Plss..comment this..card..

[kemren_18]

If a Monster is destroyed in the field due to Spell,Trap or Monster Card's effect, place it on the top of this card at the Field-Spell Card Zone instead of sending to Graveyard. If no monster on the field, send 1 card from hand to Tribute Summon 1 Monster from the Field-Spell Card Zone. The Monster Summoned in this manner cannot attack in this turn.[/b]

 

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This card cannot be activated unless "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is on the field. This card can Advance Summon 2 "Elf token" (Light/4/fairy/ATK-1000/DEF-1500) on the field in defense display. If the tokens were destroyed due to card's effect, increase your Life Points according to the tokens ATK points.[/b]

 

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LORE

This card cannot be Advance Summon unless "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is on the field. This card cannot be destroyed in the battle. If "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is destroyed, destroy this card. Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 200x the destroyed card with "Pile Scroll" in its name.

This card cannot be Advance Summon unless "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is on the field. This card cannot be destroyed in the battle. If "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is destroyed, destroy this card. Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 200x the destroyed card with "Pile Scroll" in its name.

[poopybuttoxes]

I like cemetary. Not so good OCG on it. 8/10 regardless. Nice job.

[-Athena-]

I love the pictures and some of the effects.

[kemren_18]

well thanks for the comment..but in OCG im not so good enough in making those stuff..but i Have so many ideas on some brilliant effects but the problems are..im not good enough in making OCGs.hehehe..tnx anyway

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MR. thethethe...thanks..so much..can i ask??whats the Dragcave.net??hehehe just curious.

[-Athena-]

Just keep making cards and you'll get it. No one is perfect, it's perfectly normal.

[kemren_18]

hehehe...thanks for the encouragement..

[-Athena-]

No problem :). It's good to encourage others. It turns more members into good card makers.

[kemren_18]

wow..hope all of the masters in making cards are like you...tend to encourage and not to make people down..hehehe...im not pointing to someone...

 

Yup!! and i will make more cards...tnx

[kemren_18]

Burpp!!

[kemren_18]

Bump!!

[-Athena-]

Too much bumps. XD. Lol.

 

I'm not sure but I think that there's a 24 hrs rule about it.

[kemren_18]

ahh..sorry but i did'nt know about it..hehehe..well i have commented your first very cards..its good...till next comments.

[-Athena-]

Thanks :).

[Sylphiend]

Bit hard to figure out the effects because of the OCG.

Names could of been better, but for pics and ideas: 7.5/10

[Moonfang]

First off the cards look great. I really like them.

 

As for the OCG I can try to help you with them.

 

First of, Graveyard. This one is kind of hard and I don't know if I did it correctly. The effect is fairly unique so I can't compare with real cards.

When a Monster on the field is destroyed by a Spell, Trap or Monster Card effect, place it on the top of this card instead of sending it to the Graveyard. If there are no monsters on the field, you can send 1 card from hand to the Graveyard to Normal Summon the top monster from this card. A monster that is summoned by this effect can not attack the turn it is summoned.

 

Them we have Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty. First of the name is a little weird. Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Might would be an better name. For the OCG:

To activate this card, remove from play 1 Spellcaster-Type from your Graveyard. If this card is destroyed, destroy all cards with "Pile Scroll" in its name.

 

Keep it simple, that you need a face-up Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty to activate Pile Scroll cards is already stated on the Pile Scroll cards itself. Also seeing the deck is based around this card I'll would give it an additional that prevents its destruction. Like "You can remove 1 Spellcaster-Type monster from your Graveyard to to negate the activation of a Spell Card, Trap Card, or Effect Monster's effect that would destroy this card, and destroy that card.

 

Alright next one. Pile Scroll I- The Book of Elf Tokens. First of you can put a space between I and -. Also make it a normal Spell Card. To summon tokens you don't need a Continuous Spell Card. As for the OCG:

You can only activate this card while there is a face-up "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" on the field. Special Summon 2 "Elf token" (Fairy-Type/Light/Level 4/ATK 1000/DEF 1500) in Defence Position. If these Token(s) are destroyed by a card effect, increase your Life Points equal to this Token(s) ATK.

 

Alright last one, Sazzuni Ook the Pile Scroll Keeper. I think the correct OCG would be: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except while there is a "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" on the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 200 x the number of cards in your Graveyard that include "Pile Scroll" in its name.

 

Again keep it simple the "If "Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty" is destroyed, destroy this card." effect is already written in Ancient Pile Scroll of Celestial Almighty itself.

 

 

For the cards you get an 9/10 for the OCG an 4/10.

Overall you would get a 7.5/10 OCG isn't everything ;-).