Nyarlathotep Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 These are my first cards. I know the wording is probably wrong somehow and need some help fixing it. Please leave detailed suggestions and comments. Don't just say bad wording or bad picture. please leave me detailed comments so I can get better. Thanks and enjoy. Ratings appreciated. Dark Warlord Satoshi Ronin Masaru Legendary Warrior - Kensei Musashi Lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 3 Warrior-type monsters from your hand or graveyard from play. As long as this card remains Face-up on the field all Warrior-type Monsters on your side of the field gain 300 ATK and DEF. This card gains 500 ATK and DEF for every Equip Spell Card equiped to it. When this Monster declares an attack against a Monster not equiped with an Equip Spell Card increase this cards ATK by 1000. Sword of the Master Warrior. Note: I do not take credit for any prints I use. I will give credit to the artists if it is asked of me. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eibon1307 Posted July 1, 2010 Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Great cards guy, There are minor OCG problems (Writing) but im not good at fixing that kind of stuff. The Equip card should have a background by I know how hard it is to find decent ones like it. All in all great effects and great cards. 10/10. Cant wait to see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyarlathotep Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Great cards guy' date=' There are minor OCG problems (Writing) but im not good at fixing that kind of stuff. The Equip card should have a background by I know how hard it is to find decent ones like it. All in all great effects and great cards. 10/10. Cant wait to see more.[/quote'] thanks !!!!bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyarlathotep Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Great cards guy' date=' There are minor OCG problems (Writing) but im not good at fixing that kind of stuff. The Equip card should have a background by I know how hard it is to find decent ones like it. All in all great effects and great cards. 10/10. Cant wait to see more.[/quote'] thanks !!!!bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyarlathotep Posted July 1, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 1, 2010 Great cards guy' date=' There are minor OCG problems (Writing) but im not good at fixing that kind of stuff. The Equip card should have a background by I know how hard it is to find decent ones like it. All in all great effects and great cards. 10/10. Cant wait to see more.[/quote'] thanks !!!!bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyarlathotep Posted July 2, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 Bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eibon1307 Posted July 2, 2010 Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 Come on. Give the new guy some comments!!! How's he gonna get any better if you dont! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted July 2, 2010 Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 Okay here are my thoughts in details. These are my first cards. I know the wording is probably wrong somehow and need some help fixing it. Please leave detailed suggestions and comments. Don't just say bad wording or bad picture. please leave me detailed comments so I can get better. Thanks and enjoy. Ratings appreciated. Dark Warlord Satoshi Okay on the first line of the effect. I believe that it should readWhen this monster declares an Attack while an Equip Spell Card is equipped to it. Because if this card is equipped to an Equip Spell Card it won't be Attacking. Make sense? The picture is pretty good. Ronin Masaru For this one the effect is okay' date=' there are just some general errors such asNon-Warrior Type. Type needs to be Capitalized. And monster is lower cased. The pic is a bit blurry but it's okay.[/b'] Legendary Warrior - Kensei Musashi Lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 3 Warrior-Type monsters from your hand or Graveyard from play. As long as this card remains Face-up on the field all Warrior-type monsters on your side of the field gain 300 ATK and DEF. This card gains 500 ATK and DEF for every Equip Spell Card equipped to it. When this monster declares an attack against a monster not equipped with an Equip Spell Card increase this cards ATK by 1000. All corrections are in bold. Along with monster being lower cased. The card is overpowered abit. It's Level shouldn't be that high. Sword of the Master Warrior. This card has some error, you should see them. The pic is kinda bad, because of the white background, but you'll learn overtime Note: I do not take credit for any prints I use. I will give credit to the artists if it is asked of me. Thanks. Okay These cards aren't bad and with alittle improvement they'll be great. Now comes the ratings. I'll give you a 7/10. ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyarlathotep Posted July 2, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 Okay here are my thoughts in details. These are my first cards. I know the wording is probably wrong somehow and need some help fixing it. Please leave detailed suggestions and comments. Don't just say bad wording or bad picture. please leave me detailed comments so I can get better. Thanks and enjoy. Ratings appreciated. Dark Warlord Satoshi Okay on the first line of the effect. I believe that it should readWhen this monster declares an Attack while an Equip Spell Card is equipped to it. Because if this card is equipped to an Equip Spell Card it won't be Attacking. Make sense? The picture is pretty good. Ronin Masaru For this one the effect is okay' date=' there are just some general errors such asNon-Warrior Type. Type needs to be Capitalized. And monster is lower cased. The pic is a bit blurry but it's okay.[/b'] Legendary Warrior - Kensei Musashi Lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 3 Warrior-Type monsters from your hand or Graveyard from play. As long as this card remains Face-up on the field all Warrior-type monsters on your side of the field gain 300 ATK and DEF. This card gains 500 ATK and DEF for every Equip Spell Card equipped to it. When this monster declares an attack against a monster not equipped with an Equip Spell Card increase this cards ATK by 1000. All corrections are in bold. Along with monster being lower cased. The card is overpowered abit. It's Level shouldn't be that high. Sword of the Master Warrior. This card has some error, you should see them. The pic is kinda bad, because of the white background, but you'll learn overtime Note: I do not take credit for any prints I use. I will give credit to the artists if it is asked of me. Thanks. Okay These cards aren't bad and with alittle improvement they'll be great. Now comes the ratings. I'll give you a 7/10. ^^ Woot!!!! thanks!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Duece1991 Posted July 2, 2010 Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 White backgrounds are a NO NOyou should never use a white backgroundit takes away chasracter from your card and distracts the viewer from noticing the over appeal of the card look at real yugioh cards often so you can get used to the OCG and notice how Konami balances there cards and then make yours accordingly. For your first 4 cards i see you have a headstart on matching the Name pic and OCG together and that is really important. i would normally give these a 4 out of 10. 1/1 for names1/2 for pics0/2 ocg1/2 for originality1/2 for overall apeall0/1 for WOW Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CMRenji Posted July 2, 2010 Report Share Posted July 2, 2010 Pretty good cards. I think Legendary Warrior - Kensei Musashi might be OP'd. Look at how many ATK increases he can get. But besides that very nice cards. 8.5/10 :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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