kuriboh fan Posted May 16, 2010 Report Share Posted May 16, 2010 these are hyozanryu variations. here for their relative hyozanryu. i got rusty at making cards so i need a few pointers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tenneko Kazeno Posted May 16, 2010 Report Share Posted May 16, 2010 Okay, nice start to a set. Some rather intersting wording problems. For some, I'm making assumtions about what you mean. First, Baby. "You may tribute this face up card to increase one monster by 700 ATK and 1200 DEF." You can switch card to monster if you want, it just controls circumstances. With card, if it is in the Spell/Trap zone due to an effect, you can still use its effect, but with monster you can't. Next, Demon. this one seem over powered to me but that is up to you. There is no grammer problem on it but, I reconmend changing one word."Once per Turn, you must destroy two cards on the Field, or this card is destroyed." This makes it like Evil Dragon, if your familar with the card.The last thing is its a lvl 9 monster, thus it requires a summoning condition, such as, "This card can only be Tribute Summoned using three monsters." This is because lvl 9 and higher did not exist when the tribute system came out, and nearly every high lvl card like this have been ritual, fusion or synchro. For Ultimate, you already have a summoning condition, the effect needs slightly reworded though. "To Tribute Summon this card, tribute three monsters. If any of the Tributed monsters were Hyozanryu monsters, then increase this card by 700 ATK and DEF for each." Finally, Shining. I'm going out on a limb for this effect. "Decrease your Life Points to 1 to triple this monsters ATK and DEF for as long as its face up on the Field." It also needs a summoning condition. Thats it. I would love ta see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Expelsword Posted May 16, 2010 Report Share Posted May 16, 2010 The way you worded Shining, using it kills you instantly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kuriboh fan Posted May 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted May 17, 2010 oops forgot that detail, here they are new and improved. thanks all of you.Ta-Da! i call that trick: Improvement. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tenneko Kazeno Posted May 17, 2010 Report Share Posted May 17, 2010 Nice, but you should edit your first post and use spoiler tags for convenuse sake. [ spoiler=Whatever you want ] Your cards [ /spoiler ] Just remove the four spaces and they will work [spoiler=Whatever you want] Your cards Well, 9/10 for the cards. I like them and would like to see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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