Nooby Jake Posted July 9, 2010 Report Share Posted July 9, 2010 I need some tips and reviews on my first cards. Any thing could help. Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Coaster Guy Posted July 9, 2010 Report Share Posted July 9, 2010 not bad for a new member but most Coin effects are over being used. OCG (official card grammar)needs to be fixed in some ways. I'm not very good at correcting OCG, but somebody else can fix that. Effects are decent-ish, but no coin effects. And if you post so many words in a card's description, after that copy and paste the effect under that card. overall 5.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nooby Jake Posted July 9, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2010 thanks but how do i correct my cards Here's another card. what do you think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Coaster Guy Posted July 9, 2010 Report Share Posted July 9, 2010 don't make coins in the effect, and the pic in that card is overused and "Dark Paladin" is used in a real famous card. I don't know how to correct OCG. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nooby Jake Posted July 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Here are my edits how are they Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Coaster Guy Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 slightly better but make creative effects, and ocg still needs fixing, overall, it is a 5.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Athena- Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 The last one is an EPIC picture but the other ones sucks. Lots of OCG errors and try to add on to the effects. Make it creative. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
seattleite Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 JINZO, what's wrong with coin effects. Since I see nothing wrong with them I am going to review them in their original form: Killer Rabbit of Toon : check out this page for the wording for Toon monsters, yours is Class A : http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Toon . Use Beast-Type, not Rabbit-Type. Also add another effect. Zenom : "This card can only be fusion summoned." Also be sure to post your Fusion - Material monsters. Fire Being: "Once per turn, flip a coin. If heads, you can return this card to your hand and Special Summon 1 other monster from your hand." Interesting effect, but you should make the ATK higher (unless you planned for this to be searched by UFO turtle) Mystic Dragon: "Once per turn, flip 2 coins. For each heads you can take control of 1 Dragon-Type monster on the field." Interesting again, but only for Dragons? You should probably add another effect to make this usable. Omega Dragon: Do you know what Blowback Dragon is? This effect is similar but much more Underpowered. You can stand for this effect to be "Once per turn" and not "Once per Duel" to make it more powerful. Also increase the ATK too. Elemental Strike: Good, but see the other OCG fixes I've made on your other cards. Dark Dragon: "Once per turn, pay 500 Life points. If you do, this card can attack twice this turn". Very Overpowered for a 3200 ATK monster. I think your coin flipping effect is better here. Dark Warrior: "When this card is summoned, decrease the ATK of all LIGHT monsters by 500"Give it more ATK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nooby Jake Posted July 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 OKAY I HAVE MADE SOME ADJUSTMENTS SO TELL ME HOW I DID. ALSO HOW DO YOU FIND CLEAR PICTURES BECAUSE IVE BEEN USING DEVIANTART FOR THE PICS AND A WEB SITE CALLED picnik.com TO EDIT THEM. I NEED HELP BECAUSE MY CARDS ARNT TURNING OUT SO WELL. P.S I DONT WANNA PAY FOR PHOTOBUCKET. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lolwhy Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Um. You don't need to pay for Photobucket? What's wrong with coin effects? rofl Here's your Card Grammar fixes: Dark Dragon From The Mist (Used Barrel Dragon's OCG):Toss a coin 2 times. If both of the results are heads, this card can attack twice during the same Battle Phase. This effect can be used once per turn during your Main Phase 1.Comment: Not bad, probably your best card. However, since it is a Level 9 card you should make this card harder to summon.Example: This card can only be Normal Summoned by Tributing 3 monsters you control. Dark Warrior:While this card is face-up on the field, decrease the ATK of all LIGHT monsters by 500 points.Comment: Not a very original card, lacks in effect. Elemental Strike:Pay 1000 Life Points to activate this card. Discard 5 cards from your opponent's Deck.Comment: This card is OP'd(Overpowered) and is better off as a Spell Card. Mystic Dragon:Once per Duel, you can pay 500 Life Points to destroy any monster with an ATK of 3000 or less.Comment: Can use a little more balancing, maybe. The effect is boring. Omega Dragon: Once per Duel, you can change the Attribute of 1 monster to FIRE.Comment: Boring effect. The name doesn't fit with the effect. Zenom, the Dragon King: A Fusion Summon of this card can only be conducted with the above Fusion Material Monsters. Increase the DEF of this card for each DARK Dragon monster on the fieldComment: A card not worth putting into the Extra Deck. Boring effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Athena- Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Since when do you have to pay for Photobucket? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Riktus Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 the card are nice7.0 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ZeroXL91 Posted July 11, 2010 Report Share Posted July 11, 2010 nice cards, but OCG needs some work, did you make the images yourself? Their awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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