Riryoku-Diachi Posted March 13, 2010 Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 Pegaus has finally gotten his favorite childhood cartoon to be the star of his deck! I know there are a few OCG errors in the card, or at least it looks like it to me so I would like you all to help me find them so that I can perfect the card. ^^ Please rate. [spoiler=Funny Bunny!!!][spoiler=LORE]Once per turn, you can pay 1000 Life Points to add 1 "Toon World" from your Deck to your hand. When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, during your next Standby Phase, Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. Once per turn, by sending the top 3 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Also it would be appreciated if someone could find a clearer pic of him for me. I know this one is kinda blurred. ^^ Toon Support FTW Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted March 13, 2010 Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 pop culture pic if it's going to be treated as a Toon monster, it should have some toon monster characterstics, like the atk directly option, yet you don't have it along with some OCG errors, but it's a reasonable start for a new member 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Riryoku-Diachi Posted March 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 pop culture pic if it's going to be treated as a Toon monster' date=' it should have some toon monster characterstics, like the atk directly option, yet you don't have it along with some OCG errors, but it's a reasonable start for a new member 7/10[/quote'] Sorry about Pop Culture pic but its a little late now. ^^; You're right though I should have put this there. I took out that effect. It is no longer treated as a toon, although it makes good Toon support. It also has a costier 2nd effect that resembles a toon effect (With a cost) and seems to fit good with the design of the card. Can you be more specific with OCG errors so that I can correct them please? ^^; (Pic edited on first post)[spoiler=newpic] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jayjack Posted March 13, 2010 Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 Post lore. I mean really. Post lore. Never not post lore. Posting lore is for your benefit and innocence. POST THE FRIGGIN LORE!afterward.. we'll rate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Riryoku-Diachi Posted March 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2010 Post lore. I mean really. Post lore. Never not post lore. Posting lore is for your benefit and innocence. POST THE FRIGGIN LORE!afterward.. we'll rate Posted under my card pic. ^^ EDIT: Does anyone think there are too many costs involved with the card? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jayjack Posted March 14, 2010 Report Share Posted March 14, 2010 Well, i can see how this is OP. I've edited the lore and also included some restrictions to make this card a bit less op. Also, i edited your ocg errors ^^7.6/10Once per turn(?), you can pay 1000 Life Points to add 1 "Toon World" from your Deck to your hand. When this card is sent from the field(?) to the Graveyard, during your next Standby Phase, Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. Once per turn(?), by sending the top 3 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly this turn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Riryoku-Diachi Posted March 14, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 14, 2010 Well' date=' i can see how this is OP. I've edited the lore and also included some restrictions to make this card a bit less op. Also, i edited your ocg errors ^^7.6/10[b']Once per turn(?)[/b], you can pay 1000 Life Points to add 1 "Toon World" from your Deck to your hand. When this card is sent from the field(?) to the Graveyard, during your next Standby Phase, Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. Once per turn(?), by sending the top 3 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly this turn. Thanks a lot man! I actually meant for them to only be once per turn but forgot to add it in. ^^ *Is in card editor* OCG edited and card reposted. You'll notice one thing about me, I always take critisism and edit my cards until they become perfect. =D [spoiler=Card update. Lore updated on first page.] EDIT: Looking at it I don't think the last, "This turn" is needed. =/ Correct me if im wrong but until I know for sure im taking it out. "Once per turn, by sending the top 3 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly this turn." Wouldn't it just be... "Once per turn, by sending the top 3 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly." I could be wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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