YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 [align=center]Yu-Gi-Oh Chaos Fire Jack was a very good duelist.He graduated from his academy a year before all his freinds and was on the pro curcuit by the age of 15. He had the life of a movie star. And he loved every minuite of it. He won world championship after world championship and by the age of 17 was voted best duelist in the world. But he still had one dream to aspire to. His idol was Jaden Yuki and how he used to save his friends. This was Jack's dream. To become a hero to his friends and to the world. This story is starts as Jack meets his friends of the boat after they graduated. His 2 best friends were Jamie and Snowflake. Jamie: Heya Jack long time no see we've heard all about you being on the pro league and all!Snowflake: Yeah we think its great!Jack: Never mind about that we have so much to catch up on lets go to the cafe They went to the cafe and sat down after they ordered some drinks Jack began to talk Jack: So, what have you guys been doing this yearSnowflake: Well....Jamie: We won the GX tag team tournament, Me and SnowflakeJack: Well doneSnowflake: How about you, had any bigs wins that haven't been live around the world?Jack: Nope. Everything I won this year was live. No behind the scenes from me! Just then the drinks they had ordered arrived. Waiter: Here are you drinks......Wait.....are you Jack? Jack Oritami?Jack: I sure am!Waiter: Oh my 2 boys are your biggest fans could I get your autographJack: Anything for a fan! Jack gave the waiter the autograph and paid for the drinks Jack: Well hows Professor Edrising?Jamie: Jack you know she didn't like you? Right?Jack: Of course it was just a friendly question....Snowflake: You know Jack when we saw you on TV I was worried about meeting you.Jack: Why?Snowflake: You seemed so....different not like yourself but your still the same personJack: I didn't notice any change but then again I don't pay much attention to myselfJamie: So what is there to do hereJack: Nothing much during the week but they have dueling tournaments on weekends...Jamie: Sweet!Snowflake: Sounds like funJack: They start tommorow better sign up! So Jack and his friends went to the town hall to sign up. There was a woman with a name badge reading 'Janice' sitting at the table with the sign up sheet. Jack: Hey Janice I want you to meet my 2 best friends, Jamie and Snowflake.Janice: Hi Snowflake: HiJamie: HelloJanice: So, will you be signing up for the weekend tournament Jack?Jack: You know that pros can't enterJanice: I know but it would make it more funJack: I won't be but Snowflake and Jamie willJanice: Ok just sign this sheet Jamie and Snowflake signed the sheet and left the town hall. On the way out a boy, about 15 blocked the door. ????: Im not letting you get out unless you can beat me Jack: Who are you?Mikey: I am Mikey and I want explanations but don't worry they will come out during the duelJack: I have no problem with that Jack and Mikey activate their duel disks Jack and Mikey: DUEL!Jack: Pro's firstMikey: Yeah thanks so I start*Mikey draws a card*Jack: So you're a pro tooMikey: Yes and I am much better than you and I'll prove it I will Play Fire Kracken in Defence mode (1600) and a face down card and end my turnJack: Nice a fire deck well my Elemental beasts should beat it so I draw*Jack draws a card*Jack: Sweet! I Play Elemental Beast Fire King in attack mode (1800)*A Giant man made of molten lava appears on the field* Jack: Lets not stop there I activate Beast Rage so now if I destroy one of your defensive monsters then you take damage equal to that monsters defence so Fire King attack*Fire Kracken is destroyed**Mikey's Life Points-2400*Mikey: If thats the best the pro league has then the world is doomed*A dark glow surronds Mikey*Mikey: HA HA HA and do you want to know who its doomed from? Its doomed from me!! To be continuied.....[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 hmm..NICE..well its a bit like Aster..15 year old Pro..and milkey said i Star..it shouls have been start...just helping out..I CANT WAIT TO SEE MORE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Thanks I have episode 2 saved on my computer if we get more people read then Ill post episode 2! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Yahooooo! will it be posted tommorow cuz i really like this Fanfic! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 If we get at least 2 more people then ill post it TODAY! *Hint* Ill give you a rep if you get 2 people here to comment *Hint* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Ill try...I will get to it now! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Ok thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Well i sent PM's to 2 ppl..Rahim and God Kaiba..i guess they will comment... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
God Kaiba™ Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 This fan fic is cool the episoade is exciting and i just LOVE IT:-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Ok ill rep u when they do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Okay thats 1...I bet Rahim is reading it now..or he still did not get the PM and is making cards! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Ok thanks If you think rahim is not coming pm someone else Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Okay i Pmed GOD GAK....but i just wanna know will ep 2 be posted tdy or tmr... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Today If u like Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 No he didn't pm me but I'm just commenting. I like it. It's a good start for the story, the duel's nice too. Although it could be a little neater, little details. For example it looked like Mikey lost 2400 but it went down to that number. But it's great! I'd like to see the next part, today! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 [align=center]Yu-Gi-Oh! Chaos Fire Episode 2 Previously on Chaos Fire.......*A Giant man made of molten lava appears on the field* Jack: Lets not stop there I activate Beast Rage so now if I destroy one of your defensive monsters then you take damage equal to that monsters defence so Fire King attack*Fire Kracken is destroyed**Mikey's Life Points-2600*Mikey: If thats the best the pro league has then the world is doomed*A dark glow surronds Mikey*Mikey: HA HA HA and do you want to know who its doomed from? Its doomed from me!! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Jack: Huh? who are youMikey: Like I said I am Mikey and you shall find out the rest soon...Jack: Oh well I play a face down and call it a turnMikey: That makes it my turn then.....I draw*The card Mikey drew had a dark aura around it*Mikey: I think I'll save this for later so I activate the spell card Fire Gain so I gain 500 life points for every fire monster in my graveyard*Mikey's Life Points-3100*Mikey: Then I remove my Fire Kracken from the graveyard to summon Fire Doomlord (2000)Jamie: But he's stronger than Jack's Fire KingMikey: He is isn't he? So now Doomlord attack!*Jack's Life Points-3800*Jack: I activate a Trap Card, E Signal!*A giant letter E appears in the air*Jack: Now get this I can summon any Elemental Beast from my deck aslong as his attack points are 1500 or less I choose Elemental Beast Ruby Cat! (300)*A cute little cat appears*Snowflake: Awww...Isn't it cute!Jamie: Snowflake! Focus!Snowflake: Oh Yeah right....Jack: Well you done?Mikey: I end my turnJack: Ok my turn then I draw*Jack Smilies*Jack: Ok I activate the spell card multiply so I summon 2 more Ruby Cats! (300) *Jamie sees the smile on Jacks face and smilies too*Jack: I tribute my 3 cats to summon the Best Elemental Beast!Jamie: Yeah!Mikey: It can't be!Jack: I summon Elemental King Crystal Dragon! (4000)*A giant dragon type monster made of many thousands of crystals appears on the field*Mikey: I thought it was just a legend!Jack: More like Legendary! And get this whe he is summoned he returns all Elemental Beasts in my graveyard to my deck!*Jacks cards return to his deck*Jack: Ok now Crystal Dragon attack with Crystal Flash*Crystal Dragon fires up his attack and aims at Mikeys Doomlord**Mikey's Life points-1800*Mikey: You may have destroyed my Doomlord but whn he is destroyed I get 2 Doom Tokens added to my side of the field! (0)Jack: Well then lets ee what you got I end my turnMikey: Ok you asked for it I tribute my Tokens to summon my Molten Spitfire (3000)Jack: It can't stand up to my dragon thoughMikey: Not yet it can't but I activate the spell molten rage!Jack: What does that do?Mikey: Simple. It gives my Spitfire an extra 1000 extra attack pointsJamie: Now their strengths are equal!Snowflake: What happens now then?Jamie: Lets see...Mikey: You might think that our monster's strengths are equalJack: Well yeah, because they areMikey: But you see if you have no fire monsters on your side of the field then spitfire gaing an extra 500 points!Jack: But now he can defeat my dragon!Mikey: Yes he can so spitfire attack!*Jack's Life Points-3500*Mikey: Luckily for you to keep spitfire on the field I have to pay 1000 life points during my end phases *Mikey's Life points-800*Mikey: Its your goJack: Come on deck don't let me down!*Jack draws his card*Jack: Oh yeah! I summon Elemental Beast Baby Chick! (800)Mikey: He can't even touch my Spitfire!Jack: Maybe not but his effect can. You see I choose 1 monster in my graveyard and Equip it to my Chick and I choose crystal dragon*Crystals start to appear on the chick*Jack: That makes his attack 3800! Now I play Elemental Fury so my chick gains 1000 pointsMikey: But that means!Jack: Oh yeah! Baby Chich finish him off!*Mikey's life points-0* To be continuied..... [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azwolop Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 its plain man, its amazingly fast, and mainly the monsters in it, all you do is show there Attack, do what other people do and write the monsters info in a different colour apart from that, i guess the story lines ok, but maybe a little cliche, its like just not original Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Thanks for the comment Episode 2 has been posted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 I just Read episode 2 tho i think episode 1 was better but there was a mistake his LP should have benn 2400 you put 2600... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YamiCardMaker Posted December 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Oops sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 Some grammar errors. A lot, actually. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted December 31, 2007 Report Share Posted December 31, 2007 I noticed it too, the LP were incorrect in ep 2. But it didn't matter, it would be the same. Btw, you are not the first one to make the part where the enemy says "I thought it was just a legend" and the good guy "More like legendary". I've seen it somewhere else. Oh, and the part where Jamie sees Jacks smile because they think the same, there's a part in my own FanFic that is a little the same... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted January 1, 2008 Report Share Posted January 1, 2008 Btw' date=' you are not the first one to make the part where the enemy says "I thought it was just a legend" and the good guy "More like legendary". I've seen it somewhere else. [/quote'] Wait a sec, that wasn't another Fanfic, Marcel said that when he met Rainbow Dragon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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