Structure Deck Fiend Possesion

[Saberlad]

I'm here to show a collections ! Sorry if the card's name, text, or anything makes you want to vomit, just review and tell what you hate and i'll immediately, well not really, fix the card!
HP Doomed, thanks for your card images!
Without further ado, here's my card!
Boss Card:
[img]http://img834.imageshack.us/img834/3733/219345.jpg[/img]

I'll make sure i update this topic at least once a week!

[John A. Zoidberg]

Gah, so many errors.
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-There shouldn't be a comment in between "He" and "Who." It's not grammatically correct. (-0.5)
-It's way too OP'd. It'll get up to 5800 ATK, which is way too strong. 3800 ATK is too much on its own. Lower it to maybe 2400 and make the effect 200 ATK per monster. Also, scrap the unaffected to any other cards. It's just overkill. After all, it DOES only need 2 tributes. (-3)
-Your OCG is off. (-3) If you make the changed that I suggested (which you really should), here's what the effect should say-
"This card gains 200 ATK for each non-LIGHT monsters on your field."

All in all, you lost 6.5 points. You got a 3.5.
Work on it.

[Saberlad]

okay, i get what you mean! Thank you for reviewing! I'll fix the card!

[TheMan]

Instead of typing its name in the OCG, you could just state "This card" and it would be fine. Like Mecha Pedobear said, lower its ATK, and remove the last effect. And if you want to keep the effect, well at least make some Special Summon condition, and type cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Being like this, this card is Deity for Vennominaga