Seeking opinions on this card

[Solax93]

EFFECT: This card cannot be Normal summoned or set. This card cannot be Special summoned except by removing in your Graveyard 1 Warrior type monster from play. During either players turn you can remove from play 1 card in your Graveyard to Negate the activation of a Spell or Trap card and destroy it OR stop the summoning of any monster.

 

I just joined a couple months ago and this is the first successful card Ive made I need your opinions on it and tell me what I could do to improve my style for my next card Thank you to anyone who likes this card. EDIT: Sorry for the small pic didnt know how to use it but now it should be big Enjoy:)

[Nicky-whyte]

I like it but it wud be better if u sed once per turn you can negate the effect and stuff bcus if u cud continuously do it then that wud be ridiculus

[resaclan62]

Some things are kinda messed up. Try this effect, im not sure if it completely correct though

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by removing 1 Warrior-type monster in your graveyard from play. Once during either player's turn you can remove from play 1 card in your Graveyard to Negate the activation of a Spell or Trap card and destroy it OR Negate the summoning of a monster and destroy it.

 

Its really good but tis way OPED. Should be like a 8 star monster. Maybe make it so you need to remove from play 3 or more warriors from your grave. i really dont know..

[A.Prime]

this is the right OCG..

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by removing 1 Warrior-Type monster in your Graveyard from play. Once (per) during either player's turn, you can remove from play 1 card in your Graveyard to Negate the activation of a Spell or Trap Card and destroy it, or Negate the Summoning of a monster and destroy it.

 

for a new member 9/10

[resaclan62]

the or is capitalized sometimes. just look at any random union monster and you will see what i mean

[A.Prime]

yeah..ok..but this is not a union monster...

[Solax93]

Thanks for the advice I just looked at one of my cards sitting on my desk for the way to write the card and saw a big OR and I meant to put Once but went to fast when writing.

Heres another one I made Opinions? BTW I dont know how to write Synchro monster effects well.

"Magician of Faith" + 1 Light Tuner monster

This monster cannot be Normal summoned or set. This card can only be Synchro Summoned with the above cards. When this card is Synchro Summoned successfully the controlling player can special summon 2 Spellcaster's from their hand or deck without tributing. Once you may remove this card from play to special summon a spellcaster from your deck.

[resaclan62]

cap summon and set. the player controlling this card, cap special summon, spallcaster type monster, comma after once, cap the spellcaster. Also, always start with the tuner.

it nnice