Prince of Tennis Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 My OCG is terrible, so please help me. This is my first card and I hope you enjoy it: [spoiler= Lore]This monster cannot be Special Summoned. This monster must be Normal Summoned in face-up attack position. This monster returns to the owner's hand during the End Phase of the turn it was Normal Summoned. When this monster inflicts Battle Damage you can only activate one of the following effects:- Select 2 cards in your opponent's hand, if one them is not a "Warrior" monster inflict 300 times the level of the selected monster(s) as Battle* Damage to your opponent (if both are "Warrior" monster your opponent chooses 1.)-Search your deck for a "Warrior" monster, and during your next Standby Phase, Special Summon it in face-up attack Position.-Pay half of your Life Points to increase this monster's ATK by 2500 Points and this monster can attack again. Is that better? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cruelnoob200 Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 LORE: This monster cannot be Special Summoned. This monster must be Normal Summoned in face-up attack position. This monster returns to the owner's hand during the End Phase of the turn it was Normal Summoned. When this monster inflicts Battle Damage you can only activate one of the following effects:- Select 2 cards in your opponent's hand, if one them is not a "Warrior" monsterinflict 300 times the level of the selected monster(s) as Battle* Damage to your opponent (if both are "Warrior" monster your opponent chooses 1).-Search your deck for a "Warrior" monster, and during your next Standby Phase** Special Summon it in face-up attack Position.-Pay half of your Life Points to increase this monster's ATK by 3000 Points*** and do? your Battle Phase again****. I bolded the OCG errors and some of the capitalization errors.*-Battle? Do you mean Direct?**-Choose whatever (Draw,Standby,Main,Battle,Main2,End-Phase)***-3000 is too much... thats a OTK right there (with a combination of the ****)****-This would be super banned because 3100 ATK for a lvl 3? and then 6100 ATK next? Thats too powerful. There is ALSO a problem with it being a Spirit monster, it returns to your hand and does the extra added ATK go away?The Pic is ok at least. The reason is that the background is too plain-- it needs "Pizzaz"(haha) and the weird bird-head next to the warrior. OVERALL: Since the card isnt "Perfect" ill rate 4/10 as a temporary rating.Once you change the card i will rate again Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Resistance- Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 ^He said it all.LoLz.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fader Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 no such thing as a spirit effect just a spirit and Only common OCG errors that i admit to making and an amazing start i look forward to your future cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prince of Tennis Posted July 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Post Updated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ljvedder Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 OCG errors as been stated should just be [(monster type)/Spirit]. 7/10 not bad for a first in my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prince of Tennis Posted July 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 OCG errors as been stated should just be [(monster type)/Spirit]. 7/10 not bad for a first in my opinion. Changed and Thank You! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fader Posted July 10, 2010 Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Biomedic you are making a good start and i cant wait to see your future cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prince of Tennis Posted July 10, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2010 Biomedic you are making a good start and i cant wait to see your future cards Thank You! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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