wardog292 Posted June 18, 2010 Report Share Posted June 18, 2010 Im new starting today i hope it works this is my first card i hope i can have some feed backs =3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
5252345262667 Posted June 18, 2010 Report Share Posted June 18, 2010 Your OCG needs extreme improvment. Here is a better description: Discard your hand to the graveyard. All of your opponent's monsters are switched to your side of the field. There is a better description. Your card is way too overpowered, also, there is no need of it to be a trap, it would make more sense to make it a spell. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FriendlyHost Posted June 18, 2010 Report Share Posted June 18, 2010 dont attach cards!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wardog292 Posted June 18, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 18, 2010 dont attach cards!! tell me how not to o.o sry D= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
5252345262667 Posted June 19, 2010 Report Share Posted June 19, 2010 Your OCG needs extreme improvment. Here is a better description: Discard your hand to the graveyard. All of your opponent's monsters are switched to your side of the field. There is a better description. Your card is way too overpowered' date=' also, there is no need of it to be a trap, it would make more sense to make it a spell.[/quote'] Sorry I made a mistake. the better one would be: "The control of your opponet's monsters are switched to your side of the field" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
5252345262667 Posted June 19, 2010 Report Share Posted June 19, 2010 Okay, your new card has few improvments but not many. Alright, you should always say "pay 1000 Life Points". "to take control" dosen't normally be used, it's usually "the control of the monster(s) switch" or "All the monster's your opponent controls are switched to your side of the field. Next, say "If this card is destroyed, the control of the monster's switch to your opponents side of the field." Another major mistake is the type of spell. I'm glad you made it a spell, but, you can't have an equip. Equip's usually boost up another monster or a different effect. However, it only works on 1 monster. So, don't make it an equip, make it a continous (the infinite sign) or just a regulr spell. If you make it a regular spell, you have to say: "as long as this card remains face-up on the field, your opponets monsters are on your side of the field, if this card is destroyed..." If you fix all those mistakes, I'll take another look to see what you got. Hope this helped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wardog292 Posted June 19, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2010 Okay' date=' your new card has few improvments but not many. Alright, you should always say "pay 1000 Life Points". "to take control" dosen't normally be used, it's usually "the control of the monster(s) switch" or "All the monster's your opponent controls are switched to your side of the field. Next, say "If this card is destroyed, the control of the monster's switch to your opponents side of the field." Another major mistake is the type of spell. I'm glad you made it a spell, but, you can't have an equip. Equip's usually boost up another monster or a different effect. However, it only works on 1 monster. So, don't make it an equip, make it a continous (the infinite sign) or just a regulr spell. If you make it a regular spell, you have to say: "as long as this card remains face-up on the field, your opponets monsters are on your side of the field, if this card is destroyed..." If you fix all those mistakes, I'll take another look to see what you got. Hope this helped.[/quote'] Thanks i will try to up date later Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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