Yugioh: England Academy(Accepting Character's)(Started)(Chapter 22 Finshed)

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 16, 2010

Yep true Weather, it's ok...Im sorry for forgetting to update..So chapter 19 !

[spoiler=chapter 19 Libra Part 1]

7th Febuary, 2100.

As I sank down deep into the mysterious darkness...I thought for a while. What might happen to the Real World if I return ? How will I escape ? Why have the Zodiac Organisation destroyed so much to achieve their goal ?

___________________Zodiac Dungeons/Timeless Cave___________________

I awoke in a cave that appeared that Time has stopped, I skimmed around looking at the surrounding, until I discovered Gravity has stopped. As I looked I saw these corpse suffering in chains, as it somehow got Darker I realised that it was a slight Mirage...I was in mid air, I also realised that I was staggering. However, Time and Gravity still stopped, I gased as a Mystery Person walked towards me slowly, as he had a slight grin.

"You have arrived,"The Shady Character signed,"I didn't want this...But we have to duel,"

"WHAT !?"I replied as I landed flat on the ground, I stared at the Black cloak he was wearing."You must be in the Zodiac Organisation,"

"We've met before,"The Character anounced revealing his mask as it was Nerd,"Now lets start."

"NO !!!"I shouted as I noticed I was late.

"I am a one who have been caught into everlasting Darkness, like all of the Zodiac Organisation. However, I am no pawn to the Leader, I am actully doing this for the best for the World...We must duel."Nerd ordered as he snapped his fingers, suddenly, our duel disks activated, then our hands appeared.

"The same as before."I comfessed anxious, as the monster I summoned in the last duel before it was interrupted appeared in sight, Brave Warrior who was in Atk Mode (1600/1000)."But that's sort of cheating,"

"My turn,"Nerd ignored drawing his card,I looked at his face and I saw a frown."Guess I summon Gyroid in Def Mode (1000/1000),"

"Why don't you get rid of your Roid Deck...Impersonating that Syrus Truesdale's deck is NOT GETTING YOU ANYWAY,"I shrieked angry."You know that I would win."

"Hmp, well you lost part of your formor deck...And you were impersonating that Yusie Fudo's deck,"Nerd laughed in a comeback."Your Turn."

"I activate Stop Def switching your Gyroid to Atk Mode(1000/1000), now I remove 1 Brave Counter to Increase Brave Warriors Atk Mode by 500 (2100/1000), now Brave Warrior take down that Gyroid..."I commanded as Gyroid still stood (Nerd 2900 Life Points),"Hmm forgot that."

"Yes and you forgot where your friends are,"Nerd smerked.

"Where are they you fiend,"I replied in anger.

"Captive, by Brian."Nerd remembered,"Brian lored that Neo Cadi guy."

"It's YOUR turn,"I reminded.

"I activate Power Bond fusing Marauding Captin and Ufo Roid to Special Summon UFO FIGHTER (2400/1200) !!!"Nerd exclaimed as the Captin flying on the UFO started to glow,"Power Bond makes his Atk Double (4800/1200), I switch Gyroid to Def Mode then I order Fighter to Attack Brave Warrior (Rex 1300 Life Points)."

"Urghhh, gasp."I coughed in mercy, as I suddenly felt the pain of a Shadow Duel."I don't remember that card...Wait a minute doesn't Power Bond need 2 Machine Monsters,"

"Don't know,"Nerd laughed.

_____________________Forest______________________________________

Neo Cadi and Brian Ryan stood facing each other in a duel, while Peter,Destruct and Patrick were behind.

[spoiler=Field Overview]

Neo Cadi vs Brian Ryan

Neo has 3600 Life Points.

-Tunic Defender in Def Mode(0/2000)

-Tunic Soldier in Atk Mode(1600/0)

Brian has 3600 Life Points.

-1 Face Down Def Mode Monster

"I am never following people again,"Destruct vowed staring at the Duel.

"At least we escaped,"Peter pointed out.

"Im comfused,"Patrick admitted as Peter and Destruct stared at him like he was an idiout.

"My turn,"Brian smiled as he drew.

"No matter what you do this is almost over,"Neo laughed.

"Nope I tribute your 2 Monsters to Special Summon an Lava Golem in Atk Mode (3000/3000) to your side of the Field,"Brian smiled as he climbed up a tree, Neo was shocked as this Lava Creature emerged behind him and locked him in a cage."I end,"

"Ok I draw,"Neo drew as he noticed the Golem slightly melt lava on him (Neo 2600 Life Points),"I order Lava Golem to attack your monster, then I set 2 face downs and end.

"I draw...MUHHA THIS IS OVER !!!"Brian shouted from the card he drew,"I activate Brian Control paying 800 Life Points to gain control of your monster...Now Lava Golem direct attack,"

TO BE CONTIUNED

Sorry I was in a rush, I possible left a bunch of mistakes.

~Kip~ · June 16, 2010

very well written. Can't wait to see my character in a full duel with his deck.

Cthonian · June 16, 2010

Wow... it's been awhile since we've seen a chapter. I liked it. It was confusing because I forgot what happened since it's been so long but then I remembered. Great chapter and can't wait for the next one.

DARKPLANT RISING · June 17, 2010

It's fun to read, but just one question...

In how many chapters would Zakria come up?

CrabHelmet · June 17, 2010

Once upon a time, a man named Theodore Sturgeon observed that ninety percent of everything is trash. Nowhere is this more evident than in the world of Fan Fiction, where the majority of works are garbage, riddled with endless clichés, plot holes, and character derailments and totally lacking in any redeeming qualities.

The remaining ten percent, however, is to die for, and occasionally there arises a tale that transcends the standard fare. These masterpieces rival or even surpass the original work itself in terms of quality. They feature original, clever, epic plots, with rounded and dynamic characters populating a well-developed world. The dialogue is realistic and enjoyable to read; when exposition is necessary, it is introduced at a sensible pace and keeps the reader immersed; the characters remain sensibly true to their canon characterizations and are not forced to act like idiots to develop the plot; and the overall experience is something that leaves the reader feeling simultaneously satisfied and hungry for more. And it goes without saying that these brilliant works are heavily proofread to ensure the eradication of any errors.

This is not one of those stories.

If you are a fan of quality fanfics but you are a foe of mediocre-to-bad fanfics, then you've come to the wrong place - because today is a day for Foe Fiction.

This may or may not be the sequel to another story; I'm not sure. All the opening post says is this:

This series is continued with Domino Academy, but of chorse this is in England.

That's it. No links to other stories or anything. So maybe this is stand-alone and maybe it isn't. Who knows?

The story opens with several non-chapters: Chapter Plot, Chapter Rank's, Chapter App, Chapter Club's and Organization's, and Chapter Character's. (And [sic] on all of those apostrophes.) If destruction hero were making a movie, he would distribute fictional encyclopedias free with the tickets and expect the audience to have memorized them before watching it.

Naturally, I'm going to read none of this nonsense. On with the story!

chapter 1 Rise of England Academy

I can already tell that this is going to be extraordinarily well-written.

29th December,2099

If you are wondering who I am ? I am Rex Rabertes, a duelist.3 years I was at Domino Academy...Until it was destroyed.I still wonder about what Zyron is doing ? Has he contiued his mystery goal ? What is his goal ?

Okay, what is this!? What is this supposed to be? Look at this! Look at it! The question makes are floating with spaces before them, and are included in places where they are not necessary! The periods have no spaces after them. We've already hit a blatant spelling error that MSWord would have caught, which means that this was neither proofread nor spellchecked - though I can't blame you for not wanting to proofread this, considering how hideous this is. No first grade teacher would find this remotely acceptable!

I don't understand it. How can you guys look at this trash and say, "Yes. This is good. This is excellent. This is the best I can do. This is what I want to post on the internet to represent my ability to the entire world. This really is good." Does it actually look good to you morons? Is that the problem here? Do you think this is good somehow? Have you chaps ever seen anything written in English by literates before? How on earth can you write something like this and then decide it's worth posting!? How!?

To avoid being repetitive, I'll have to drudge through the rest of the story trying to ignore the fact that this syntax is so hideous that it actually causes physical pain to my eyes.

Anyhow, from this I gather that some chap named Zyron is known to have an unknown mystery goal. The problem is that people with mysterious goals are generally best served by not advertising the fact, so I'm going to guess that Zyron is actually some emo kid who acts like he has some mystic objective in order to become more popular.

England Academy/Outside School_______

"Im late,"I gasped running through England Academy in London."I can't wait to go to the legendary England Academy."

Protagonist running late for school. Check. Protagonist speaking out loud to himself for no logical reason. Check. Said vocalizations being so basic and obvious that even someone who tends to speak aloud to himself or herself would never say them. Check.

Grell, is that you? Those traits are very unique, unless you count EVERY DUEL ACADEMY FANFIC OC PROTAGONIST EVER.

As I rushed through the empty garden a teacher walked out.

And now we have an empty garden with two people in it. It's sort of like that Halo story that future-me reviewed.

"Who are you ?"the Teacher questioned.

And now an exclusive look into destruction hero's writing process:

1) Write "said".

2) Replace "said' with a pseudo-random synonym that looks like it should fit but really doesn't.

3) Screw up the punctuation.

"Im here for the entrence exam,"I replied.

"Ok then."the Teacher signed as his face was shocked.

Even assuming that "signed" was supposed to be "sighed" (since this makes no sense otherwise), why would his face be shocked? A sigh is appropriate for some kid being tardy, but shock? This guy can't possibly be a real teacher. Or maybe the narrator is unreliable and can't read faces at all. Or maybe the author just doesn't understand how the English language works.

"Well then come in.Im the one anouncing it."

"That's why I'm wandering around in the garden even though the exams must already be underway if you're late."

England Academy/Dueling Arena_________

As I walked through the massive arena tons of students on the seats were cheering as 2 people were facing off in an anmazing duel. Both their life points were 400 as one of the duelists just summoned the old blue eyes white dragon.

Isn't the BEWD canonically so rare that Kaiba is the only person with any intact copies?

"Spiral Serpent attack his summoned skull,"commanded the Spiral Serpent Duelist as the Summoned Skull Duelist fell to the ground.

"Aw man ! I lost!"moaned the Summoned Skull Duelist."Now I have to wait next year."

Wait, wait! What happened to the Blue-Eyes White Dragon? When you wrote these sentences, did you forget the sentence right before them when BEWD was summoned? You can't just summon BEWD and then have it sit there doing nothing while you win with other cards - and even if you could, why summon BEWD anyhow if you could just win without it? And why is everyone running nothing but big Normal Monsters? When your duelists are an order of magnitude worse than anime duelists, something is wrong.

"Yeah!"the crowd cheered to the Spiral Serpent Duelist."You rule! Guy with an old deck"

Indeed. The crowd cheered in unison to call him "Guy with an old deck," since the announcer was too busy strolling in the garden to say anyone's name, and that's exactly the sort of thing people cheer. And his opponent's deck, which also ran on big Normal Monsters, was obviously really modern.

"Well thats me done,"the Spiral Serpent Duelist said leaving down to the door.

"Leaving down to the door"? I cannot stress this enough: someone actually wrote this. And then they decided to post it. And then they wrote eighteen more chapters. And then people actually read it and liked it and kept reading.

"Wow that was amazing,"the Teacher said."Now for another duel Rex Rabertes vs Vilan Verge".

The opponent's name is practically "Villain". Every line, I think this story can't get any dafter, and every line it proves me wrong.

Vilan Verge was an duelist who betted cards, what some people for no reason call anti.

Indeed, they call it anti Ante for no reason at all. Well, unless you count, "Because that's the correct word for what is being described which destruction hero would have known if he had been anything close to fluent in English, to the point where that is actually the official term used in Magic: The Gathering for the card-wagering rule," as a reason.

I love how destruction hero goes out of his way to mock anti Ante for being a random name when it's perfectly sensible and he clearly has approximately a kindergartener's command of the English language. Apparently, he never heard the old saying: "Those who live in glass houses shouldn't try to fire grenade launchers in their homes." He's somehow managed to go beyond his normal eye-bleeding incompetence by being obnoxious and trying to mock people who are smarter than he is.

He had a reputation in England for being an avoided one.

This has to be a joke. I haven't seen sentences go clunk like this since - well, since the last Foe Fiction I did. But the point still stands!

"LETS DUEL!"we both shouted as we drew 6 cards.

You start by drawing five cards, not six. Even the actual rules of the game are butchered before the very first turn of the duel.

"First we must offer our most powerful cards,"Vilan betted.

"Betted"? You can't just use random words like that in lieu of "said" in normal conversation; you need to make sure that your verbs make sense. Of course, destruction hero goes the extra mile in screwing up by having Vilan not actually bet in the sentence where the narrator assures us he "betted".

"Fine my Medor Dragon,"I said hoping for a good card.

Isn't this an official entrance examination duel? Aren't there any moderators or judges or, you know, GIANT CHANTING CROWDS around who would notice and object to this? And why is Not!Grell agreeing to bet? His description of Vilan makes it clear that he doesn't like the Ante rule, so there's no reason for him not to just refuse to wager.

"That pathetic monster I might as well bet this stone I found loser,"Vilan insulted.

"Insulted"? I give up. I'm going to have to add word choice to the list of things that destruction hero is so unspeakably awful at that it's not worth complaining about anymore, alongside punctuation and writing in general.

"I'll show you my Medor Dragon's true power,"I said wisely.

When the protagonist randomly describes himself as wise, he loses all claims to not being an arrogant, self-opinionated idiot.

"Ill go first,"I said."First I summon Brave Warrior in Atk Mode(1600/1000),he gets 1 Brave Counter by the way."

"Ha,"Vilan laughed."Doesn't look brave,

Most witty insult ever.

oh well my turn.First I summon Panther Warrior(Atk 2000),then I play Scapegoat Special Summoning 4 sheep tokens in Def Mode(0/0).I tribute a sheep token for my Panther to attack Brave Warrior(Rex 3600)."

Setting aside the problem that you're not allowed to do that with Scapegoat (you can't Summon another monster the turn you use it), this is just a copy of one of Joey's combos that he used about once per duel. After screwing up the game mechanics, destruction hero has apparently decided that he's just going to copy anime characters' decks.

"Hold it I remove a Brave Counter to Special Summon Brave Warrior again,"I explained.

You can't do that. Once it's off the field so that it can be Special Summoned, it - screw this, I give up.

"Hmp pathetic,"Destruct who was one of the crowd mocked.

Want to know what's worse than an endless wall of "said"? An endless wall of words ripped from an assaulted thesaurus.

Also, I love how one single guy in the crowd says two words, and the narrator-protagonist somehow hears them perfectly (and nobody else in the crowd) and identifies their source.

"That warrior must have another effect or an tribute summon,"Peter guessed.

"I think of it as little use for battle,"Mac suggested.

Who are Peter and Mac? Oh, right, I forgot we were supposed to reach the encyclopedia.

"Well lets contiue with my turn since Iv'e started my turn my Brave Warrior gains a counter,"I said."Now I remove it to increase Brave Warrior's Atk by 500(2100/1000).Brave Warrior slice Panther Warrior with Brave Slash(Vilan 3900 life points).Not over yet I set a card."

"NOOOO!"Vilan shreeked in pain."Well then minor mistake for me.However, I have a 3 monster's left."

There's so much to complain about here, but I can't complain about any of it because everything has trainwrecked so badly so far that everything I could possibly complain about already goes without saying as being completely wrong.

"Ok then ill finsh it quick,"I said bravely.

And he's gone back to complimenting himself again. Ladies and gentlemen, our protagonist!

"Hmm a good draw for me,"Vilan grinned."I summon Chainsaw Beetle(atk 2400).Chainsaw beetle attack that puny Brave Warrior."

"Not so fast I activates my face down,"Rex said with luck."Holy Light!I pay 300 life points to negate your Attack(Rex 3300)."

"Ok then,"Vilan said slowly.

"My turn,"I said as I drew. "I summon Baby Medor Dragon in Atk Mode(100/0),then I tribute my Baby Medor Dragon(lv 4) and Brave Warrior(lv 4) to Synchro Summon Medor Dragon in Atk Mode(2000/3000)."

"All that for a monster weaker than mone,"Vilan chuckled.

I know anime characters never read card effects, but Vilan is obviously familiar with Medor Dragon since he commented on how weak it was before the duel started.

Speaking of which, what did Vilan choose as his Ante anyhow? We saw the protagonist choose Medor Dragon, but all we heard from Vilan was that he should wager a rock or something similarly stupid. No doubt the author just screwed up again and forgot to have him actually wager anything because he was too busy congratulating himself for the rock-wagering gag.

"Im not finished my Medor Dragon puts a Medor Counter on your bug and my spell I activate from my hand Medor Crush destroys your bug"I said."Next I activate big bang shot increasing my Medor Crush Dragon's Atk by 400(Atk 2400) and inflicts piercing damage.Now Medor Dragon attack a sheep token(Vilan 1500 life points)."

"NOOO!"Vilan froze."I end my t-turn."

People who can count will know that Vilan has a full five cards left in his hand, as well as two Sheep Tokens to use as he pleases. But destruction hero got bored of writing this so he just had Vilan pass his turn and forfeit.

"Ok Medor Dragon attack the other sheep token(Vilan 0 life points),"I commanded.

"I-I-I can't belive it!"Vilan froze like he saw a ghost as he threw the stone at me as it glowed."I will win next time we meet."

Wait, the stone thing was serious!? How stupid is the protagonist to put his card on the line with only a stone as the opponent's bet? And wasn't the rule that each player was supposed to ante the most powerful card in their deck? That stone is not the most powerful card in Vilan's deck, primarily because it's not in Vilan's deck and it's not a card.

"Ok those who suceed go to your house and return the next day I will give you your ranks,"the Teacher said as everyone left were thrilled as anyone could be.

Why is this duel academy having applicants duel each other, accepting everyone who wins and rejecting everyone who loses? That forces them to accept exactly 50% of all applicants, which is absolutely absurd. Not to mention that it could lead to a strong applicant being rejected by being paired off with another strong applicant while a weak applicant could get in by facing another weak applicant. The sensible system is the way it works in the canon - applicants dueling appointed duel instructors.

"HOWAY!"shouted The Student's who passed as those who failed glanced back as they walked into a heavy terenchel rain.

NO NO NO NOBODY SHOUTED HOWAY THAT'S NOT EVEN A WORD AND NOR IS TERENCHEL HOW CAN YOU HAVE SUCH AN AWFUL KNOWLEDGE OF THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE AND STILL ATTEMPT TO WRITE THIS STORY AND WHY DO SO MANY IDIOTS READ THIS

"I guess you're staying for 1 hour,"the Teacher signed as he paused for a while."Congrads."

Zodiac Hideout_____________

"Well then"the Leader talked to himself staring at his Virgo Stone."So another stone is found at England Academy.I shall send someone to collect it."

END OF CHAPTER

STUFF HAPPENS THAT I DON'T CARE ABOUT BECAUSE I'M SANE AND WILL NEVER RETURN HERE AGAIN

EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS STORY WAS AWFUL. THE PUNCTUATION WAS EYE-SEARINGLY AWFUL. THE WORD CHOICE WAS MIND-CRUSHINGLY AWFUL. THE PHRASING WAS BRAIN-SHATTERINGLY AWFUL. THE WRITING IN GENERAL WAS UNSPEAKABLY AWFUL. THE PLOT WAS ENTIRELY GENERIC AND RIDDLED WITH MORE HOLES THAN A COLANDER. EVERYTHING YOU COULD HAVE POSSIBLY SCREWED UP YOU SCREWED UP EVEN WORSE THAN ONE WOULD HAVE THOUGHT POSSIBLE. YO SHOULD BE ASHAMED OF YOURSELF FOR POSTING THIS. YOU SHOULD BE ASHAMED OF YOURSELF FOR THINKING YOU CAN WRITE. YOUR READERS SHOULD BE ASHAMED OF THEMSELVES FOR ENJOYING THIS MISERABLE PIECE OF TRASH. THIS IS TERRIBLE. TERRIBLE. TERRIBLE.

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 17, 2010

Ok explaination time, I guess I forgot to edit that. The fact that I put the person first to have Blue Eyes, until Kenta told me to replace it with some other card because the fact that acording to the Anime...I missed out a little part of that.

Secondly, his name is Vilan, even though hes a Vilain hes still called Vilan, if you read in a chapter it explains that.

Thirdly, it's my mistake about the Ante an obvious typing error.

Fourthly, Vilan is a rebel who bets cards, insted he betted a Stone, that turned out to be even more valuble then any card in his deck.

Fifthly, several people start drawing 6 cards in a duel.

Now you made a mistake when reading Scapegoat, because it said nothing about what you said. If you thought about it Vilan was done no matter what he did, because he cannot tribute his Tokens and he had a bad hand. That is all im going to explain, any questions post it.

EDIT: Do you realise most the answers to the pointless questions were on the first chapter, if you can read it. Plots always help, for an Hint.

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 19, 2010

Chapter 20 is up.

[spoiler=chapter 20 Libra Part 2]

____________________________Zodiac Dungeon/Timeless Cave_________________

[spoiler=Field Overview]

Rex vs Nerd

Rex has 1300 Life Points.

-Brave Warrior in Atk Mode(2100/1000)

Nerd has 2900 Life Points.

-UFO FIGHTER in Atk Mode(4800/1200)

-Gyroid in Def Mode

"You forgot one thing,"I pointed out,"because of Power Bond you lose Life Points equal to UFO FIGHTER'S original atk point what was changed to 2400 from fusion."

"Oh Donut,"Nerd frowned as a lasor beam from UFO hit him (Nerd 500 LIfe Points),"I don't care, I still hold the Superior Monster."

"My turn,"I drew,"I summon Commando Synchron in Atk Mode (2000/0), now I tribute them both to Synchro Summon Commando Warrior(2800/300), now the effect of Commando Warrior Decreases your monsters Atk by 500 (4300/1200), then Increases mine by 500 (3300/300),"

"That all,"Nerd giggled,"Pointless."

"I equip my Commando with Axe Of Despair, then Synchro Boost (4800/300), Commando Warrior end this,"I ordered with a smile as Nerd suddenly frowned, as Commando Warrior blasted that giant UFO (Nerd 0 Life Points).

"NOOOO!!!"Nerd shouted in fear as he staggered to the ground,"I have failed."

"I have a question,"I wondered,"I've dueled several people holding those Stones Of Zodiac before, why does the Stone glow at the end of the Shadow Duel, or should I say Zodiac Shadow Duel ?"

"I-I-I will tell you,"panted Nerd who was suffering on the Ground,"You see-"

________________________Forest________________________________________

[spoiler=Field Overview]

Neo Cadi vs Brian Ryan

Neo has 2600 Life Points.

-2 Face Downs

Brian has 2800 Life Points.

-Lava Golem in Atk Mode(3000/3000)

As the giant Golem raised it's arms and threw and punch, Neo closed his eyes hoping for the end. As the Attack landed and the smoke cleared Brian stared at the Life Points and saw it, he was surely shocked, (Neo 1200 LIfe Points).

"Explain,"Brian shurgged as his mouth was in an O shape.

"I decided to activate my face down what was Tunic Healing,"Neo explained,"I first remove my Tunic Soldier to gain 1600 Life Points, then after damage calculations I remove another one right now to Special Summon Tunic Blade Shooter in Atk Mode(2100/1000),"

"And you did it in my turn,"Brian gasped shocked as he noticed Blade Shooter glowing,"What's that ?"

"He gains 1000 Atk,"Neo chuckled,"Now Blade Shooter attack Lava Golem, (Brian 2700 Life Points), I end."

"Looks like Brian is going down,"Patrick grinned forgetting hes trapped.

"..."Brian elipsed as he drew,"This card isn't mine.

"You fool,"said a sly voice,"Use it if you have a chance of power."

"What is going on,"Peter reacted.

"Don't know,"Destruct shurgged.

"GET OUT MY MIND !!!!"Brian shouted tormented by the tempation as the Dark Flames surrounding them in a circle rised."Sa-"

"Sa ?"Neo repeated as behind him emerged me as I awoke."What i going on."

"Whats going on ?"I wondered,"I've just found something interesting."

"WHAT !!!!"everyone except Brian and the Mysterious Voice shouted.

"It appears the Stones are possessed,"I remembered."By demons, who desire Souls,"

"Your joking,"Destruct laughed.

"Hard to believe,"Peter admitted.

"It's true,"Brian comfessed,"The Leader told me, but it was too late for me to betray him, what was his name....AURIC."

"What a weird name,"Neo replied as he noticed the Stone Libra float in air, then from his bag Capricorn floated, they both shot beams, Libra was winning.

"My turn,"Brian grinned ,"I activate the Spell Card....LIBRA !!!!"

"Huh,"Neo didn't notice as a shroud of Darkness from the Stone Libra appeared and formed an Monster.

"Libra makes me pay 1000 Life Points to Special Summon Zodiac Beast Zalpor (2500/0)(Brian 1700 Life Points), Zalpor Decreases your Tunic Blade Shooter's Atk by 500 (1600/1000), Zalpor attack that Blade Shooter (Neo 300 Life Points)."

"I am invincible."Zalpor muttered.

"It talks,"I replied.

"Yes, I am the Demon controling this Puppet."Zalpor secondly replied, as Brian was unconsious."Im controling this duel now,"

"Oh yeah when Blade Shooter is destroyed by Battle I can Pay half my Life Points to Special Summon Tunic Dragon(2500/1000)(Neo 150 Life Points), now I activate my Face Down Light Of Tunic so I can pay Half MY Life Points to destroy Zalpor(Neo 75 Life Points),"Neo smiled.

"NOOO!!!!"Zalpor shouted as he exploded.

"Huh,"Brian wondered as he regained Consiousness,"Now Libra is at peace, end this, defeat me, defeat AURIC, save the Universe, once the Zodiac Organisation's plans are foiled I will be free, we will all be free."

"Ok Tunic Dragon direct Attack !!!"Neo ordered. (Brian 0 Life Points)

"Before I go to the Dungeon, I learned that there was an incident that happened Years Ago, the Zodiac Organisation attacked England Academy and took some Students,"Brian explained as he was slightly vanishing,"Also the other Zodiac Organisation will know you have Capricorn and will hunt you down..."

_____________________Zodiac Hideout/The Final Floor______________________

As Auric sat staring at the Alter that held 12 holes, soon he noticed 1 of the Holes closing.

"Ahhh, looks like Brian as fallen,"Auric guessed slying,"Looks like hes found out who hold Capricorn, someone called Neo Cadi....I will send Zakria, Tyler,Mac and Sakendo to retrieve the Stone."

END OF CHAPTER

CrabHelmet · June 19, 2010

Ok explaination time' date=' I guess I forgot to edit that. The fact that I put the person first to have Blue Eyes, until Kenta told me to replace it with some other card because the fact that acording to the Anime...I missed out a little part of that.
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PROOFREADING

Secondly' date=' his name is Vilan, even though hes a Vilain hes still called Vilan, if you read in a chapter it explains that.
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I know that's his name. But naming your villains after their villain status is about as sloppy as you can get.

Thirdly' date=' it's my mistake about the Ante an obvious typing error.
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Spelling aside (since I'm used to you butchering the spelling of every third word), the line about how people referred to it as ante "for no reason" still makes no sense, since "ante" is the correct English term for it, which seems like a good reason to me.

Fourthly' date=' Vilan is a rebel who bets cards, insted he betted a Stone, that turned out to be even more valuble then any card in his deck.
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Let me get this straight: Vilan was walking down the street when he happened to find what looked like an ordinary rock but was actually a ridiculously powerful MacGuffin. He picked it up and carried it with him, because that's totally what people do when they find rocks on the ground. Then he randomly decided to wager it in a card game instead of an actual card, and the protagonist was perfectly fine with this and had no objections to wagering his strongest card against A ROCK.

Do I need to elaborate on how unspeakably stupid every single step of this is?

Fifthly' date=' several people start drawing 6 cards in a duel.
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And the official Duel Academy entrance exams use your variant house rule rather than the official rules of the universe?

Now you made a mistake when reading Scapegoat' date=' because it said nothing about what you said.
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You can't Summon any other monsters during the turn you use Scapegoat. Vilan Normal Summoned Panther Warrior during the turn he used Scapegoat.

If you thought about it Vilan was done no matter what he did' date=' because he cannot tribute his Tokens and he had a bad hand.
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His five-card hand was so terrible that he couldn't so much as Set a spell/trap as a bluff? And this guy is a strong enough duelist that he bets on all his duels?

That is all im going to explain' date=' any questions post it.
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Here's a question: why are you writing this?

EDIT: Do you realise most the answers to the pointless questions were on the first chapter' date=' if you can read it. Plots always help, for an Hint.
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I rather doubt that the next chapter answers any of the questions I care about, especially "Why on earth would you think this story is even remotely acceptable?" Yes, I'm sure it defines whatshisnames unspecified quest and stuff, but I couldn't care less.

Cthonian · June 19, 2010

Darn.... my character has been sent to the dungeon lol. Good chapter though

~Kip~ · June 19, 2010

waah... no Peter duel. Ok chapter though.

DARKPLANT RISING · June 20, 2010

At last, my character is coming!

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 20, 2010

Crab Helmet, you still don't realise I said FIRST CHAPTER, answers most of you quetions and reading the Plot would answer a few of your quetions. The Rest an Mystery that will soon appear in Later Chapters. What part of Bad Hand don't you understand, everyone gets them someday. If you actully read the Chapter carefuly, Vilan said that he would bet the Rock as an insult and before he could give his actual best card he ran away, but threw the stone before he could lose a card, that' why he has a bad reputation. The reason I am a Writing this is because that it was a slight Sucess at the Beginning, then got slightly more each Chapter, because they read it Properly. I have a quetion, are you done yet ?

Anyway, I have decided that Chapter 21-26 will be the 1st Round of the Tournement do I will have to put at most 8 Duels in 6 Chapters. However, since chapter 24-26 will be a 3 Part chapter, the 3 previous ones will be full of duels. However, after chapter 26, the Tournement is interrupted by someone (Not saying Names), so then the rest of thi Book is defeating the Organisation, then the next Book shows the 2nd Round, Semi Finals and Finals.

Im planning for Peter, Zakria, Tyler, Mac and Sakendo to be in the Tournement. Also, Chapter 21-23 will be long chapters, so I will have to post half of a chapter one week then the other half the next week. And since I have only thought of several people to be in it, I still have a lot of planning to do. So im not 100% ure the next chapter will be posted...And I also have decided, that chapter 24-26 will have some words from Yugioh The Abridged, but this time NO CHEATERS ARE IN IT !!! However, it will have some lies about WWIII what will possible never happen.

~Kip~ · June 20, 2010

Card games on Motorcycles!

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 21, 2010

True, I should have some Turbo Duels, to keep this in 2100 since Tournements now in Fan Fiction are mostly Turbo Dueling.

έκλειψη · June 21, 2010

Wow.

Seems like you pissed Crab off with this story. So much, in fact, that he has a 'yo' where a 'you' should be. That just isn't normal.

DARKPLANT RISING · June 22, 2010

You know, destruction, going against Crab is never good... he knows how to do stuff.

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 22, 2010

Well true, even though im just answering all his questions, with a slight comment of questioning his question, it seems from how it ended up it could turn into a massive problem. I should say that im not going against anyone in Ycm, im just doing what I should do, make the Fan Fictions I write less comfusing by explaining.

Well lets just forget about it then, since there is a Mystery in hand I would think that you all might wonder something, so ask anything that comfuses you and I might try and explain it or explain it in a comming chapter.

~Kip~ · June 25, 2010

When's the next chapter?

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 25, 2010

Ok, im thinking possible Saturday or Sunday, if im late then apology to all readers. Im currently planning on putting an person from Germany who was invited and got into the Tournement. Sorry if any of the readers are German, but theres apparently an mystery about the German person.

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 27, 2010

Ok heres half of Chapter 21. I've changed it to French Person.

[spoiler=chapter 21 Round 1]

[spoiler=Part 1]

1st March, 2100.

It's been a while since that time we saw Brian, afterwards, I collected 6 more Duel Cards and ready to go to the Tournement. The others defintly collected theirs, because I saw them at the celebration party. Now, we have landed in an Giant Dueling Dome somewhere in centre of London.

_______________________Tournement Dome/Interior__________________________

I and the 15 others stood there as an Man who dressed like he was a Billionair entered. He was dressed like he was going to a Funeral, except the fact that he had an Afro on, he was Black and was Asian.

"Welcome, to the famous Duel Dome,"The Man welcomed in his accent, possible an Indian accent."I am your host and presenter of the Machines used in this Tournement, Resna."

"We are honored to be here,"Neo exclaimed walking up towards Resna.

"Oh, you the person who was in that Tournement last year."Resna remembered,"Maybe this time, you might win."

"I don't know,"Neo smiled,"I think I might have a decent Challenge this year."

"Ok, let me say the rules,"Resna exclaimed holding a piece of paper."I will activate a randomiser to show who duels who, sadly, it inly takes 2 random people from the list...So some people might have to wait to see who they would duel. 2 Duels per day and this day is Normal Duels, next day Turbo Duels, following Turbo, last Normal Duels...Got it ?"

"Yes,"Everyone answered as Resna left, with Neo following. Me, Patrick, Peter, Destruct and Baron walked into a circle.

"It's great we are all here, who know what mytery we will face."I started.

"I can tell one of us is going out in the FIRST ROUND,"Destruct imformed as he slightly glared at Patrick.

"..."signed Patrick.

"I can tell I might get a Challenge,"Peter knew staring around.

"Lets go into the Duel Field,"I lead as we exited. However, it seemed Tyler, Zakria, Sakendo and Mac were spying a they emerged from the shadows.

"It seems Brian was correct,"Zakria grinned,"That Neo Cadi loser has a Zodiac Stone,"

"Master has decided to control the Randomiser, so that we can duel the ones that we want to destroy,"Tyler chuckled.

"According to Master I will handle that Neo Cadi sometime,"Sakendo remembered,"It was thanks to Brian, that I was immortal, now I will finish his Mission."

"Easy--"Mac warned,"Brian was sort of like that, that might be what finished him...He was a great person."

"You 3 have forgotten what we were supose to be doing,"Zakria interrupted,"We were supose to be tailing then Aka spying, Lets Go."

___________________Tournement Dome/Duel Field________________________

The Duel Field reminded me of a bigger version England Academy, except the fact England Academy didn't have a Turbo Duel part of it and it didn't have a massive hole at the top that showed the sky. But also it didn't have grass at the centre of the Turbo Dueling Ring where people Normaly Dueled. It still had it's screaming fans, but it didn't have an Randomiser or an Giant Camera that would show it to nall of Britain, possible Europe...Possible the World.

"Ok time for the Randomiser to activate,"said Rasna who activated a massive sceem,"First Duel is....Patrick Ire vs..................................Baron Wis."

"Wise,"Baron corrected as him and Patrick entered walking down."LETS DUEL !!!"

"I activate Fallen Fairy Dust, so I can send 5 Fallen Fairy monsters from my Deck to the Graveyard,"Patrick smiled,"Next I remove 2 Fallen Fairies to Special Summon Fallen Witch Necro in Atk Mode (1400/2000) !!!"

"Still bad as always,"Baron corrected,"If you had a brain you would have your monster in Def Mode."

"What !!!!!"Patrick shrieked,"Means your going to Summon a Powerful Monster."

"Bingo, I activate Star Blast paying 2000 Life Points (Baron 2000 Life Points), so I can Summon Spiral Serpent in Atk Mode (2900/2900),"Baron grinned as his Giant monster stood on the Field as it roared a tidal wave at Necro,"Spiral Serpent attack Fallen Witch Necro (Patrick 2500 Life Points), I set 2 cards and end."

"Oh,"Patrick moaned.

"I've researched your pathetic Deck and there is no monster with enough attack that can beat mine,"Baron chuckled as he started to laughed,"Ha Ha Ha,"

"..."Patrick elipsed.

"Patrick Ire, if you do not do anything in 10 Seconds, this will count as an Surrender."Resna exclaimed from where he Presents, staring at Patricks fear.

TO BE CONTIUNED ON SECOND HALF

[spoiler=Part 2]

"You, knew that you would lose all this time,"Baron discovered,"Because, im Superior to you and im a Superior Duelist, while you're a Flare Fighter."

"That's it,"Patrick recognised."They Promoted me, so that it would make me shut up about being depressed."

"No, it's just th-"I attempted to correct.

"Shut Up,"Patrict interrupted,"My turn."

"And it looks like Patrick Ire, is back into the duel,"Resna anounced.

"I Summon Fallen Fairy Magican in Atk Mode(0/200), the best part is that my Magican gains 700 Atk for all Fallen Faires in my Graveyard."Patrick grinned as his Fairy glowed and grew (2800/200).

"Still,"Baron stood staring,"That must be the most powerful Monster you ever Summoned, but my Spiral Serpent is Superior."

"What if, I activate my Spell Card named Fallen Blast destroying Spiral Serpent."Patrick grinned as pointed at Baron,"Fallen Fairy Magican end this."

"How did that loser pull that off ?"Destruct questioned as the Magican's wand charged up and shot an eletrick ball.

"I activate my Face Down, Hydrorecharger,"Baron suddenly smerked as he revieled his Face Down of an Water Wheel as an Water Monster came out it,"Say hello to Hydrogeddon in Atk Mode(1600/1000)."

"So, I have to wait another turn,"Patrick gasped.

"Yes,"Baron concluded as he remembered,"Also the Atk of both Monsters are halved for the remainder of the duel (Hydrogeddon 800 Atk)(Fallen Fairy Magican 1400), so I get less pain (Baron 1400 Life Points)."

"No !!"Patrick secondly gasped,"Im done for,"

"Yes you are I activate my Face Down Ultimate Offering, so I summon a Hydrogeddon in Atk Mode(1600/1000) and an Oxygeddon in Atk Mode(1800/800)(Baron 900 Life Points)."Baron grinned as he pointed at Fallen Fairy Magican,"Now Hydrogeddon attack Fallen Fairy Magican (Patrick 2300 Life Points)."

"NOOO !!!! At least I'll survive,"Patrick shrieked as he fell, then another Hydrogeddon appeared in Atk Mode (1600/1000),"How ?"

"Hydrogeddon's effect, now the second Hydrogeddon attack Patrick directly (Patrick 700 Life Points),"Baron explained,"Oxygeddon end this (Patrick 0 Life Points)."

"Oh,"Patrick finaly gasped as he fell on the Ground unconsious.

______________________Tournement Dome/Interior_______________

"I guess Pat, has done better at dueling since after that Neo Cadi person, dueled...Brian,"I admitted to myself as I listened to the crowd cheering on Baron.

"Now we all have to wait for the next duel,"Destruct moaned impatiently.

"I predict a challenge,"Peter boasted.

"Next duel is Peter Tamaraku vs Francais...Frank,"Resna exclaimed on the mic.

"My turn,"Peter said relived as he left.

______________________Tournement Dome/Duel Field______________

As Peter walked down the steps, he gased apon his opponant, the person was short for his age. He wore on hat that looked French, perhaps he was French.

"Bonjour,"welcomed Francais.

"Salut,"replied Peter.

"I can speak English,"Francais replied anxiously.

"LETS DUEL !!!"they both shouted.

"Me first,"Francais exclaimed as he drew,"I Summon Reptilianne Gorgan in Atk Mode (1400/0), next I activate Molten Escape equipping onto my Gorgon."

"I Summon Immortal Angel Soldier in Atk Mode (1500/1400), now I equip her with Horn Of The Unicorn (2200/2100), now Immortal Angel Soldier attack Replianne Gorgan (Francais 3200 Life Point),"

"Thank,"Francais grinned as Immortal Angel Soldier surcomed to the Gorgans taint (0/2100), then the Gorgan reappeared and glowed (1700/0),"You see Molten Escape makes my monster invincible, plus she gains 300 Atk after Damage Calculation, but my Gorgon's effect decrease your Soldier's attack to 0."

"No way !!"Peter reacted."I was sure that Gorgon's effect was different,"

"Wait a minute,"Neo mumbled to himself,"Francais became the top duelist in France by defeating every person, but he somehow does the exact same move on his turn."

"I-m-p-o-s-s-i-b-l-e,"Peter muttered in shock,"Theres little chance for me winning.

"Pull yourself together Peter,"Neo shouted.

"Oh my turn,"Francais remembered,"I equip my Gorgan with Axe of Despair (2700/0), now Gorgan attack Immortal Angel Soldier (Peter 1300 Life Points)."

"Oh well I'll have to do this,"Peter admitted as he drew,"I activate Hevy Storm destroying all Spells and Traps on the Field, making your Gorgan's attack back to 1400,"

"Is this possible,"Francais gulped.

"Now I activate Ultimate Offering so I summon Immortal Angel Archer(1200/1050) and Blader(1700/1450)(Peter 800 Life Points), now I activate Archer's effect by Dicarding an Immortal Angel from my hand I inflict 700 points of damage (Francais 2500 Life Points), now I tribute them to Summon Immortal Angel Knight in Atk Mode(2300/2200)(Peter 300 Life Points), now my Knight will attack your Gorgon (Francais 1600 Life Points)...I set a card,"

"You've done well,"Francais comfessed,"However, not good enough since your Knight's atk is 0."

"P-E-T-E-R,"the Crowd cheered,"PETER RULES!!!"

"Foolish crowd,"Francais shouted overwelmed,"I Summon another Reptilianne Gorgon in Atk Mode (1400/0), Gorgan attack Immortal Angel Knight,"

"I activate Sakarutsu Armor,"Peter smiled as the Gorgan exploded.

"NOOO!!!"

"My turn,"Peter smiled,"I Summon another Immortal Angel Blader(1700/1450), Blader attack Francais directly (Francais 0 Life Points),"

"NOOO!!!"Francais repeated as he calmed down,"I guess I'll just work my way up France, I'll meet one of you in the Clash Of The Schools, so I'll have my revenge."

"PETER ! PETER ! PETER,"the crowd cheered for the rest of the day.

"I'll suprise them in the Quater Finals,"Peter bowed to his adience.

"It looks like Peter won."Resna announced.

"I've found out how Francais got lucky,"Neo entered,"he cheated by using Magnets for him to always get the cards he wanted, however, I took them away, so now it would be easier to beat him. Also, it seems he used one of the Magnets to launch a Magnet Beam into a machine that reverses Reptilianne Gorgon's effect...Seems he was a CC, by CC, I mean Card Collecter, since he has fled from failure he would be fired."

"Oh well,"I guessed,"Doesn't matter now, cheaters never prosper."

END OF CHAPTER

Des ＨＥＲＯ · June 27, 2010