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=The Testament of Extrarius Volume 1. The Eye of Incendia Part 1= Chapters 10 and 11 added!


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OMG this is some nice stuff can i interview you okat thanks

Q1.What was your inspiration?

Q2.If you could sell the copyrights for 42000 ¥ would you?

Q3.Are you planning to write more chapters and/or volumes?

Q4.How did you feel while writing this?

Q5.Are you going to give picture examples or describe how the characters look? Or is that our job?

Q6.If Animax asked you for the copyrights to make this an Anime, would you?

Q7.How did you think it through? Or like me do you just write what comes to you then improvise(As a fellow novelist)

 

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~Trixter

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OMG this is some nice stuff can i interview you okat thanks

Q1.What was your inspiration?

Why ask? But since you asked me' date=' Bartimaeus. Good stuff.[/b']

Q2.If you could sell the copyrights for 42000 ¥ would you?

No. Just, no.

Q3.Are you planning to write more chapters and/or volumes?

Of course.

Q4.How did you feel while writing this?

Happy.

Q5.Are you going to give picture examples or describe how the characters look? Or is that our job?

I don't feel like doing it with people I've never met before in real life.

Q6.If Animax asked you for the copyrights to make this an Anime, would you?

Once it's confirmed it's not a peten.

Q7.How did you think it through? Or like me do you just write what comes to you then improvise(As a fellow novelist)

Think what?

 

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~Trixter

You seem like a real trickster. Also, things on money are unallowed here. If you're just joking, just stop it. If you're serious, I have Crab at my side.

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@Chapter 5: Hm, double-space between paragraphs. It'll work wonders on readability.

 

You seem to have unified the text much better; the tone is more consistent than before, and the narrative flows much better. When the tone changed before, the reader would be jolted out of the world you'd constructed. That didn't happen to me this chapter, it reads better as a result. Your grammar is still iffy, but it's more than good enough given your location.

 

The effort is clear, the improvement is noticeable, and the read is quite entertaining. Keep it up.

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Keep an eye on Sammy. She's in mortal peril of becoming a Sue. Kewl how she runs Yukari's Sukima business, though. She'd be one helluva unit in an RPG.

 

Odd how you used the accusative for Cruorem (e.g. "cruorem ex me iam profundet,"); most would have used the nominative. It's refreshing.

 

When I saw the obviously-mortal writer of The Testament of Extrarius, I was practically jumping out of my seat in happiness. An ancient prophecy would have been boring, but it's obviously a lead-in to an exciting villain. Usually, stories are carried by their unusually sympathetic heroes, but an unusual villain will do the job fine in this case. That turned out a lot better than I thought it would.

 

So yeah. Watch out for Sam, good luck with Extrarius, review me pl0x. :D

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I've only read chapter one, and Supreme Gamemaster has already pointed out most of the flaws in terms of grammar and story, so I won't bother. I'm going to continue reading the rest when I'm not so tired, for you seem to have written something pretty good here. Keep up the good work, even if nobody seemed to have commented in a while.

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