the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 I want to know if this song is any good or not. (If it`ll be any good, sing it while your reading it) Eagle`s Opposite My vision is stuck up in wind (Changed, Now quit saying stuff about it)I know there`s not much leftBut I standAwakeLooking forward to what I can findI see there is nothing left of themFor I have An ambitionI shall Find the way To the End I need to concentrateOn where I need to goI need to concentrateOn where My vision standsI feel That I have no wayTo concentrate no matter how I tryI feel like I`ve been stepped onRunning on broken glassBut I know I can find the real wayIf I open up my mindTo the posibilities........................... ......................... I have an ambitionTo clear my visionAnd change that decisionFrom running away from what I standI`m getting up to the beatI`m getting closer everytimeFollow my mindAnd where I lookI will find what I needTo clear my visionTo clear my visionI need to go under the cutTo find the special potionTo change it Mkay, tell me if it`s any good. Update: Kay, I have a new one. if you want to rate my first one, put 1 in your post. If you want to rate my second one, put 2 in your post, here it is Corruption Battle Phase: Insects of Death Army massacre stabbing my arteriesHave nothing left behind my skinAll my blood has been taken outI have no idea how I`m still hereAll of my mind has changedMaking me more insaneI have changed everything about meNow I will show you I`m in control I have everything, everything I needFor the final touch of sprinkling deathI will kill you, it won`t take longI promise you, I`ll make you wind up deadI have been searching, several daysLooking forward to what I findTo kill you I have, an ambition, that is, to murder youIt was a sacrifice I have madeTo make myself, strong enoughTo show you I have an equal appereanceMore than you knowI have equal charactaristicsAnd everything in betweenBut I`m sick of you, dissing my name Shut the heck (I changed the word to a more appropriate word) up, I`m in controlI have my life, and I have yoursI will kill you, I have found you, To murder you I shall Be what I`ve wanted to beSomething more than normalSomething I need to change Now it`s hereIt has been doneMassacred to deathLeaping chainsaws, in your chestDeath has come upon me as well But it was worth it Okay, this one was my best. I really hope you guys like it. Answering Frunk`s question: I like to express myself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 I want to know if this song is any good or not. (If it`ll be any good, sing it while your reading it) Eagle`s Opposite My vision is stuck up in wind (Changed, Now quit saying stuff about it)I know there`s not much leftBut I standAwakeLooking forward to what I can findI see there is nothing left of themFor I have An ambitionI shall Find the way To the End I need to concentrateOn where I need to goI need to concentrateOn where My vision standsI feel That I have no wayTo concentrate no matter how I tryI feel like I`ve been stepped onRunning on broken glassBut I know I can find the real wayIf I open up my mindTo the posibilities........................... ......................... I have an ambitionTo clear my visionAnd change that decisionFrom running away from what I standI`m getting up to the beatI`m getting closer everytimeFollow my mindAnd where I lookI will find what I needTo clear my visionTo clear my visionI need to go under the cutTo find the special potionTo change it Mkay, tell me if it`s any good. Update: Kay, I have a new one. if you want to rate my first one, put 1 in your post. If you want to rate my second one, put 2 in your post, here it is Corruption Battle Phase: Insects of Death Army massacre stabbing my arteriesHave nothing left behind my skinAll my blood has been taken outI have no idea how I`m still hereAll of my mind has changedMaking me more insaneI have changed everything about meNow I will show you I`m in control I have everything, everything I needFor the final touch of sprinkling deathI will kill you, it won`t take longI promise you, I`ll make you wind up deadI have been searching, several daysLooking forward to what I findTo kill you I have, an ambition, that is, to murder youIt was a sacrifice I have madeTo make myself, strong enoughTo show you I have an equal appereanceMore than you knowI have equal charactaristicsAnd everything in betweenBut I`m sick of you, dissing my name Shut the heck (I changed the word to a more appropriate word) up, I`m in controlI have my life, and I have yoursI will kill you, I have found you, To murder you I shall Be what I`ve wanted to beSomething more than normalSomething I need to change Now it`s hereIt has been doneMassacred to deathLeaping chainsaws, in your chestDeath has come upon me as well But it was worth it Okay, this one was my best. I really hope you guys like it. Answering Frunk`s question: I like to express myself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Not to bad, I'd find it hard to post an honest opinion with about at least a beat to give me an idea of how the song would really go. The first line is just a little odd, though, and sticks out compared to the rest of the song, I mean "My vision is drizzling in a whirlpool of death", can you explain this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Not to bad, I'd find it hard to post an honest opinion with about at least a beat to give me an idea of how the song would really go. The first line is just a little odd, though, and sticks out compared to the rest of the song, I mean "My vision is drizzling in a whirlpool of death", can you explain this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
High Definition Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 it's ok, i mean like frunk said "Water pool of death" whats that supposed to mean? but i like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
High Definition Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 it's ok, i mean like frunk said "Water pool of death" whats that supposed to mean? but i like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arekku_Koro Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Very Nice! Cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arekku_Koro Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Very Nice! Cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kizzi Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 It's good, but Frunk made an important point. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kizzi Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 It's good, but Frunk made an important point. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Well it certainly wouldnt fit in with Cyber-Goth music, theres so swear words, violent words, random words or quotes from 'Full Metal Jacket' lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Well it certainly wouldnt fit in with Cyber-Goth music, theres so swear words, violent words, random words or quotes from 'Full Metal Jacket' lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroshot Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 its hard to say with out the music behind it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroshot Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 its hard to say with out the music behind it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Good...The first line is a bit confusing just as Frunk had said... please explain it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Good...The first line is a bit confusing just as Frunk had said... please explain it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
flopsie Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Its kinda good I actually like Dax even has a band.He made a song called what's up with you!But your song 9.78/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
flopsie Posted January 20, 2008 Report Share Posted January 20, 2008 Its kinda good I actually like Dax even has a band.He made a song called what's up with you!But your song 9.78/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Okay, I`ve just made another song... Btw, guys thanks for the comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Okay, I`ve just made another song... Btw, guys thanks for the comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted January 21, 2008 Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Answering Frunk`s question: I like to express myself. OK... Does your personal vision drizzle in a whirlpool of death very often? Anyway, the second song is quite... odd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted January 21, 2008 Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Answering Frunk`s question: I like to express myself. OK... Does your personal vision drizzle in a whirlpool of death very often? Anyway, the second song is quite... odd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 I tormented the song by letting out my anger inside of it. Like it? xD And no it doesn`t, I just exhaggerated on how low my vision is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the Snakey Wolf Lord Posted January 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 I tormented the song by letting out my anger inside of it. Like it? xD And no it doesn`t, I just exhaggerated on how low my vision is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted January 21, 2008 Report Share Posted January 21, 2008 Tormented is right. It may be acceptable for someone older than yourself, but otherwise, it's not as good as the first. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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