are deadly."

 

 

What do ya think? x]

[jayjack]

OCG errors, be more specific about "The twin" and i think you ment "Death Twin Sacrifice"

 

6/10

[BoxedCrate]

OCG errors' date=' be more specific about "The twin" and i think you ment "Death Twin [b']Sacrifice[/b]"

 

6/10

 

Ohh...okay. If you have time, could you help me with that? I'm really new to the card making thing..

[jayjack]

okay. ocg = original card grammer. So the text of the card isn't 100% correct.

Lets start with the twin dragon golem. it should be lvl9 considering its ritual spell card asks for lvl9 tribute.

And most of these cards are OP (overpowered). 4000 atk? seriously, lets be a bit more realistic.

Also, 5 finger discount is also OP

Twin storytellers should have different pictures though i see where youre going here.

when you write the "twin", you should specify the card name instead of putting that. its not only correct ocg, but lets the player know what card you're talking about.

hope that helped.

[BoxedCrate]

okay. ocg = original card grammer. So the text of the card isn't 100% correct.

Lets start with the twin dragon golem. it should be lvl9 considering its ritual spell card asks for lvl9 tribute.

And most of these cards are OP (overpowered). 4000 atk? seriously' date=' lets be a bit more realistic.

Also, 5 finger discount is also OP

Twin storytellers should have different pictures though i see where youre going here.

when you write the "twin", you should specify the card name instead of putting that. its not only correct ocg, but lets the player know what card you're talking about.

hope that helped.

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FTR, i already knew what OCG and OP meant but okay.

Thanks much!!!! :]

That really helps!

But for the twin thing, what i meant was, any other card. Any ideas on wording that?

[Rusty Shovel]

Something like this maybe?

This monster can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card, "Death Twin Sacrifice". Once per turn, you may select a Face-Up monster card on the field. While this card is in Face-Up Defense position, the selected monsters ATK becomes equal to the ATK of this card. When this card is in Attack Position, the selected monster's DEF becomes equal to the DEF of this card, and this card's ATK becomes equal to the ATK of the selected card. When this card is destroyed, remove the selected card from play.

 

God, that's confusing. And my correction is NOT right... but closer xD.

[BoxedCrate]

Something like this maybe?

This monster can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card' date=' "Death Twin Sacrifice". Once per turn, you may select a Face-Up monster card on the field. While this card is in Face-Up Defense position, the selected monsters ATK becomes equal to the ATK of this card. When this card is in Attack Position, the selected monster's DEF becomes equal to the DEF of this card, and this card's ATK becomes equal to the ATK of the selected card. When this card is destroyed, remove the selected card from play.

 

God, that's confusing. And my correction is NOT right... but closer xD.

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Its probably got some OCGE, but idc its better than what i have now xD

Thanks man. :D

[G-Break]

i like the pics.. 8/10

[BoxedCrate]

i like the pics.. 8/10

 

Thanks much!

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Soo, ive updated them nao, they should be less OP'ed, OCG is better, tell me if theres anything else i should change.

[BoxedCrate]

Bump it baby.

[kemren_18]

OCG..the grammars are wrong please indicate the right grammar on it..

the pics are good but be more specific.

[BoxedCrate]

OCG..the grammars are wrong please indicate the right grammar on it..

the pics are good but be more specific.

 

Okay, but can you specify where the OCGEs are? Thanks.

[yert8]

cool

[Jazin Kay]

Sacrafice?

 

Sacrifice.

[zink]

OCG errors and the pics could be better. 5/10.