Blaze-Wing Dragon

[Arcane the VII]

This my first 'Blaze' card. It is called Blaze-Wing Dragon and here it is:

Lore:"1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuners"

Once per turn, you can select 1 of your opponent's monsters, the selected monster loses 750 ATK and DEF until the End Phase of this turn. If this card battles with a monster with higher ATK than this card, you can halve the ATK of this monster as long as this card remains face-up on the field to negate the attack.

 

 

 

 

OCG Fixed

[poopybuttoxes]

I see that your member card wasnt made by you haha. Theres alot of OCG errors. I dont usually critic realistic cards because all it is is OCG and half the active people in here suck at it so really its just coming here and saying the same thing and not being wowed.

 

Good attempt? I dont know what else to say. I guess i'll give advise.

With the 750 attack and defense it should be ATK and DEF.

You need to fix the tuner part. It should be "1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuners".

Instead of "is attacked by" it should be "battles with".

Instead of "a stronger fire monster" it should be "a monster with higher ATK than this card".

Instead of "cut this cards attack points in half but keep it on the field" it should be ", you can halve the ATK of this monster as long as it remains face-up on the field to negate the attack."

 

So all together it would be something like this:

 

"1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuners"

Once per turn, you can select 1 of your opponent's monsters, the selected monster loses 750 ATK and DEF until the End Phase of this turn. If this card battles with a monster with higher ATK than this card, you can halve the ATK of this monster as long as this card remains face-up on the field to negate the attack.

 

Hope it helps :)

[Archelaus]

Mind posting the effect. I can't read it.

[Arcane the VII]

Mind posting the effect. I can't read it.

O.K