Face McShooty Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 While this card is in play, all Zombie Monsters gain 250 ATK and 350 DEF Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Athena- Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 Some OCG error (i think)- When this card is on the field, all Zombie-Type monster gains..... Anyways, okay picture and name. I suggest you add onto the effect. Maybe something like "this card does not affect your opponent" or something like that. IDk, but make the effect pop put a bit more. Since it's your first card (I think), pretty good. 7/10. Come on, reach higher. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wardek Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 OCG Fixes: While this card is face-up on the field, increase the ATK of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 250, and increase the DEF of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 350. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Athena- Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 OCG Fixes: While this card is face-up on the field' date=' increase the ATK of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 250, and increase the DEF of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 350.[/quote'] Much better than mine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UltimateBreloom Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 good card but I know sothing that's wrong if that's really your first card I'm falling beind A.K.A took awile for me too learn to post Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Athena- Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 Like I said before, you should consider adding on the effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom M.C. Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 king' date=' it is my first card and heres the update thanks to Wardek's help [img']http://img707.imageshack.us/img707/9823/586426.jpg[/img] While this card is face-up on the field, increase the ATK of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the user's side of the field by 250, and increase the DEF of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the user's side of field by 350. you could simplify it into this As long as this card is face-up on the field, increase the ATK all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the owner's side of the field by 250 and their DEF by 350. thou, i'm not sure about this card, field cards should effect all monsters on the field, if you want this card to only effect you, change it to a continuous spell card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chedbonlahor Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 Wait do you really need "While this card is face up on the field"????!!! Just put "Increase the ATK of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 250, and increase the DEF of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 350." In fact if you look at some field cards it just states "increases" something by something!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Face McShooty Posted July 16, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 hey everyone, sorry bout the multiple posts, my laptop is messing up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wardek Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 OCG Fixes: While this card is face-up on the field' date=' increase the ATK of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 250, and increase the DEF of all face-up Zombie-Type monsters on the field by 350.[/quote'] Much better than mine. I have readed lot of cards effects and some OCG Topics and thats why i am good at OCG fixing. ;P Edit: @Galadrien: You may change the "is" in "As long as this card is face-up on the field" to "remains", example: "As long as this card remains face-up on the field," Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FUNE Posted July 16, 2010 Report Share Posted July 16, 2010 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wardek Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 ^You may tell him what to fix (Duh). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FUNE Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 changed my mind: 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom M.C. Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 changed my mind: 6/10 LOL, are you just trying to get enough posts to enter the card maker wars? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FUNE Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 NO im not, ive just changed my mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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