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[Deathwave18790]

Hey guys, this is an updated version. The first pic is the old card. The second one is the updated one. Thanks for the advice, and help. What else? Is it still too over-powered?

 

 

Alal can only be used for 4 turns. You must offer 3 level 6 or higher monsters to summon Alal. The attack and defense are the total of the monsters offered. Alal can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by offering half your life points. The attack and defense remain the same. Negates all spell, trap cards; including monster effects. Destroys any Spell or Trap card on the field instantly when summoned.

 

 

 

During the 3rd End Phase after this card has been Summoned, send this card to the Graveyard. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by it's own effect or by Tributing 2 Level 5 or lower monsters, and 1 Level 6 monster. The original ATK and DEF of this card is the combined total ATK and DEF of the Tributed monsters. You can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon this card from the Graveyard. This card is unaffected by Spell or Trap cards, and Monster effects, except its own. When this card is Summoned, destroy all Spell and Trap cards on the field.

[Shizuku Oikawa]

you know, you can just click the card on card maker, copy the link under the card then post the card on the topic.

[Maz]

Don't put attached files, alot of people (me) don't like that. Do what DHeroDogma said, and don't double post.

[Shizuku Oikawa]

You know, I was slightly expecting this when I read the description.

OCG errors, Ulti-Rare, Divine Beast, and Overpowered.

what I didn't expect was a eh.. somewhat low quality pic

 

Error fixes in order:

"During the 4th End Phase after this card has been Summoned, send this card to the Graveyard. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by it's own effect or by Tributing 4 Level 6 or higher monsters. The original ATK and DEF of this card is the combined total ATK and DEF of the Tributed monsters. You can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon this card from the Graveyard. Negate the effects of all other cards on the field. When this card is Summoned, destroy all Spell and Trap Cards on the field."

 

Well that's as good as I know for OCG for something like this...

 

5.5/10 even more powerful than all of the God Cards, but 4 tributes that are Level 6 and higher, I guess it's understandable

Well, you tryed, I guess, for a new Member... I'm sure you'll become great at making realistic cards in a couple of days.

just not as realistic as the masters of OCG here (And no I don't mean me!). lol

[Shizuku Oikawa]

Although 4 turns is all it needs...

I leave it to the rest to fix my errors...

[Myst]

lots and lots of OCG errors that I can't point out. 5/10 for a try, you're a new member (would be 0/10 soz)

[A.Prime]

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 4 Level 6 or higher monsters or by it's own effect. The original ATK and DEF of this card is the combined total ATK and DEF of the Tributed monsters. During the 4th End Phase after this card has been Summoned, send this card to the Graveyard. You can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon this card from the Graveyard. This card is uneffected by Spell, Trap or Monster Effects. When this card is Summoned, destroy all Spell and Trap Cards on the field."

 

I think that is the right correction....anyway, it's too OP'ed, The pic is Overused and with low rezolution....but for a new guy it's good.. so 7/10