Something new for a change

[Parion555]

I tried moving Fiend type monsters in a new direction.Please comment on this card cause i need to know if it's good or not:

 

 

Lore:

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set.This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play every Fiend-Type monster you control.This card gains 1000 DEF for every monster removed by this effect.Once per turn,you can decrease this card's DEF to by 1000 to destroy one Defence position monster your opponent controls.You can tribute this card to destroy all Defence position monsters on the field.Then,you and your opponent take Damage equal to Half of those combined monster's ATK.

[Lexadin]

Pic is good, but a little bit squished.

You need to put in a space after a . or a ,.

Interesing effect.

Its DEF should be just 1 zero.

A 9/10

[Boo Clan]

the def is just 0 not 0000 lol nice card

''Once per turn,you can decrease this card's DEF to by 1000 to destroy one Defence position monster your opponent controls.''

 

Is it to or by a 1000

 

And you need to add Spaces after , .

 

8/10

[Zeaux]

A little too easy to Summon, since you only need 1 Fiend-Type to Special Summon it, and then you have a beast stick monster. Summoning conditions are weird, but the effort is good.

[Guest Neo Fusion]

fixed lore:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play each Fiend-Type monster you control. This card gains 1000 DEF for each monster removed from play by this effect. Once per turn, you can decrease this card's DEF by 1000 to destroy 1 Defense Position monster your opponent controls. You can Tribute this card to destroy all Defense Position monsters on the field. If this effect is used, you and your opponent take damage equal to half of those combined monster(s') ATK.

hope this helps

[ragnarok1945]

just say 0 for Def, no need for 0000

 

tribute should be Tribute

 

the "then" in the last sentence is not necessary

 

problem is it's too easy to summon. I suggest you say you have to remove from play at least 3 Fiend-Type monsters to get it onto the field

 

8/10