Azure Dragon Serpent

[Keyu_Sensei420]

I like this card

Point out OCG please and any OP you think it has.

 

[jayjack]

post lore o.o

Ocg errors. This card is useful in legendary ocean deck, but increase its atk.

8/10 nicely done

[Keyu_Sensei420]

I keep it's ATK low due to its ability to attack directly but i will up it a bit

[e.x.l.t.]

Looks nice, just one minor mistake I can spot;

 

As long as "Umi" is on the field, this card may attack your .....

 

Just the "s and the comma.

 

And also, as it's a tuner, I think it should also have an effect like Emissary from Pandemonium's. Making it easier to summon, LV manipulation etc.

 

But still, 9/10

[jayjack]

If you post lore, i'll do an ocg fix ^^

[Keyu_Sensei420]

I'm pretty sure I got it

 

I also removed the tuner on it, that was a mistake and i raised it's attack to 2450

 

As long as "Umi" is on the field this card can attack your opponent directly. If this card is destroyed by the effect of a Magic or Trap card, inflict 1000 damage to your opponent's Life Points.

[ragnarok1945]

change may to can

 

Magic or Trap card should be Spell or Trap Card

 

life points should be Life Points

 

being a tuner makes up for its bland effects, so I guess that would balance out, I'll give this 7.9/10

[Shinobi Phoenix]

Ok, for the first line, the obvious text reference would be a card like "Mermaid Knight" or "Amphibious Bugroth MK-3" (though you don't need to put "Life Points" in the phrase). Modern cards like (Blackwing) Black Feather - Fane the Steel Chain are a good reference there.

 

 

Also you don't need to put Life Points in with damage phrases either. Gaining Life, paying life or losing life where it actually says "lose", but not damage.

 

 

 

So with that, your card could be typed up as:

 

"While "Umi" is face-up on the field, this card may attack your opponent directly. If this card is destroyed by card effect from a Magic or Trap card, inflict 1000 damage to your opponent."

 

 

 

 

 

Also, contrary to Pro-TCG belief, you do not have to use "Spell" card if you don't want to. Magic is the same term still and continues to be the official term in Japanese OCG (as they weren't the ones who were stupid enough to try and copyright "Magic card"). It's completely your choice. They are still interchangable.

 

 

 

And I rather thought it was ok for it to be a Tuner, it's a Level 7 Water monster, so around A Legendary Ocean, it would be a Level 6 and you could use it with your now Level 2 Water monsters for a Level 8 or Level 1 Water monsters for a 7. Still, it's your choice if you are saying the Tuner part was a mistake.