Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 [spoiler=[b]Kind J-Der's Lore[/b] ] "Soldat J" + "J-Ark"This card can only be Special Summoned from the Fusion Deck by Tributing the face-up Fusion Material monsters you control (You do not use Polymerization). Once per turn, You can send any number of cards from your hand to the Graveyard to destroy the same number of cards on the field. You cannot declare an attack the turn you use this effect. If "Arma - Ikumi Kaidou" is not on your field, this card's ATK is reduced to 0 and it cannot activate it's effect. One of the Few Machine Cards I had trouble coming up with.Quotes by Soldat J:"Mega Fujon!.... Keinguh.. J-DAAAAH!!!""Maser Cannons, FIRE!!""J-Quath!!"Hope you guys like it.He is powered by the G-Stone's Opposite: The J-Jewel!From the Anime GaoGaiGar.[spoiler=[b]Releases of "J-Ark" "Soldat J" and "Ikumi Kaidou"[/b] ][spoiler=Lore for J]If there is no face-up "Arma - Ikumi Kaidou", this card's ATK is decreased by 700. If this card attacks a monster with DEF lower than this card's ATK, inflict the difference as Battle Damage. [spoiler=Lore for the J-Ark]Once per turn, you can discard 1 card to destroy 1 card on the field. If "Arma - Ikumi Kaidou" is not face-up on the field, the original ATK of this card becomes 1000. [spoiler=Lore for Kaidou] When there is only 1 monster on your field and it is a Machine-Type monster, you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon this card from your hand. When this card battles a Fiend or a Machine-Type monster, increase this card's ATK by 500 during the Damage Step only. Once per turn, you can negate the attack of 1 of your opponent's Machine-Type monsters by paying 700 Life Points. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 I wonder if there are any errors? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 I'm sorry to tell you but I see some....:?Here is a fixed version:"Soldat J" + "J-Ark"This card can only be Special Summoned from the Fusion Deck by Tributing the face-up Fusion Material monsters you control (You do not use Polymerization). You can send any number of cards from your hand to the Graveyard to destroy the same number of cards on the field. You cannot declare an attack the turn you use this effect. If "Soldat J" is not on your field or in your Graveyard Graveyard, this card's ATK is reduced to 0. This should do ^^The card is really good!There is something that bother's me though. The effect that discards card. When can it be activated? It seems kinda overpowered if can be used multiple times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snyperfox2003 Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 pretty intresting card. looks useful too8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 His effect is during your turn.unless it should be "Once per turn"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 Well, better would be once per turn, yeah. And still seems a little overpowered Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 fixed plus added drawback with "Once per turn"Wait now i see the overpowered part.Even if it's reduced to 0, it can still destroy with it's effect.maybe DEF should be decreased also?Should I add "and you cannot activate this card's effect." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 Added bigger drawback by need "Arma - Ikumi Kaidou" instead. Because in the show:Every Soldat unit was given an White Arc and an ArmaBoth Soldat J-002 and the J-Ark are linked to Kaidou. so if he were to drained of energy or something, So will Soldat J and the J-Ark. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 Well I didn't mean such a major rework in the last part. All I suggested was making a limit to the number of cards you can discard. Like up to 2 or something, but the way you did it still should work. I'm not that sure if I didn't made you nerf it too much. I suppose we can see if somebody else comments on it. ;-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 Yea but with it's high Defence, He can still hold his ownStill having a hard time thinking what Kaidou's ATK, DEF and effect should be? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 I googled it up and that's what I thought of:I'm not sure but I think he should be Psychic-Type.Level 4/ LIGHTATK/1800DEF/1500Effect:When there is only 1 monster on your field and it is a Machine-Type monster, you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon this card from your hand. When this card battles a Machine-Type monster, increase this card's ATK by 500 during the Damage Step only. Once per turn, you can negate the attack of 1 of your opponent's Machine-Type monsters by paying 700 Life Points. Of course, first you have to make all monsters your opponent controls Machines, but this is effect suitable imo. At least according to what I just read. You can use the ideas, if you'd like ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 that seems better than what I had in mind:"Once per turn, this card cannot be destroyed by battle." with 1600 ATK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 that seems better than what I had in mind:"Once per turn' date=' this card cannot be destroyed by battle." with 1600 ATK.[/quote'] Better, Idk, but mine definitely is longer :DYou should choose, though. I just gave you an idea ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 I like having Kaidou with higher ATK.but he also battled Fiendish foes.So is it okay to add to the increase ATK effect with "When this card battles a Fiend or a Machine-Type monster"?*Sparkly Eyes* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeosWiseman Posted June 10, 2010 Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 Well, it will be your card so you can add whatever you want. I have no problem with it. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 10, 2010 woops, I think the OCG to J is wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Neo Fusion Posted June 11, 2010 Report Share Posted June 11, 2010 fusion monster is OPed, but since it's whole effect depends on one monster, i guess it evens outpics are meh, but im betting u cudnt find any better, so thas fineminor OCG errorsoverall not bad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shizuku Oikawa Posted June 11, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2010 Especially for Kaidou and J-ArkI had to crop a picture just to pet some of them in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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