My First card

[UND34DC0WZ]

here is my first card i just made.

 

Please rate :P

 

 

This dragon was a domestic dragon until his owner died and he was released into the woods. He traveled through many countries until he was killed by Keznar The Dark. A scientist found his body and used it for experiments. One day the scientist was conducting an experiment and Zarcan came back to life and killed the scientist. Zarcan Now prowls the shadows seeking his revenge on Keznar The Dark.

[FriendlyHost]

this cards cool but it has weird stats (ATK and DEF) as well as a fake Undead Dragon type. Make it Zombie type! 6.5/10

[Βyakuya]

Kinda great for a vanilla, but grammar needs improvement, and Undead dragon isn't a type, so 7/10

[Yang Xiao-Long]

Grammar fix:

"This zombie was once a domestic dragon until it escaped from captivity. It lived in the woods for several years until an evil being took its soul. Zarcan now prowls in the darkness, waiting to take its revenge."

 

Not very interesting.

Make it "Zombie" instead of Undead Dragon. Since it's a Zombie, you should probably make its DEF 0. Those stat values are unrealistic. Either make it 2250 or 2300 ATK.

Since it's a Vanilla, not much to rate.

Since you're new, 6/10

[Kato_Zenamara]

NO fake types. EVER.

I know there are cards with odd ATK and DEF stats, but this is ridiculous.

[UND34DC0WZ]

thx for tellin me wats wrong with it i will edit

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Grammar fix:

"This zombie was once a domestic dragon until it escaped from captivity. It lived in the woods for several years until an evil being took its soul. Zarcan now prowls in the darkness' date=' waiting to take its revenge."

 

Not very interesting.

Make it "Zombie" instead of Undead Dragon. Since it's a Zombie, you should probably make its DEF 0. Those stat values are unrealistic. Either make it 2250 or 2300 ATK.

Since it's a Vanilla, not much to rate.

Since you're new, 6/10

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I took ur advice thanks for it

[Hungry Panda]

For this being your first card, it is really good. 6.5/10