Lightning dragon

[Altaïr]

rate and tell me what i did wrong and sugestion lore:1 LIGHT tuner monster + 1 Dragon-Type non-tuner monster

This card gains 50 ATK for every LIGHT monster on the field.When this card attacks a Winged-Beast-Type monster the monster loses 300 ATK and 500 DEF.When this card attacks a WATER monster this card gains 300 ATK and 400 DEF untill the End Phase.As long as this card is on the field,your opponent has to pay 500 Life Points to activate an effect of a Spell or Trap Card.Once per Turn pick 1 face-up monster your opponent controls and that monster cannot attack this Turn.

[SSStylin']

I'm not too keen on Synchro Monsters, but from what I've seen thus far, aren't they supposed to elaborate on what monsters form them? (aka Synchro Material)

 

Btw, "Field" is uncapitalized.

[Altaïr]

let me fix that....

[Sp1at]

As far as I see most of the OCG is fine. Except there are some cap errors

 

Tuner-Type: Should be just tuner

Winged Beast-Type: Should be Winged-Beast-Type

 

So yeah your OCG is very good.

 

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I really disapprove of the effect though. All it does is gain ATK. I find it boring. And trust me Rag would said the same thing.

 

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Your Grades

 

OCG - 19/20

Pic - 8/10

It looks self drawn. If you drew it then its really good.

Balance - 10/10

 

TOTAL: 37/40

92%

[Altaïr]

i did not draw it and i fixed it i suck at drawing.......

[Sp1at]

Ok its OCG perfect now.

 

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Ok now you need another effect that doesn't involve ATK or DEF raising. You know because Synchros are the type of cards that are OPed.

[Altaïr]

so its 10/10?!

[Sp1at]

Not yet. You need to give it a better effect. Synchros are all OPed. You need it to have a cheap effect and it'll 40/40.

 

Incase your wondering I rate out of 40.

[Altaïr]

i think it is good because not all synchros should be oped i think since it shoulden't be over powered.

[Sp1at]

Dude have you looked at the Synchros. There all OPed.

 

Stardust Dragon is Oped as hell. So you need to give some more power except make the new effect have to do nothing to do with ATK or DEF raising.

[Altaïr]

here:

lore:1 LIGHT tuner monster + 1 Dragon-Type non-tuner monster

This card gains 50 ATK for every LIGHT monster on the field.When this card attacks a Winged-Beast-Type monster the monster loses 300 ATK and 500 DEF.When this card attacks a WATER monster this card gains 300 ATK and 400 DEF untill the End Phase.As long as this card is on the field,your opponent has to pay 500 Life Points to activate an effect of a Spell or Trap Card.Once per Turn pick 1 face-up monster your opponent controls and that monster cannot attack this Turn.

[Sp1at]

There we go now you get 40/40