My First Card - Feedback please

[swordster75]

 

 

 

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Here it is, I couldnt decide on the effect

 

 

feedback is welcome

[Darth Revan of the Sith]

very cool :)

[swordster75]

thanks

[Mugendramon]

...a bit high DEF for a Level 6, don't you think?

[swordster75]

 

I debated that too but ultimitly went off this card as a precedent

[Mugendramon]

Nonethless, a 1-tribute should not be able to withstand an attack from Super Conductor Tyrano! I'll leave it like that because this is your first card.

[swordster75]

true, maybe 3200 would have been better

[DaRocBeast]

the lose 300 life points effect is good, you should bump it up to 500 and lower DEF to 3300 or 3100 and itll all be good to me

[swordster75]

ok thanks for the feedback

[DaRocBeast]

no prob

[swordster75]

bump

[John A. Zoidberg]

The only reason that Labyrinth Wall has 3000 DEF is because it's a vanilla.

The DEF of this card makes it way OP'd. 3200 would not be much better. Try 2800 or 2700 because of the effect. Maybe pay 500 life points to balance it out (still keep the DEF at 2700-2800).

And here's how the effect should be:

"If you change this cards position, your opponent must skip their next Battle Phase. You must pay 300 Life Points to switch this card to defense position."

 

This effect is quite interesting, and I like it. Good work. You get a 7/10.

[swordster75]

The only reason that Labyrinth Wall has 3000 DEF is because it's a vanilla.

The DEF of this card makes it way OP'd. 3200 would not be much better. Try 2800 or 2700 because of the effect. Maybe pay 500 life points to balance it out (still keep the DEF at 2700-2800).

And here's how the effect should be:

"If you change this cards position, your opponent must skip their next Battle Phase. You must pay 300 Life Points to switch this card to defense position."

 

This effect is quite interesting, and I like it. Good work. You get a 7/10.

 

im assuming vanilla means that it has no effect

yeah i see where you're coming from, 2800 and 500 would work for me.

 

the revised effect you posted wouldnt work, it would be OPed because you could skip all of your opponents battle phases and it wouldnt matter if the card had 0 def or 3000 def

 

now, the effect i originally came up with involved skipping the opponents next battle phase if you switch from def to atk, but that would be too overpowered because once it got back to your turn, you could just switch back to def. and considering the high def of the card, it would probably last another turn, on which you could switch it back to atk to skip the opponents next battle phase.

so i made it skip the battle phase after their next battle phase

[AkatsukiPride!]

Nice-change its level to 8 and it might be a little more realistic. 6/10

[swordster75]

thanks and revised card has been posted

[John A. Zoidberg]

Here are some OCG fixes for you:

battle phase= Battle Phase

shift= change this cards position.

Defense Position= defense position.

Sacrifice 500 Life Points= pay 500 Life Points.

 

That should help.

[swordster75]

alright thanks

[twfr]

Change "shift" into "switch" and also lower its DEF and you have an Awesome first card!

[OK_GO_Charizard]

That's awesome first card, btw! I like the affect, so a 9/10 would suffice.

[DaRocBeast]

Nice-change its level to 8 and it might be a little more realistic. 6/10

 

yeah kinda true, hey nice signature Mrgoodbar122!