Should I continue making my "Underworld" set??

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EDITED

This is my "Underworld" set.I'm gonna come up with an idea for the story if i get at least 10 supporters to continue my set :lol:

 

[spoiler=Monsters]

Lore:

If this card is sent to the Graveyard by your opponent's Spell or Trap card,you can pay 1300 Life Points and discard 2 cards from the top of your Deck to Special Summon this card to your opponent's side of the field.During each of your opponent's Standby Phase,the owner of this card has to pay 500 Life Points.This card cannot be destroyed by battle or be tributed.

 

Lore:

When this card is sent to the Graveyard,remove it from play instead.When this card is destroyed and removed from play,you can Special Summon 1 "Undead Dog From The Underworld" from your Deck in Defense Position at the end of your turn.

 

Lore:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set.This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand by removing from play 1 card from your side of the field and 1 from your Graveyard.While this card is on your side of the field,every time 1 of your Zombie-Type is sent to the Graveyard by your opponent's card effects,you can pay 500 Life Points to return the monster to your hand.

 

Lore:

When this card is sent to the Graveyard,you can Special Summon up to 2 "Undead Minions From The Underworld" from your Deck.Those monsters cannot be tributed the turn they were Special Summoned.

 

Lore:

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set.This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 2 Zombie-Type monsters on your side of the field.If this card destroys 1 of your opponent's monsters by battle,during your End Phase,you can pay 1000 Life Points to Special Summon 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard with 1500 or less ATK in Defense Postion.

 

Lore:

This card can only be Summoned while you control a face-up Zombie-Type monster on the field. When this card is Summoned, place 1 Soul Counter on this card (max. 3). This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each Soul Counter on it. Each time this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, place 1 Soul Counter on this card. Once per turn, you can remove any number of Soul Counters from the field to have all face-up Zombie-Type monsters you control (except this card) gain 200 ATK for each Soul Counter removed until the end of the turn. One time only, you can remove 3 Soul Counters from this card to Special Summon 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard in face-up Defense Position. If this effect is activated,discard the 3 top cards from you and your opponent's Deck.

 

[spoiler=Spells]

Lore:

This card is activated by paying 2000 Life Points.Every time a "Underworld" monster is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard,place a Doom Counter on this card.When this card is destroyed,you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon a monster in your Graveyard with a Level equal to or less than the Doom Counters on this card.

Lore:

This card can only be destroyed by the effect of a Spell or Trap Card.This card remains on the field when your opponent activates another Field Spell card.Whenever a "Underworld" monster is destroyed by battle,Special Summon the monster at the End Phase of your opponent's next turn.The effect is negated and the ATK is decreased by 600 points when it is Special Summoned.

 

[spoiler=Traps]None,sorry

 

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Bump...Anyone?

[Phantom M.C.]

errr, whats the main theme of the effects?

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Zombies..."Underworld" monsters

Mostly Zombies for monsters and "Underworld" for Traps and Spells

[Phantom M.C.]

i mean like how the lightsworns self mill, and the volcanics inflict direct damage. what about this set? or is it a bunch of underworld monsters?

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Special Summon

[Face McShooty]

i think you should, these look amazing

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Thanks :)

[Phantom M.C.]

undead despair: During each of your opponent's Standby Phase,the owner of this card has to pay 500 Life Points.This card cannot be destroyed by battle or be tributed.

bolded: does this effect only activate when your opponent controls it? if so, then just say your opponent has to pay.

-the effect is basically a mini lava golem, though i doubt someone will waste a spell or trap on a weak 4 star.

 

undead dog: When this card is sent to they Graveyard,remove it from play instead.When this card is destroyed and removed from play,you can Special Summon 1 "Undead Dog From The Underworld" from your Deck in Defense Position.

bolded: misspelled.

underlined: is it the same meaning as the first sentence? if so, then just say you can then special summon

italic: when do you special summon it? is it immediately right after? then your opponent could just destroy it again.

-fix first, then i'll comment

 

undead king: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set.This card can be Special Summoned from your hand by removing from play 1 card from your side of the field and 1 from your your Graveyard.While this card is on your side of the field,every time 1 of your Zombie-Type is sent to the Graveyard by your opponent's card effects,you can pay 500 Life Points to return the monster to your hand.

bolded: is it "can only be Special Summoned", or "cannot be Special Summoned except by *insert condition*"? there's a big difference between the 2. the first one means that after you special summoned it that way, you can special summon it in other ways like via "monster reborn", but only after you've summoned it the required way first. the second one means that it can only be summoned in that way, no matter what, so "monster reborn" won't work. you probably know this already, but whatever ^ _ ^.

-it seems kind of op to me, 500 lp isn't a lot now that you start with 8000, plus the summoning condition isn't much of a drawback, its basically tributing 1 card, and you didn't specify the type, so i could just remove spells and traps.

 

undead minion: When this card is sent to the Graveyard,you can Special Summon up to 2 "Undead Minions From The Underworld" from your Deck.Those monsters cannot be tributed the turn it is Special Summoned.

bolded: they were

-good effect, easy tributes. low atk and def to balance it. if you decide to make synchros, you could possibly make it a tuner.

 

undead skull warrior: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by tributing 3 Zombie-Type monsters on your side of the field.If this card destroys 1 of your opponent's monsters by battle,during your End Phase,you can pay 1000 Life Points to Special Summon 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard with 1500 or less ATK in Defense Postion.

bolded: capitalize

-now this card is underpowered imo, 3 tributes a 3200 atk? not really worth it. plus 1000 is too much, either lower the lp cost or raise the limit of the summoned monsters

 

undead zombie: This card can only be Summoned while you control a face-up Zombie-Type monster on the field. When this card is Summoned, place 1 Soul Counter on this card (max. 3). This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each Soul Counter on it. Each time this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, place 1 Soul Counter on this card. Once per turn, you can remove any number of Soul Counters from the field to have all face-up Zombie-Type monsters you control (except this card) gain 200 ATK for each Soul Counter removed until the end of the turn. One time only, you can remove 3 Soul Counters from this card to Special Summon 1 Zombie-Type monster from your Graveyard in face-up Defense Position. If this effect is activated,discard the 3 top cards from you and your opponent's Deck.

-nothing much to be said here, awesome card. though i would raise its atk to at least 2200, its not gonna be destroying a lot of monsters with the atk right now.

doomed clock: This card is activated by paying 2000 Life Points.Everytime a "Underworld" monster is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard,place a "Doom" Counter on this card.When this card is destroyed,you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon a monster in your Graveyard with a level equal to or less than the "Doom" Counters on this card.

bolded: don't think the first sentence is right, i might be wrong though. Everytime=Every time. last part=Level equal to or less than the number of Doom Counters on this card.

NOTE: you don't need the quotation mark for counter names, just put Doom Counters.

-useless card, you would have to destroy this card yourself, your opponent could just leave it there on the field, since it doesn't do anything until its destroyed. so you could end up wasting 2000 lp.

 

portal: This card can only be destroyed by an effect of a Spell or Trap Card.This card remains on the field when your opponent activates another Field Spell card.Whenever a Zombie-Type monster is destroyed by battle,Special Summon the monster at the End Phase of your opponent's next turn.The effect is negated and the ATK is decreased by 600 points when it is Special Summoned.

bolded: an=the

underlined: not sure if thats legal, but whatever.

italic: The Special Summoned monster has its effect negated, and loses 600 ATK.

NOTE: don't add "points" after the amount

well, its a useful card, but maybe make this specifically for "underworld" monsters? 600 atk is a bit too much, judging from the monsters right now, the special summoned monsters are pretty much useless.

 

Final Comment:

IMO, this set has a lot of potential, i like the name and idea, awesome pics. Definitely keep going. Just fix up the problems.

 

 

off topic:

HOLY CRAP, THAT WAS MY LONGEST REVIEW EVER!!! :D

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Thanks!ALOT!!Your really good at advising!!1+Rep for you!Really helpful

 

off topic:LoL

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bumpo

[DaRocBeast]

that is official set right there keep on goin

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thanks=]