Shadow Soul Posted April 3, 2010 Report Share Posted April 3, 2010 Hey guys, ok, let's wipe a clean slate, time to start on some pure sickness :P.......................... Lore: "Jungle Juggernaut" + "Priceless Metallic Dragon", When this card is successfully Summoned, toss a coin and call heads or tails, if you call it right, Draw a MACHINE Monster from your deck, and then shuffle your deck afterwards, if you call it wrong, your opponent Draws 2 cards, This card cannot Attack for the first 2 Battle Phases from when it is initially Fusion Summoned, in addition, this card can be Sacrificed as a tribute to inflict 1000 Damage Points to your opponents Life Points, "Priceless Metal Juggernaut" cannot be Special Summoned once this effect is activated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted April 3, 2010 Report Share Posted April 3, 2010 fix the first pics,,nice try,,keep on your way,,but is some OCG amd ned fix Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sákura Haruno Posted April 6, 2010 Report Share Posted April 6, 2010 its not MACHINES it's Machine-Type monsters.also... you don't capitalize monsters. its just monsters, not Monsters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
momutaru1 Posted April 6, 2010 Report Share Posted April 6, 2010 ok, fine, whatever, who cares its a card ppl i joined on 08 and i have seen the good, bad, ugly...and just plain weird. Trust me-I have. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diaboli Mors Posted April 6, 2010 Report Share Posted April 6, 2010 ok' date=' fine, whatever, who cares its a card ppl i joined on 08 and i have seen the good, bad, ugly...and just plain weird. Trust me-I have.[/quote'] Relax dude we are just giving criticism practice makes perfect. There are some minor ocg errors and you need periods after each description/effect. Attack Points is just ATK stars should be level Monsters should be monsters. MACHINE should be Machine-Type. The attack and defense are quite high i would lower them. Not bad at all i give this work 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A.Prime Posted April 6, 2010 Report Share Posted April 6, 2010 ok..I like the card, but I'm too lazy to see the effects and the OCG...so I'll rate 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CASPERULTIMATUM Posted April 7, 2010 Report Share Posted April 7, 2010 How do people get such good details in cards? I especially like the image on "Precious Metal Technician", there is so much detail! I can actually see that card and "Priceless Metal Dragon" as proper cards. Some of the text in "Jungle Juggernaut" is misspelt, and I don't understand the point of a Level 7 Normal Monster with 2400 ATK. Maybe consider lowering the Levels?Also, the wording for the last effect of "Priceless Metal Juggernaut" could appear something more like this:"...initially Fusion Summoned. In addition, this card can be Tributed to inflict 1000 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points. This card cannot be Special Summoned once this effect is activated." Then again, that's as much as I know how to do. You do some really good work. I know I'm new and inexperienced, but I can see great skill in your work. Keep it up. -CASPERULTIMATUM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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