First Monster Machine Card w/ other old ones (fixed OCG)

[Shong96]

These are some cards i made during my free time. I hope they're not OP'ed cause I have been told that some of these cards are OP'ed. Rate ?/10.

 

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This card can only be Equipped to a Warrior or Machine-Type Monster with less than 2900 ATK. The Equipped Monster cannot Attack your opponent directly. Once per turn, if you have less Life Points than your opponent, the Equipped Monster can Attack twice this Battle Phase. Pay 600 Life Points during each of your Standby Phases. If you do not, destroy this card and the Equipped Monster. When this card is destroyed, you can Pay 1000 Life Points to place it back in your hand. This card cannot be destroyed by Monster Card Effects.

 

 

Once per turn, you can inflict 400 points of Damage to your opponent's Life Points for every Machine-Type Monster on your side of the field. When this card inflicts Damage to your opponent, all of your Monsters cannot Attack during this Battle Phase.

 

 

Pay 1000 Life Points. Special Summon to your field 2 Prototype Tokens with 300 ATK and DEF. These tokens cannot be used as Tributes for other Monsters. If these tokens are still on your field after 1 turn, you can Tribute both of them to Special Summon 1 Machine-Type Monster from your Deck.

 

 

This card cannot be Special Summoned from your hand. When this card is successfully Normal Summoned, you can Pay up to 1000 Life Points to Destroy and Remove this card from Play. If this card is Removed from Play by it's own effect, your opponent takes Damage equal to the amount of Life Points you Payed x2.

 

 

Once per turn, you can freeze one Monster on the field for 1 turn. (Frozen Monsters cannot Attack, change Position, or be used as a Tribute). When this card is destroyed, you can Pay 1000 Life Points to place it in your Field Spell Zone. When this card is in the Field Spell Zone, you can Special Summon 1 Ice Token with 500 ATK/DEF every time one of your Machine-Type Monsters are destroyed.

 

Constructive Criticism Please.

 

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[Shong96]

Updated with Ritual Card. Please Rate and tell me where to improve :D

[ragnarok1945]

that isn't a REAL ritual because you didn't say what ritual spell card is needed to summon it

 

as for the token you're summoning in that effect

 

you need to state the lv, stats, type, and attribute of the token

 

Laser Android is a bit dull for just the burn. You should give it an effect while it's on the field

 

7.7/10

[Canadian]

Most of these effects have fair OCG with minor errors and loopholes. There are some that are just terribad however.

 

To be honest, I didn't care for most of your cards but I think you have real potential with the whole Freeze Counter concept and wish that you learn to improve on it.