my first shot a making a card O.o

[syn69eyes]

hi well im a really big fan of kingdom underfire so i began looking for a morene strident card but found none, so i decided to give this a shot. i just got back into yugioh this year and im a fan of zombie cards so tell me what you think of it :shock:

 

[rate405]

Wrong forum, and ALOT of mistakes.....

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Either it is in the rong forum, or I never seen this character before.

[syn69eyes]

sorry if its in the wrong forum, do you mind explaining the mistakes?

[awsomedude30]

OCG errors:

1. its supposed to say 1 Zombie-Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner Zombie-Type monsters

2. Skip a line after saying the synchro materials

3. it should say: Increase the ATK and def of this card by 300 points for each Dragon-Type monster in your Graveyard.

4. say: When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard by your opponents' card effect, you can Special Summon up to 3 Zombie-Type monsters from your Graveyard

On a diffrent note:

Effect is kinda OP

i mean you could synchro with PSZ then destroy this card on purpose, special summon PSZ, Mezuki, and some other zombie card, then synchro for a 6 star monster and attack again

maybe you should say: When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard by your opponents' card effect, you can Special Summon up to 3 non-Tuner Zombie-Type monsters from your Graveyard

[syn69eyes]

thanks for the corrections,

I'm going to work on the card again, hopefully it will make it better

 

"Edit" alright this was quick maybe its better?