DeltaMinion Posted March 10, 2010 Report Share Posted March 10, 2010 [/img] This is my first card...I hope you like it...:? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whiscash Posted March 10, 2010 Report Share Posted March 10, 2010 The concept is good, but the application needs work. Then again, first card. Alright, here's the list;1. Monster, not Monstor2. You can say "When this card is Summoned or Special Summoned" instead of "Played on the Field"3. Stats are awful for the level and effect. You've got potential, that much is for sure. You seemed to actually put work into this card, which is more than a lot of people can say. Good job so far! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeltaMinion Posted March 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 10, 2010 The concept is good' date=' but the application needs work. Then again, first card. Alright, here's the list;1. Monster, not Monstor2. You can say "When this card is Summoned or Special Summoned" instead of "Played on the Field"3. Stats are awful for the level and effect. You've got potential, that much is for sure. You seemed to actually put work into this card, which is more than a lot of people can say. Good job so far![/quote'] Aw chucks thanks...I'm new around here...guess gotta improve :)Aw...no more reviews? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Neo Fusion Posted March 11, 2010 Report Share Posted March 11, 2010 "When this card is Summoned, all LIGHT monsters are sent to their owner's hand."um one flaw, since pikachu is a light monster, that wud mean it wud be sent to ur hand too and u could never keep it on the field for long, maybe u shud say all LIGHT monsters (excluding this card) ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LittleBigDude Posted March 11, 2010 Report Share Posted March 11, 2010 Fake Type, anybody? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted March 11, 2010 Report Share Posted March 11, 2010 pretty good card...pickachu being a light monster himself would make his effect pretty weak but it has already been explained already.my ideas-make it so that he returns DARK monsters instead of LIGHT monsters other than that its pretty ok Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nulk Posted March 12, 2010 Report Share Posted March 12, 2010 pretty good i would either knock him down a lvl or increase his atk tho. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MasterShield Posted March 13, 2010 Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 Some OCG errors, and with ATK/DEF = 1300/400, this monster's level must be level 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeltaMinion Posted March 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 Some OCG errors' date=' and with ATK/DEF = 1300/400, this monster's level must be level 4[/quote'] Hmmm ok I see.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NightGuardian1764 Posted March 15, 2010 Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 OCG errors Pokemon is not a real typeToo underpowered for Level 5 monster Since this is your first time, I'll give you 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeltaMinion Posted March 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 OCG errors Pokemon is not a real typeToo underpowered for Level 5 monster Since this is your first time' date=' I'll give you 7.5/10[/quote'] Um...what is an OCG error...is it like grammar errors...? Oh and yes sorry...I now learned that Pokemon is not a real type Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niño Posted March 15, 2010 Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 OCG - Official Card Grammar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cyberdragon11 Posted March 15, 2010 Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 It's alright. It least it's ariganal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeltaMinion Posted March 15, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 15, 2010 It's alright. It least it's ariganal. Lol yeah this is my first...well....it's ok I guess....I have to improve though...this will always be my first Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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