Destructo Magma Dragon [redone the last time!!!]

[zainshivji]

 

lore:

This monster cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This monster can only be Special Summoned by sending 2 Fire-Type monsters from your side of the field to the Graveyard. You can only control 1 "Destructo Magma Dragon" on the field at a time. Once per turn, you can tribute 1 FIRE-Type monster on your side of the field with less than 2000 ATK to inflict damage to your opponent's Life Points equal to the ATK of the tributed monster. If you activate this effect, you cannot declare an attack this turn. Once per turn, if you do not activate this cards effect and you have not preformed your Normal Summon or Set, you can Tribute 1 monster on your side of the field (other than "Destructo Magma Dragon) to Special Summon 1 Dragon-Type monster with 2000 or less DEF from your Graveyard to your side of the field in Face-up defense position. That monster cannot attack. If you activate this effect, you cannot preform your Normal Summon or Set.

 

thx ragnarok!

feedback if nessesary

[ragnarok1945]

you know you could have just edited the first post in your other threads for this, didn't have to make a whole new thread

 

but nevertheless now it looks much better, and I can give this one 9.7/10

[Shurikenny]

You still have ocg errors the lore should say: you may tribute 1 "FIRE" monster on your side of the field with "2000 or less ATK" to inflict damage to your opponent's "Life Points" equal to the "original" ATK of the tributed monster. FYI: Fire is not a type! My Score: 7.0 Good

[zainshivji]

 

Lore:

This monster cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This monster can only be Special Summoned by sending 2 FIRE monsters from your side of the field to the Graveyard. You can only control 1 "Destructo Magma Dragon" on the field at a time. Once per turn, you can tribute 1 FIRE monster on your side of the field with 2000 or less ATK to inflict damage to your opponent's Life Points equal to the original ATK of the tributed monster. If you activate this effect, you cannot declare an attack this turn. Once per turn, if you do not activate this cards effect and you have not preformed your Normal Summon or Set, you can Tribute 1 monster on your side of the field (other than "Destructo Magma Dragon) to Special Summon 1 Dragon-Type monster with 2000 or less ATK from your Graveyard to your side of the field in Face-up defense position. That monster cannot attack. If you activate this effect, you cannot preform your Normal Summon or Set.

 

this better?