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Rate/give OCG Advise please. I know my OCG sucks. Any help would be appreciated. If I update the OCG, then update your rating, or don't rate until I change it.

 

Razorwind | Level 6 | Wind | Winged-Beast :: EFFECT

During your Standby Phase, this Monster can be sacrificed to send all cards on the field to the respective player's decks. Shuffle the decks. During your End Phase, you can spend 800 Life Points to return this card to the Deck. Shuffle the Deck.

 

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-Charlie

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Your OCG could use some work like you said.

So I'll give you my basic OCG list.

 

I think the cards overpowered really, it's kind of a non-lethal continuous bomber which could get overused?

 

Some OCG fixes you might find useful:

normal summon = Normal Summon

special summon = Special Summon

spell/ trap card = Spell/ Trap Card

monster effect card = monster Effect card

graveyard = Graveyard

deck = Deck

hand = hand

Field = field

atk/ def = ATK/ DEF

ATK points = ATK

remove ___ from play = remove from play ___

a monster with "___" in its name = a "___" monster

opponents side of the field = opponent controls

your side of the field = you control

tribute = Tribute

level stars = Level

every = each

life points = Life Points

light/ dark = LIGHT/ DARK

warrior type = Warrior-Type

choose = select

???? ATK/ DEF = ? ATK/ DEF

as a result of battle = by battle

one/ two/ three... = 1/2/3...

attack mode = Attack Position

his/ her = they/ their

may = can

face up = face-up

attribute = Attribute

type = Type

ritual = Ritual

monster card zone = Monster Card Zone

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you must have alot of time on your hands to do all those corrections lol no offense any way i agree with guy above dud

 

lol.

 

I just grouped a collection and saved it for my notes.

 

I get it out when I feel someone has made a few errors so that they can refer to it :)

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=D Did someone ask for OCG Help!?

 

"During your Standby Phase, you can Tribute this card to return all cards on the field to their respective owner's Deck. During your End Phase, you can pay 800 Life Points to add this card from your Graveyard to your Deck."

 

The bold is the necessary fix.

Liam is right, it's Overpowered.

 

I have a suggestion underlined. By adding that it makes it less Overpowering because your current effect means it can be returned from out of play as well as from the Graveyard. By adding from the graveyard, this card is now vulnerable to Macro Cosmos, Dimensional Fissure, etc. Taking away its abusive nature.

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