Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Please be honest here as I will not get any better if I am taken easy on. Anyway these cards were designed to be used with my favorite card Yubel so tell me what you think. :) Servant of Yubel (Dark)**Fiend/EffectWhen this monster is destroyed and sent to the graveyard your may add 1 "Yubel" from your deck or graveyard to your hand. Once per turn if there is a face up "Yubel" on your side of the field you may special summon this monster from the graveyard to the field in face up attack mode during your end phase.ATK: 0 DEF: 0 Rulings: When this card is destroyed and sent to the graveyard you may add a Yubel the Wicked Knight or a Yubel the Ultimate Nightmare because they both have Yubel in their name. You may special summon this monster from your graveyard with its effect if you have a face up Yubel the Wicked Knight or a Yubel the Ultimate Nightmare on the field because they have Yubel in their name. Haou (Dark)*******Fiend/EffectOnce per turn you may special summon one "Yubel" from your hand or graveyard to the field in attack mode. All face up "Yubel" on the field are not effected by monster, spell, or trap effects that designate it as a target. As long as this card remains face up on the field you do not have to sacrifice a monster for Yubel's effect during your end phase.2400/1000 Servant of Haou (Dark)*Fiend/EffectSend this face-up card on your side of the field to the Graveyard to Special Summon 1 "Haou" from your hand.800/500 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Since these are your first i shall go easy on ya and just simply explain what you need to correct ^_^ Card 1 - Graveyard and Deck need to start with caps. face-up Special Summon needs to be in caps. Position not mode. End Phase needs to be in caps. Card image doesnt suit yugioh. But its good still ^_^ Card 2 + 3, same similar errors. You basically just need to alter words to give it correct Grammar ^_^ Good first try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Thanks :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Good first card man. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Glad you like them :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
d-note 12 Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 nice first card 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 I'm glad their not to terrible :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 I have seen much worse for a newcomer, some ppl make terrible, terrible cards lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Really? Huh. Who would have guessed. *goes back to loving her yubel cards* :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Yeah, there was this one newcomer who made a bad bad card, everybody gave their honest opinions and he got really annoyed thus swore at us all, spammed and eventually got himself banned. He has gone down as one of the worst card makers ever in my eyes lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Thats sad :( I thought up these cards while going over the yubel cards in general. Seeing as its my favorite card, and theres actually some fairly good combo's out there to work with yubel. Example: Doom Shaman + Yubel = Personal favorite Example #2: Mystic Tomato + Yubel Etc etc Yubel is a little difficult to use at times but if played right is very effective. :) Also for the first card I picked its image because it had the three eyes look going. And the Second was because it looked like Haou Judai lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Well they are very good for your first cards ^_^ Thing with this forum is everybody checks for grammar, spelling, OCG and picture errors, so as you post more and more cards, ppl will point out errors, but it helps you to know where your mistakes are and you will eventually improve. When i first joined, i had terrible grammar and OCG for the first 2 weeks, then my cards just got really good ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 When i first joined' date=' i had terrible grammar and OCG for the first 2 weeks, then my cards just got really good ^_^[/quote'] How...modest? XP Nice job on your firsties. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Thanks hehe :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted January 10, 2008 Report Share Posted January 10, 2008 We need to see Haou, good pics, grammar problems, capatilize graveyard. 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Laetitia Posted January 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2008 Thanks for your input Cobra :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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