My First Card...

[Master of Chaos™]

Okay so this is my First Card and i hope you will give me your honest opinion about it because i want to know if it's good or not. I used the Gold Border form Jay Jack's Tutorial about Gold Rare.Okay here it is:

 

[spoiler=Light Protection Dragon]

Lore:1 LIGHT Tuner + 1 or more non Tuner Monster(s)

 

1 LIGHT Tuner + 1 or more non Tuner monster(s)

 

When this card is Synchro Summoned, select 1 LIGHT monster in your Graveyard. Special Summon it to your opponent's side of the field. While the Special Summoned monster is face-up on your opponent's side of the field, this card cannot be destroyed by Card Effects.When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, destroy the Special Summoned monster. When a LIGHT Monster you control is selected as an attack target, you can pay 600 Life Points and remove from play 1 LIGHT monster in your Graveyard from play to negate the Attack. When you have 7 or more removed from play LIGHT monsters, destroy this card and Special Summon 1 LIGHT monster from your Extra Deck to your side of the field, ignoring the Summoning conditions.

 

 

Hope you like it.:)

[Zeik]

looks good very good for a first card only thing I can see wrong (and I'm no expert) is

 

"When you have 7 or more removed from play,"

 

7 what Monsters, Cards, LIGHT monsters. think you need to change that apart from that very 8/10

[NeosWiseman]

OCG fix:

1 LIGHT Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monster(s)

 

When this card is Synchro Summoned, select 1 LIGHT monster in your Graveyard. Special Summon it to your opponent's side of the field. While the Special Summoned monster is face-up on your opponent's side of the field, this card cannot be destroyed by Card Effects. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, destroy the Special Summoned monster. When a LIGHT monster you control is selected as an attack target, you can pay 600 Life Points and remove 1 LIGHT monster in your Graveyard from play to negate the attack. When you have 7 or more removed from play monsters/cards, destroy this card and Special Summon 1 LIGHT monster from your Extra Deck, ignoring the Summoning conditions.

 

It's true lots of words should be capitalized, but you kinda overdid it ;-)

The card is good, the pic is nice, descent effect

9/10

For a first card it's really good ^_^

[Master of Chaos™]

Thanks i will fix the OCG and Edit it.

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Okay i fixed it is that better?

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Anyone?

[Ghoulish]

great card especially for ur first ard ur ocg is a lot more solid then on mostof my crds lol i thin the only thing is that opponents sie of the field, i think it should be control of the cards to ur opponent but i might be rong, i love the fact that u made it a LIGHT tuner monster is needed, very original pic is ok, maybe incres the atk to 2500? But its up to u 10/10 fantastic job

[Master of Chaos™]

Thanks i made it 2300 because it is only meant to Protect your Light Monsters so i didn't want to give it too much ATK.But i gave it a good Effect as well since because you remove from play Light Monsters every turn and then you can destroy it and Summon something bigger like Light End Dragon or something.

[xender11]

100/10

[Master of Chaos™]

Thank you.

[Altaïr]

its great no OCG errors!

1000000000000/10

[Master of Chaos™]

Thanks!:)

[cool5]

Pretty decent for first the level and the attack really are decent.

[Master of Chaos™]

Again thanks.

[Twylight Shadow]

I rarely ever give 10/10 rating especially for first cards! Very nice I love the near perfect OCG. I believe you made it to match the Lightsworns or another Light deck that you enjoy. It is very original and creative. I love the effect it is very balanced and simple based for a specific usage. The card has multiple uses. I especially like the 2300 ATK factor because it cannot be destroyed by effects in exchange for a card on your opponents side of the field. If the monster would be destroyed by battle your opponent loses his gift and you possibly gain a big advantage of a LIGHT Fusion or Synchro monster. It is definably a game changer, it can help make a come back or keep the game to your advantage. Very nice, I appreciate your creativity and high effort :D! The combination of both has a nice outcome!

 

However, I did find 1 thing send a shiver down my spine.

The current effect can also be used to make the card more balanced. Although it is not entirely needed. Not sure if this effect was intended or accidental.

 

When you have 7 or more removed from play LIGHT monsters, destroy this card and Special Summon 1 LIGHT monster from your Extra Deck to your side of the field, ignoring the Summoning conditions.

 

You have no option when you hit 7 or more removed from play LIGHT monsters the card is automatically for it must be destroyed and then the rest of the effect fallows through. I am not sure if this is intended if not here would be a simple fix add (you can).

 

When you have 7 or more removed from play LIGHT monsters, you can destroy this card and Special Summon 1 LIGHT monster from your Extra Deck to your side of the field, ignoring the Summoning conditions.

 

This small factor could make the usage of this card so much easier.

 

However, if you decide to keep it as it is, I have no say for it is your creation.

 

Rate: 10/10 One of the best cards I've seen so far.

 

I've said what needed to be said.

[Master of Chaos™]

Wow nice to be told that.And the 7 removed from play Destruction Effect is intended because that way you have to watch out.If you use it's Effect too much,you might lose his uses as well but at the other side you might want a bigger Monster or a bigger Defense Monster possibly like Ancient Fairy Dragon.Still thank you it's really nice too get a nice 10/10 with an explanation.

[Twylight Shadow]

:D okay cool was just checking if it was intended XD like i said either way is awesome

[Master of Chaos™]

Thanks but yes it was intended so that the Player would have to have more Difficulty with the Effects.Wait...I just remembered if this card is destroyed by it's own Effect you can Summon another copy of it from the Extra Deck!