My First Cards :D

[Shong96]

Updated --- Added a new card. "Machine Laser Generator". Again, sorry about the cheesy name. Constructive Criticism please!

 

 

Lore: This card can only be Equipped to a Warrior or Machine-Type Monster with less than or equal to 2600 ATK Points. The Equipped Monster also cannot attack your Opponent directly. Once per turn, if you have less Life Points than your Opponent does, the Monster that is equipped with this card is allowed to Attack twice. Once this effect is applied you must Pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases to keep this card on the field. If you do not, Destroy this card and the Equipped Monster. This card cannot be destroyed by Monster Effects.

 

 

 

Lore: Once per turn,you can inflict 400 points of Direct Damage to your Opponent for every Machine-Type Monster on your side of the field. If this effect is activated, all monsters on your side of the field cannot attack during this Battle Phase.

 

 

[LourDeath]

Well... this is my first card. Sorry about the lame card name' date=' i couldn't think of one. Please rate. If i suck(which i probably will), constructive criticism if appreciated. thnx~

 

[img']http://img203.imageshack.us/img203/5365/335535.jpg[/img]

 

this one's good... change it to common or rare....

 

^.^

 

8.5/10

and a +1 rep

[ragnarok1945]

ONLY should be only

 

Machine type should be Machine-Type

 

since you said attacking twice, I suggest you put some sort of atk limit on the equipped monster

 

you equip this to Chimera Overtech and it's easy to set up a OTK

 

8/10

[Shong96]

Sorry, i'll try to make it weaker.

Should i repost or... o_o

 

and can you explain to me what kind of a card Chimera Overtech is?

[LourDeath]

capitalizations also

 

forgot completely about the OCG >.<

[GraveHorizon]

OCG suggestion (bold is optional):

Thundering Paroxysm

"You can only equip this card to a Warrior or Machine-Type monster. While your Life Points are lower than your opponent's, the equipped monster can attack twice during the same Battle Phase. You cannot attack during the turn this card is activated. Pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases. If you do not, destroy this card and the equipped monster."

I also suggest raising the cost, maybe to 900 or 1000. Or paying Life Points equal to half the monster's ATK before it attacks.

 

Nice original effect, pretty awesome for new person. 9/10

 

[spoiler=This is Chimeratech Overdragon]

"Cyber Dragon" + 1 or more Machine-Type monsters

This monster cannot be Special Summoned except by Fusion Summon. When this card is Fusion Summoned, send all other cards you control to the Graveyard. The original ATK and DEF of this card are each 800 x the number of Fusion Material Monsters used for its Fusion Summon. Each turn, this card can attack as many of your opponent's monsters as the number of Fusion Material Monsters used for its Fusion Summon.

 

Actually, this card wouldn't really affect Chimeratech Overdragon at all, since it can already attack several times. Double attack cards don't do anything for monsters that can already attack more than once.

[tremorking]

OCG suggestion (bold is optional):

Thundering Paroxysm

"You can only equip this card to a Warrior or Machine-Type monster. While your Life Points are lower than your opponent's' date=' the equipped monster can attack twice during the same Battle Phase. [b']You cannot attack during the turn this card is activated.[/b] Pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases. If you do not, destroy this card and the equipped monster."

I also suggest raising the cost, maybe to 900 or 1000. Or paying Life Points equal to half the monster's ATK before it attacks.

 

Nice original effect, pretty awesome for new person. 9/10

 

[spoiler=This is Chimeratech Overdragon]

"Cyber Dragon" + 1 or more Machine-Type monsters

This monster cannot be Special Summoned except by Fusion Summon. When this card is Fusion Summoned, send all other cards you control to the Graveyard. The original ATK and DEF of this card are each 800 x the number of Fusion Material Monsters used for its Fusion Summon. Each turn, this card can attack as many of your opponent's monsters as the number of Fusion Material Monsters used for its Fusion Summon.

 

Actually, this card wouldn't really affect Chimeratech Overdragon at all, since it can already attack several times. Double attack cards don't do anything for monsters that can already attack more than once.

 

so you only made 1 card

[Shong96]

so you only made 1 card

 

1st card. i actually made nine, but im going to make them all less OP'ed now.

[LourDeath]

that's good... ^.^

[ChaosIncarn]

I like this card. Obviously, OCG, but that can fixed with practice. Not too bad for a beginner.

 

And by the way Ragna, I hardly think that anyone would power up a chimera overtech to only 2100 just so they could play this on it.

[Shong96]

Thanks! I added a new Spell card can people rate that one as well?

[Archelaus]

First Card:

OCG FIX: This card can only be equipped to a Warrior-Type or Machine-Type monster with 2600 or less ATK. The equipped monster cannot attack your opponent directly. Once per turn, Once per turn, if your Life Points are lower than your opponent's Life Points, the equipped monster can attack twice during this turn. If you activate this effect, pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases or destroy this card. If this card is destroyed, destroy the equipped monster. This card cannot be destroyed by the effect of Effect Monsters.

 

Second Card:

OCG FIX: Once per turn, you can inflict 200 damage to your opponent for each Machine-Type monster you control. If you activate this effect, monsters you control cannot attack during this turn.

 

They look fine. They're pretty balanced. Just improve on your OCG more.

 

8.9/10

[LourDeath]

i really am looking forward to that deck of yours...

icould see your love on machineries... ^.^

[tremorking]

i am not spaming this is my sinniature

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Updated --- Added a new card. "Machine Laser Generator". Again' date=' sorry about the cheesy name. Constructive Criticism please!

 

[img']http://img691.imageshack.us/img691/5365/335535.jpg[/img]

 

Lore: This card can only be Equipped to a Warrior or Machine-Type Monster with less than or equal to 2600 ATK Points. The Equipped Monster also cannot attack your Opponent directly. Once per turn, if you have less Life Points than your Opponent does, the Monster that is equipped with this card is allowed to Attack twice. Once this effect is applied you must Pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases to keep this card on the field. If you do not, Destroy this card and the Equipped Monster. This card cannot be destroyed by Monster Effects.

 

 

 

Lore: Once per turn,you can inflict 200 points of Direct Damage to your Opponent for every Machine-Type Monster on your side of the field. If this effect is activated, all monsters on your side of the field cannot attack during this Battle Phase.

 

 

 

can i ask you some thing? how do you create an entire new tread?

[tremorking]

were?

[Ahmmed6]

The lazer generator was a bit sucky. The magitcal blast is the same for spell casters and it allows you to atk, but the equip card was alright.

[Shong96]

The lazer generator was a bit sucky. The magitcal blast is the same for spell casters and it allows you to atk' date=' but the equip card was alright.

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I upped it to 400 points now how's that?