Actual Poetry

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

Beyond sunlit hours

Just colour and sound

On strings in the dark

Carry on

Carry on

Just colour and sound

Those visions I can never capture

[Ecoboy1324]

Pretty good

I whould add a little more to it though

[Juuzou]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

[Juuzou]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding, art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[Juuzou]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

 

I'm guessing you didn't even take the time to try to figure out the meaning behind the poem.

[Dissonance]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

 

This is exactly why I hate poetry.

[Juuzou]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

 

I'm guessing you didn't even take the time to try to figure out the meaning behind the poem.

 

Yes i did, in fact. want a line by line analysis?

 

Beyond sunlit hours

this could mean anything from midnight to the end of the world

Just colour and sound

so now you can't smell? that made a whole whopping load of sense

On strings in the dark

I assume you mean a tight rope. this line was the only one that didn't suck

Carry on

this line made absolutely no sense

Carry on

a copy/pasted line? this is a poem' date=' not a bad love song[/b']

Just colour and sound

see above

Those visions I can never capture

once again, this made absolutely no sense

 

THis poem looks like you were trying to make sense, but it just turned out vague and worthless. Honestly, I would scrap this poem entirely and make a new one.

[Womi]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

Would you also say that if Crab Helmet posted this topic with this poem?

[Dissonance]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

 

I'm guessing you didn't even take the time to try to figure out the meaning behind the poem.

 

Yes i did, in fact. want a line by line analysis?

 

Beyond sunlit hours

this could mean anything from midnight to the end of the world

Just colour and sound

so now you can't smell? that made a whole whopping load of sense

Going by your tightrope interpretation on the next line' date=' this could mean he's some sort of acrobat preforming. On stage, you're not going to be sensing much more than the cacophony of the crowd and the colors surrounding you.[/i']

On strings in the dark

I assume you mean a tight rope. this line was the only one that didn't suck

Carry on

this line made absolutely no sense

Carry on with the performance?

Carry on

a copy/pasted line? this is a poem, not a bad love song

Repetition is a valid poetic tool.

Just colour and sound

see above

See above

Those visions I can never capture

once again, this made absolutely no sense

Could refer to the fleeing moments in which he preforms a complex jump/stunt- that feeling of weightlessness when everything else falls away.

 

THis poem looks like you were trying to make sense, but it just turned out vague and worthless. Honestly, I would scrap this poem entirely and make a new one.

 

I don't really like the poem either, but your analysis sucked.

[Juuzou]

I had hope when I clicked this thread

 

That hope was killed with a flaming club.

 

You seem horribly disappointed. Why is that?

 

Your poem sucks.

 

It has no flow or rhyme value whatsoever. You took a couple words and hastily taped them together without thinking. it must have took you 30 seconds to make this.

 

Your post is unfortunately narrow minded. You posit that art must follow guidelines. Contrary to your misunderstanding' date=' art is a creative outlet, not a rigid system of rules. Furthermore, this poem took me far more than 3 hours to write, with numerous drafts and revisions, all based off of a painting I made earlier in the week.

 

By the way, ever heard of free verse or free form? Yeah, those are poetic formats.

[/quote']

 

I am not stating that art requires rigid rules. I'm saying that there is a difference between poems and something that looks like you copy/pasted it from a junior-high rock band.

 

You can't make a crappy piece of work and hide behind the fact that poetry is a creative outlet so people don't judge you. It's important that you move past the little voice in your head that wants to defend yourself and actually take advice.

 

I'm guessing you didn't even take the time to try to figure out the meaning behind the poem.

 

Yes i did, in fact. want a line by line analysis?

 

Beyond sunlit hours

this could mean anything from midnight to the end of the world

Just colour and sound

so now you can't smell? that made a whole whopping load of sense

Going by your tightrope interpretation on the next line' date=' this could mean he's some sort of acrobat preforming. On stage, you're not going to be sensing much more than the cacophony of the crowd and the colors surrounding you.[/i']

On strings in the dark

I assume you mean a tight rope. this line was the only one that didn't suck

Carry on

this line made absolutely no sense

Carry on with the performance?

Carry on

a copy/pasted line? this is a poem, not a bad love song

Repetition is a valid poetic tool.

Just colour and sound

see above

See above

Those visions I can never capture

once again, this made absolutely no sense

Could refer to the fleeing moments in which he preforms a complex jump/stunt- that feeling of weightlessness when everything else falls away.

 

THis poem looks like you were trying to make sense, but it just turned out vague and worthless. Honestly, I would scrap this poem entirely and make a new one.

 

I don't really like the poem either, but your analysis sucked.

 

D:

*thinks of a good comeback*

 

Well an analysis can only be as good as the thing you analyze!

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

It's about dreams, you moron. At least, that's what I interpret it to be about.

 

To you it could be interpreted differently. To the non-artist, it looks like nonsense, but anyone with any inkling of artistic sense should be able to discern some underlying meaning that they feel is right.

 

Musicians don't always mean for their lyrics to mean one thing. Tool leaves their lyrics open to be interpreted.

[Dark]

Lines 2, 4, 5 and 6 seem like they shouldn't have a place in the poem. =/

[Ea...Lord of the Depths]

The poem is titled Just Colour and Sound. You still sure I need to take those out? :P

 

Anyways, what's wrong with them?

[Death Metal]

Kinda has a dark and mystical feeling....I can almost see the artistic vision in it. Even if it is a little simplistic. I don't see why people dislike this so much. Maybe it's just because we all see things differently.