New Elemental Hero

[Zamrullah]

Well, this is the first card that I make in this forum,

and maybe It's not good, and something looks like that

I'm sorry really!

 

 

what do you think?

 

*giggles*

[Raven of Shadow]

That's really great! You do have a few OCG errors, but other than that, great!

9.5/10

 

By the by, Fire, Dark, Light, etc, are in all caps. LIKE THIS.

 

:D +1 Point! :D

[Zamrullah]

That's really great! You do have a few OCG errors' date=' but other than that, great!

9.5/10

 

By the by, Fire, Dark, Light, etc, are in all caps. LIKE THIS.

 

:D +1 Point! :D

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Thank you!

where is my OCG errors?

[Βyakuya]

A little OPed, some grammar errors, and not what it seems. Great job on effort however! 8/10

[Zamrullah]

thank you for your opinion mister

[Raven of Shadow]

Thank you!

where is my OCG errors?

 

Elemental Hero Sparkman + Elemental Hero Electrum

This card cannot be special summon except by fusion summon. This card attribute is also fire, water, earth, wind, and dark. Destroy 1 monster and 1 spell by changing position once in the turn. this monster can change position 2 times in your turn

 

Okay, so lets work on the first sentence.

 

This card cannot be special summon except by fusion summon.

 

You need to put some caps. Cap Special, Summon, Fusion, Summon. And add "ed" after summoned.

 

So first part:

This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Fusion Summon.

 

Now, the second part.

 

Put a s after card. Then put Fire, Water, etc, in all caps. Also, add treated after is.

 

So Second part:

This cards attribute is also treated as FIRE, WATER, EARTH, WIND, and DARK.

 

And 3rd part: (You'll see what I changed.)

By changing the Battle Position of this card, you can destroy 1 card on the field.

 

And final part:

You can change the Battle Position of this card up to twice per turn.

 

So, all together.

 

Elemental Hero Sparkman + Elemental Hero Spectrum

This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Fusion Summon. This cards attribute is also treated as FIRE, WATER, EARTH, WIND, and DARK. By changing the Battle Position of this card, you can destroy 1 card on the field. You can change the Battle Position of this card up to twice per turn.

 

There ya go! :D

[Phanax Leminer]

Aiku: SPARTACUS!!

 

OCG: Errors, go see the OCG on real YGO cards.

 

Effect: Changing position monster? Funny idea.

 

Image and Name: Do some editing on your image, the white line is annoying me.

Overall: 6.8/10

[dragonmaster12]

Very nice card, as said in previous posts, there are a few OCG errors. Good picture, but the white line is making it not so great. Great effect, creative, I give a 9.5/10

[Zamrullah]

Thank you mister Raven of Shadow!

 

Aiku: SPARTACUS!!

 

OCG: Errors' date=' go see the OCG on real YGO cards.

 

[b']Effect:[/b] Changing position monster? Funny idea.

 

Image and Name: Do some editing on your image, the white line is annoying me.

Overall: 6.8/10

 

thanks, I'll edit the picture!

 

Very nice card' date=' as said in previous posts, there are a few OCG errors. Good picture, but the white line is making it not so great. Great effect, creative, I give a 9.5/10

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thank you mister!

[senatheEND]

its ok I guess it firsts the Hero theme ocg errors image errors just needs some tune ups

 

6.5/10

Good Stuff