My First Card: Wrinkled Future

[Lampbot]

 

 

I almost forgot YCM existed.

[Coaster Guy]

I Think this card should be a 5 star, and the type of this card should be Zombie or Beast instead of Fiend

 

Not bad for a 1st go.

 

5/10

[Lampbot]

Damn! I forgot to save it. Can't change it.

 

But, thanks for the rating and critique.

[♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥]

Your OCG is bleh =/

 

The image is iffy to me >> but to each his own

 

Not worth the Tribute, its effect isn't strong enough for a level above 4.

 

Its relatively weak and I'd say a bit UP but im not entirely sure.

[Ralneox]

I would change a few things.

Change the first sentence to "Once per turn, you cam randomly discard 1 card from your opponents Hand". Change a few 'may not's to 'cannot's. The last sentence should be "This card cannot be destroyed in battle by a monster whose level 4 or higher." Change the type to zombie, beast or fiend.

But that's just me, good shoot at it! Nice pic. Very unusual.

[Lampbot]

I know it isn't extremly good. But I gave it a shot.

[Ghoulish]

ah well u tried, i rekon it could even be a 4 star, just try to balance the effects with the star level, or the atk and def with the star level.

[Inferno I20]

good card for your 1st card

good things-

-not a fake type

-not a vanilla monster with an absurd attack stat

-etc (things new people always get wrong)

bad things-

-bad OCG, if it was better then i dont know it might change

6/10

[Lampbot]

Please tell what's the problem with the OCG.

[SSStylin']

Please tell what's the problem with the OCG.

 

It's a bit vague/confusing at times' date=' as well as strays from standard card grammar (OCG) used in the official TCG. (There is also 1 spelling mistake with the word "dicscard", which should be "discard".)

 

[u']Examples of Unclarity[/u]:

 

"Once this card is on your side of the field..."

- sounds like a vague phrase for "When this card is Summoned" or "When/While you control this monster".

 

"If the select card is a monster, pay 500 Life Points."

- who are you paying 500 Life Points to? Your opponent? Are you simply losing Life Points because you selected a monster?

 

 

Examples of Incorrect OCG:

 

"on your side of the field" --> "on your field"

 

"you may" / "your opponent may not" --> "you can" / "your opponent cannot"

 

"a monster over 4 stars" --> "a monster whose Level is 5 or higher"

 

**for further OCG grammar assistance: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-51154.html

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That aside, time for the evaluation:

 

Interesting picture, quite befitting of the card's name.

 

In terms of balance, I have to agree with the previous posters - it does seem a bit underpowered. Perhaps increase its ATK & DEF or lower its Level (aka stars).

 

The effect itself seems balanced in its own right.

 

Stylish Rank: Nice try! 6.5/10

[Lampbot]

Please tell what's the problem with the OCG.

 

It's a bit vague/confusing at times' date=' as well as strays from standard card grammar (OCG) used in the official TCG. (There is also 1 spelling mistake with the word "dicscard", which should be "discard".)

 

[u']Examples of Unclarity[/u]:

 

"Once this card is on your side of the field..."

- sounds like a vague phrase for "When this card is Summoned" or "When/While you control this monster".

 

"If the select card is a monster, pay 500 Life Points."

- who are you paying 500 Life Points to? Your opponent? Are you simply losing Life Points because you selected a monster?

 

 

Examples of Incorrect OCG:

 

"on your side of the field" --> "on your field"

 

"you may" / "your opponent may not" --> "you can" / "your opponent cannot"

 

"a monster over 4 stars" --> "a monster whose Level is 5 or higher"

 

**for further OCG grammar assistance: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-51154.html

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That aside, time for the evaluation:

 

Interesting picture, quite befitting of the card's name.

 

In terms of balance, I have to agree with the previous posters - it does seem a bit underpowered. Perhaps increase its ATK & DEF or lower its Level (aka stars).

 

The effect itself seems balanced in its own right.

 

Stylish Rank: Nice try! 6.5/10

 

Thanks, this was helpful.

[Zektor]

OCG

once this card is on your side of the field-when/if this card is on your side of the field

may-can

 

the pic is meh

7.5/10