Pichu Posted June 30, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 bumpies! [spoiler=#9: Dragon Ball ZX: Rise of Evil by mason1999]9th review time! We now start Dragon Ball ZX: Rise of Evil. Please note I know nothing about Dragon Ball. Volume 1 Episode 1:The Three Deaths Part 1 It was 12:00 PM on Earth in the Plains that Vegeta and Trunks were training....."Big Bang Attack!" That's funny! I'm watching Big Bang Theory and I read this. said Vegeta aiming it at Trunks. Trunks dodged the blast and turned Super Sayian.Trunks un-sheathed the sword he got from Tapion, Trunks charged to Vegeta in the air ready to go for a deathly blow, Vegeta dodged the stab and hit Trunks so hard Trunks went crashing to the ground a mile away.Time to go Super Sayian 2 thought Vegeta, he then transformed into Super Sayian 2 form. We have a big battle sence here! Who doesn't like battle sences? "Time to die Trunks, hahahahahaha!" said Vegeta while spreading his arms apart on both sides of his body, "Final Flash!" said Vegeta closing both hands together and shooting a beam from both hands together. The beam then penetrated Trunk' armor strait into his chest........ Sounds painful. Like the Frying Pan Treatment. The training room Bulma made that simulates battles transformed back into its original state."Father,you beat me again. I have failed,for the twenieth time." said Trunks with a playful smile on his face,"You still should try to fight Piccolo or Gohan." Father!? Twenieth time!? The 20th Star Wars: Trunks, I am your father! Bulma then walked through a door saying, "Trunks that wasn't the worse you have fought on the twenty recordings against Vegeta, besides your father was using one of his strongest moves in his Super Sayian 2 form," Super Sayian? I fear it is like Super Sonic..... said Bulma looking to where Vegeta was a second a go,"He must have left to go train, how 'bout you give it a break and rest for a couple of hours?" suggested Bulma. Trunks then nodded and left to go change. That was short! OWAIT! There's more! Part 2 Gohan felt a very strong Ki towards the North,where the Dragon Ball Shrine is,and also where all seven Dragon Balls were, Dragons have seven!?!?!? "I have to get there before they get inside and make a wish on the Dragon Balls, I thought it was make a wish on a shooting star not make a wish on a dragon's private area. even if Father stops trys to stop them he may fail with a Ki that strong!" Gohan then made a mad dash towards the Dragon Ball Shrine.......When he arrived he saw that Vegeta and Piccolo were fighting off three strong villans:Broly,Cell and a unknown demonish monster. How could Broly and Cell get out of Hell?! Gohan thought, he then turned into Ultimate Gohan(Mystic Gohan) and dove into the battle.......... A battle for the balls! Ewwwww. "Vegeta! What is that monster?!" yelled Piccolo while dodging Broly's punches, when Gohan came and delivered a mortal blow to Cell."Its name is Janemba!" said Vegeta fighting the evil monster Janemba. "Hahahahaha,I remember you!" said Janemba,"The only way you stoped me was using the Fusion Technique, whch wont work now!" said Janemba pulling out his sword,"Ready to dance with death?!" while stabbing into Vegeta's armor. NO! HE CAN'T DIE! IT'S NOT EVEN CHAPTER 3 YET! ALL THE DYING HAPPENS IN CHAPTER 3!!!!! "Noooooo!!" said Gohan as he was fighting Cell, "I'm getting tired of this Cell! Super Kamehameha!" said Gohan when he was about to release the blast Janemba grabbed Gohan and stabbed him letting go of the sword."Gohan!" said Piccolo as Broly threw him against rock solid stone,"Go........han.......go.....to....Den....de" said Piccolo as he transported him to Dende's Tower. Why........is........he.......ta.......lking.....l.....ike.......t.....his? "Gohan!" yelled Dende as he saw the bleeding Sayian on the ground with a sword in him,"Don't worry Gohan I will heal you!" said Dende."Den......de......Broly........Cell....and..........Janemba....are going to get the Dragon Balls...." said Gohan........ Shooting Stars are better! "Gohan,I will heal you!" said Dende desprately trying to heal the mortal wounds."Dende......warn....the...others........" said Gohan before he died. OoO! Two deaths! OH NOIES! Chapter three is when everyone dies, as I quoted. I will read the rest of this story to find out if they come back to life! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 I wonder if you could even understand my fanfic teh mst wyn fn-fic eva Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Supreme Gamesmaster Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 DUZ TEH REVIEWIN ON MAIN Link's in sig. Don't comment on how boring it is; I already know that.I'm pretty sure you know something about YGO' date=' unlike...Please note I know nothing about Dragon Ball.Ironically, they're related threads. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 Ok pichu, if you dont know a thing about dragonball, why review it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altaïr Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 its good for his standards rate :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Delinquent Girl NiAtSoFi Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 What happened to my review? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 It was saved from not being reviewed, ask Crab or Weather to review it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 What happened to my review?working on it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altaïr Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 ohhh.pichu.there Dragon BALLS like a soccer ball Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 that's no weird at all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 So anyway, sorry for all the pointless negs, anyway, I wanna see what you would try to do with "teh mst wyn fn-fic eva", its a portrail of the worst fanfic ever made by me, it was designed to be terrible, so the criticism will help me make it worse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 So anyway' date=' sorry for all the pointless negs, anyway, I wanna see what you would try to do with "teh mst wyn fn-fic eva", its a portrail of the worst fanfic ever made by me, it was designed to be terrible, so the criticism will help me make it worse[/quote']time to review! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Delinquent Girl NiAtSoFi Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 It was saved from not being reviewed' date=' ask Crab or Weather to review it[/quote'] It doesn't seem that Crab is interested...and Weather saw chapter 1 (at the time, that was the only one up) and gave a short review. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 ahh...oh well, mabye Pichu will start to learn to do deacent reviews, I might try to help him with it...if I'm actually that nice...let me check Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Ok pichu' date=' if you dont know a thing about dragonball, why review it?[/quote'] Oye, I regularly review things based on series I don't follow. Off the top of my head, I've reviewed stories for Kingdom Hearts, Shaman King, Digimon, Naruto, Rosario+Vampire, Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's, Halo, and Ben 10. It takes away one dimension of things you can comment on, but as long as you don't immediately start whining about not knowing who the characters are, it's not unacceptable. Of course, Pichu never gives any criticism of the actual story anyhow, so he can't possibly be affected by not knowing the canon. Of all the problems to complain about, why that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 oh well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 ahh...oh well' date=' mabye Pichu will start to learn to do deacent reviews, I might try to help him with it...if I'm actually that nice...let me check[/quote']i try! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 I wanna see what you would try to do with "teh mst wyn fn-fic eva" I second this. I want to see if Pichu can do an actual review instead of random commentary. Pichu' date=' this is the worst fanfic out there. If you can't even properly review this, you will fail at life. [s']Never mind, you're already failing.[/s] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altaïr Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 you learn the canon first to understand it..............my fan fic is the worst om YCM?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 I dont know why I'm saying this but along with having the personality of a pikachu (as it says in my sig)I also got THIS I have a pretty messed up personality, dont these two contradict eachother? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 pikadoom? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Altaïr Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 so are you gonn rate the volume? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 how many reviews till mine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 how many reviews till mineyours is next then DGN's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 next as in, right now next, or after the one your making right now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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