Pokemon and Team Galactic (I will update)

[Myst]

Hello and this is my Pokemon set and Team galactic too. The sets will updated lots of times and if this thread is forgotten (like in page 6 or 7), I'LL make a new for the update. Please tell me any mistakes and I'll improve my cards in the future. And also rate please.

 

Pokemon Set

 

[spoiler=EN001. Bulbasaur]

 

[spoiler=EN002. Ivysaur]

 

[spoiler=EN003. Venusaur]

 

 

Team Galactic Set

 

[spoiler=EN001. Dialga (G)]

 

[spoiler=EN002. Palkia (G)]

 

 

New Cards!!!

 

Pokemon Set

 

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Team Galactic Set

 

[spoiler=EN010. Houndour (G)]

 

[spoiler=EN011. Houndoom (G)]

 

[spoiler=EN012. Croagunk (G)]

 

[spoiler=EN013. Toxicroak (G)]

 

[MibeR]

so how u can summon that monster???

[Myst]

Which monster?

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If you mean ivysaur and venusaur, put it on top of the evolution.

[Nu-Mou Knight]

Pretty good, if this was one of your first tries. Here's some problems I found:

Bulbasaur: "When you attack with this card, all your opponent's monsters with Leaf counters will destroy Spell or Trap cards depending on how many Leaf counters they are on the monsters." This effect is just plain confusing. Which player has their cards destroyed? Also, you got a bit too wordy. Try something like this: "When this monster attacks your opponent's monster, destroy a number of Spell or Trap cards on (insert victim here, see earlier question) side of the field equal to the number of Leaf counters on your opponent's side of the field". 2/5

 

Ivysaur: First, it's "Normal Summon or Set", not just "Summon or Set". By your wording, the monster couldn't even be played. As for "evolution", it's rather obvious that you've been playing a bit too much Pokemon TCG and not enough Yu-Gi-Oh. I would suggest changing "You may equip this monster on top of Bulbasaur," to "This card cannot be Special Summoned except by tributing 1 face-up "Bulbasaur" on your side of the field." Or, if you are set on the equip card route, then make it a Union monster and specify the Atk and Def boosts it gives, as well as adding something like, "When the equipped monster would be destroyed, you may destroy one Leaf counter on your opponent's side of the field. If you do, return this card to your hand." Everything else there seems fine. Great picture, btw. 3/5

 

Venusaur: See: Ivysaur

 

Dialga (G): Pretty good. But, way too many stars. Dialga isn't god card material. Second: "Normal Summon or Set". His effect get's wordy. "You may discard 'Adamant Orb' to summon this card in your next turn," could be, "You may discard 'Adamant Orb' from your hand to Special Summon this monster during your next Standby Phase". Otherwise, just a grammar error in the last sentence. "is," to "are on the field," sounds better. 4/5

 

Palkia: See: Dialga (G) Also, never make a monster 2 types. 4/5

 

Houndour (G): "If this card is destroyed by a Spell or Trap card, you may return it in your deck." Where in the deck? Top? Bottom? Just put in and shuffle? Make sure that someone else can read them and fully understand them before even posting it. Again, monsters should be only on type. 3/5

 

Houndoom (G): His effect needs better wording. How about, "When your opponent's monster attacks a Galactic monster on your side of the field, you may change the target to this monster." Also, you don't need quotation marks around Archetypes. 4/5

 

Croagunk (G): When do you put the Poison Counter on your opponent's monster? When it's Flip Summoned? Special Summoned? Normal Summoned? Destroyed? Remember, an effect that can bring down ANY monster needs a nerf. Btw, you seem to be forgetting to punctuate your effect lore at the end. Remember to do so. 3/5

 

Toxicroak (G): I could understand giving Croagunk 0 Atk/0 Def, but this guy needs SOME kind of power. With his effect as what it is, he's virtually useless. 1/5

 

Mainly OCG errors and a few grammar problems, but overall pretty good.

[Myst]

rite, i'll fix tat, thnx very much